I See the Seafoam
The tsunami in Lituya Bay from the ocean's point of view.43 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your poem is well written describing the ocean in its different stages and the effect it has on the earth. You have chosen good pictures to illustrate your words.
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Your poem is well written describing the ocean in its different stages and the effect it has on the earth. You have chosen good pictures to illustrate your words.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that captures clearly the path of the water and waves. You have a strong steady beat in your poetic form that makes the ocean come alive. I also like how this poem is from the viewpoint of the tsunami.
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You have a vivid use of words that captures clearly the path of the water and waves. You have a strong steady beat in your poetic form that makes the ocean come alive. I also like how this poem is from the viewpoint of the tsunami.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from susand3022
Hi Thomas,
This is really good. I grew up on the ocean, have gone through my share of hurricanes and so, I know seafoam when I know it!
You've drawn a really good picture with your words here. Well done.
Susan :)
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Hi Thomas,
This is really good. I grew up on the ocean, have gone through my share of hurricanes and so, I know seafoam when I know it!
You've drawn a really good picture with your words here. Well done.
Susan :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is another great poem from you. The first two stanzas are nicely written about the ebb and flow of the waves and tides. The last one is well done on a tsunami. I was 12 when it happened. I don't remember much. I do know people talked about the sound it made and how loud it was.
If you ever revisit the last stanza, you might think about incorporating sound into the verse. Excellent work. Terry.
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This is another great poem from you. The first two stanzas are nicely written about the ebb and flow of the waves and tides. The last one is well done on a tsunami. I was 12 when it happened. I don't remember much. I do know people talked about the sound it made and how loud it was.
If you ever revisit the last stanza, you might think about incorporating sound into the verse. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from Begin Again
A very creative and interesting look at the tsunami from within its own boundaries. We usually look at the water as calming and beautiful, but forces can deem it to be destructive and fierce. Well done. Thank you for sharing your vision.
Smiles, Carol
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A very creative and interesting look at the tsunami from within its own boundaries. We usually look at the water as calming and beautiful, but forces can deem it to be destructive and fierce. Well done. Thank you for sharing your vision.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Takes a very unusual point of view. The short lines and pace of the poem evoke a sense of turmoil and chaos. This mood is re-enforced by the powerful imagery and sound devices such as internal rhyme.
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Takes a very unusual point of view. The short lines and pace of the poem evoke a sense of turmoil and chaos. This mood is re-enforced by the powerful imagery and sound devices such as internal rhyme.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very photographic, dramatic and surrealistic. It really depicts the chaos left in 1958 on the shores of Alaska. Brilliant approach and style. You created a realistic atmosphere.
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Very photographic, dramatic and surrealistic. It really depicts the chaos left in 1958 on the shores of Alaska. Brilliant approach and style. You created a realistic atmosphere.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This verse's POV is an intriguing one. Very creative.
"Seafoam in streets, in houses, in people,"
"Salty goodbyes" are noteworthy.
I appreciate the overall presentation.
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This verse's POV is an intriguing one. Very creative.
"Seafoam in streets, in houses, in people,"
"Salty goodbyes" are noteworthy.
I appreciate the overall presentation.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, wow!! Great description of devastation and the wild ride that was this overwhelming onslaught. Water is just remarkable, isn't it? Such a two-edged sword of powerful beauty and overpowering disaster. You captured it perfectly. Well done.
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Oh, wow!! Great description of devastation and the wild ride that was this overwhelming onslaught. Water is just remarkable, isn't it? Such a two-edged sword of powerful beauty and overpowering disaster. You captured it perfectly. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
Comment from amahra
The poem is beautifully written, and the rhyming is awesome. I also loved the artwork you chose for your writing.
But one day, in Lituya Bay,
The cycle ends another way.
An uprising of dreamers
With tough, seismic schemers,
Devastate systems and shores,
Wisdoms and floors.
Seafoam in streets,
in houses, in people.
Salt goodbyes, salty eyes,
I see the seafoam. [This last stanza is very powerful.]
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The poem is beautifully written, and the rhyming is awesome. I also loved the artwork you chose for your writing.
But one day, in Lituya Bay,
The cycle ends another way.
An uprising of dreamers
With tough, seismic schemers,
Devastate systems and shores,
Wisdoms and floors.
Seafoam in streets,
in houses, in people.
Salt goodbyes, salty eyes,
I see the seafoam. [This last stanza is very powerful.]
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
