I See the Seafoam
The tsunami in Lituya Bay from the ocean's point of view.43 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading and enjoyed the metaphors. You did a great job writing the description. I keep checking to see if it's a contest entry, it should be.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading and enjoyed the metaphors. You did a great job writing the description. I keep checking to see if it's a contest entry, it should be.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Damn. This is a thinker. I enjoyed the first two stanzas and the metaphoric use of waves to describe the tenuous nature of liberty. Then the turn in stanza three to the tidal wave that crushes Lituya Bay (which then becomes part of the United States only a few months later). Very impressed that a young man in New York would even be aware of this bit of history. Well done.
Damn. This is a thinker. I enjoyed the first two stanzas and the metaphoric use of waves to describe the tenuous nature of liberty. Then the turn in stanza three to the tidal wave that crushes Lituya Bay (which then becomes part of the United States only a few months later). Very impressed that a young man in New York would even be aware of this bit of history. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Jesse James Doty
There is a good flow to this poem. It rocks and swells just as the ocean does and I can see by your line above the title that this is representative of the ocean's point of view.
Well done and welcome to Fanstory!
I hope you get a feel for the reviews you receive and learn by writing. Thanks for showing your talent for poetry.
Jesse
There is a good flow to this poem. It rocks and swells just as the ocean does and I can see by your line above the title that this is representative of the ocean's point of view.
Well done and welcome to Fanstory!
I hope you get a feel for the reviews you receive and learn by writing. Thanks for showing your talent for poetry.
Jesse
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from jmdg1954
I thoroughly enjoyed you poem regarding the tsunami from the oceans perspective.
The descriptive nature made me like I was part of the action.
Very well composed.
Cheers, John
I thoroughly enjoyed you poem regarding the tsunami from the oceans perspective.
The descriptive nature made me like I was part of the action.
Very well composed.
Cheers, John
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Sherry SG
I enjoyed reading this poem. The pictures complement the writing well. The description of the tsunami is apt and innovative.
However, I felt that the description- "The tsunami in Lituya Bay from the ocean's point of view" is only applicable to the first verse and not the rest, hence perhaps you could remove that part from the description? It would be very interesting to read the whole poem from the POV of the ocean. Nevertheless, the picture you have painted is unique. It would help if you increased the font size too for greater ease of reading.
I enjoyed reading this poem. The pictures complement the writing well. The description of the tsunami is apt and innovative.
However, I felt that the description- "The tsunami in Lituya Bay from the ocean's point of view" is only applicable to the first verse and not the rest, hence perhaps you could remove that part from the description? It would be very interesting to read the whole poem from the POV of the ocean. Nevertheless, the picture you have painted is unique. It would help if you increased the font size too for greater ease of reading.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from JLR
Thomas a good start here with this poem. You do have some spag throughout that needs amended. Your font size would be better if you made it larger, you have something here to work with. Good luck with your writing.
Thomas a good start here with this poem. You do have some spag throughout that needs amended. Your font size would be better if you made it larger, you have something here to work with. Good luck with your writing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write about the wild ocean spilling into our lives and causing devastation. I enjoyed your well chosen words Thomas, these disasters are responsible for loss of life and destruction, love Dolly x
A poignant write about the wild ocean spilling into our lives and causing devastation. I enjoyed your well chosen words Thomas, these disasters are responsible for loss of life and destruction, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Zue65
The picture of the waves complemented the message intended by the author for the readers. I like best the following lines: an uprising of dreamers, with tough seismic schemers, devastate systems and shores, wisdom and floors. Thanks for sharing.
The picture of the waves complemented the message intended by the author for the readers. I like best the following lines: an uprising of dreamers, with tough seismic schemers, devastate systems and shores, wisdom and floors. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written it mixed a blended host of seafaric words and images.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
This was well written it mixed a blended host of seafaric words and images.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from royowen
I like the way you have personified the sea. It's sort of like being in an ancient house and wish the walls could speak, highlighting the acts and behaviours that had occurred there in the days gone by, but alas, only God knows, well done, blessings Roy
I like the way you have personified the sea. It's sort of like being in an ancient house and wish the walls could speak, highlighting the acts and behaviours that had occurred there in the days gone by, but alas, only God knows, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022