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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Three Rodent Cousins "Short tales
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
I am a little slow on the uptake, I did not get the capybara's name until the very end. A little gruesome but imaginative, clever, and interesting take on a child's fairytale.
Very best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I am a little slow on the uptake, I did not get the capybara's name until the very end. A little gruesome but imaginative, clever, and interesting take on a child's fairytale.
Very best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Mary. Don't feel like the Lone Ranger; no one had a easy time with this.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, Bill! This story is an interesting take on a child's tale. I have to appreciate the imaginative and creative ends of this one. That being said, while its genius rests on the tale of "The Three Billy Goats Bluff," I'm positive a child would have more questions than answers. Nevertheless, I love the way you write! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Hi, Bill! This story is an interesting take on a child's tale. I have to appreciate the imaginative and creative ends of this one. That being said, while its genius rests on the tale of "The Three Billy Goats Bluff," I'm positive a child would have more questions than answers. Nevertheless, I love the way you write! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, John, I lean towards the satirical retelling of children's stories, which are probably not suitable for young readers.
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Gotcha! I enjoy whatever you write! As a satirical rewrite, it's perfect!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! What an imaginative story. Yuck! I had never heard of a capybara, and watched a YouTube video of a capybara and a dog. That thing is enormous. Your story is fast passed and engrossing, with a satisfying, humorous ending.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Wow! What an imaginative story. Yuck! I had never heard of a capybara, and watched a YouTube video of a capybara and a dog. That thing is enormous. Your story is fast passed and engrossing, with a satisfying, humorous ending.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, LJ. It is a parody of Three Billy Goats Gruff.
Comment from damommy
Well, now we see her name is very appropriate. Your characters are delightful. I was glad to see the snake got his comeuppance. Good to see a picture of them all.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Well, now we see her name is very appropriate. Your characters are delightful. I was glad to see the snake got his comeuppance. Good to see a picture of them all.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Yvonne
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed this chilling write about these three rodents and maybe this will become a famous fairy tale Bill? An inventive story and the snake got his comeuppance! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I enjoyed this chilling write about these three rodents and maybe this will become a famous fairy tale Bill? An inventive story and the snake got his comeuppance! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, it started out like a fairytale with the rodents of increasing size and with the smallest going over the bridge first. I thought we were going to have a Goldilocks and the three bears fairytail ... until the snake ate the gerbil, then followed it up with the rat and finally the Capibara entered the scene on the bridge and forthwith bludgeoned the snake to death with his feet. In true Bill Schott fashion he doesn't even think of rescuing his cousins, but with the snake gone, Too-dey-yoo-dye becomes master of his own domain on the other side of the bridge, and the memory of his cousins is fast fading.
You rock, Bill!
Jay
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Well, it started out like a fairytale with the rodents of increasing size and with the smallest going over the bridge first. I thought we were going to have a Goldilocks and the three bears fairytail ... until the snake ate the gerbil, then followed it up with the rat and finally the Capibara entered the scene on the bridge and forthwith bludgeoned the snake to death with his feet. In true Bill Schott fashion he doesn't even think of rescuing his cousins, but with the snake gone, Too-dey-yoo-dye becomes master of his own domain on the other side of the bridge, and the memory of his cousins is fast fading.
You rock, Bill!
Jay
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Jay. This was a revamping of The Three Billy Goats Gruff, but it got darker as I went along.
Comment from nomi338
An entertaining take on a somewhat familiar tale. I love the retelling, reimagining of old fairy tales. I see it as putting a new coat of paint an a house that is being updated, new floors, new doors, modern windows, etc. etc.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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An entertaining take on a somewhat familiar tale. I love the retelling, reimagining of old fairy tales. I see it as putting a new coat of paint an a house that is being updated, new floors, new doors, modern windows, etc. etc.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thanks, nomi
Comment from lancellot
Well, I read it, so I have to review it. I won't lie to you. While this is written well, structurally and grammatically. I don't see the point of the story. If it is a take on another tale, perhaps children's tale, I don't know of it. As a stand alone, I don't get it. Not saying every story has to be Earth shaking.
I suppose this okay.
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Well, I read it, so I have to review it. I won't lie to you. While this is written well, structurally and grammatically. I don't see the point of the story. If it is a take on another tale, perhaps children's tale, I don't know of it. As a stand alone, I don't get it. Not saying every story has to be Earth shaking.
I suppose this okay.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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The Three Billy Goats Gruff. Look it up.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, this is kind of a gruesome story, The ending is different. I don't think this is a story one would read to their children. It is written in a skillful manner, which makes it easy to follow. Nice work.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Well, this is kind of a gruesome story, The ending is different. I don't think this is a story one would read to their children. It is written in a skillful manner, which makes it easy to follow. Nice work.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thanks, PBB.
Comment from Heather Knight
Thanks for making me laugh.
You're great at making up names, your stories are very original and your dialogues good and true to life.
I enjoyed this very much.
Great work.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thanks for making me laugh.
You're great at making up names, your stories are very original and your dialogues good and true to life.
I enjoyed this very much.
Great work.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much, Heather.
