Tears
When your sadness drives him away12 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Heather,
This is a heartfelt and well formatted poem about lost love and the grief and doubt that follows the break up. At the end it could be that she found earthly love again or maybe divine love.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Hi Heather,
This is a heartfelt and well formatted poem about lost love and the grief and doubt that follows the break up. At the end it could be that she found earthly love again or maybe divine love.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your review, Joan. Have a lovely Christmas. xxx
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You are most kindly welcome, Heather.
Merry Christmas.
Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A sad poem with a sad ending that had me thinking she was suicidal. Beautifully poignant artwork and free verse Heather, full of emotion. Good luck in the contest, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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A sad poem with a sad ending that had me thinking she was suicidal. Beautifully poignant artwork and free verse Heather, full of emotion. Good luck in the contest, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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She wasn't suicidal, she loved life, but had a mental illness her partner couldn't deal with, so he chose the easy way out.
Thanks for reading. xxx
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful presentation and poem. The painting is captivating. Lovely imagery and sad poem.
Unfortunately. Im an expert of failed relationships. My men picker is broken. LoL
Now I'm happy to be single.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Wonderful presentation and poem. The painting is captivating. Lovely imagery and sad poem.
Unfortunately. Im an expert of failed relationships. My men picker is broken. LoL
Now I'm happy to be single.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Well, at least you can laugh at the situation, which can't be said for everybody. It's definitely better to be single than in an unhappy relationship.
Thanks for reading.x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
My favourite stanza is this one:
you know your pain
pushed him away.
your sighs
drew holes
in his affection.
These words alone carry your poem and the meaning is clear here. We are our own worst enemy when it comes to failed relationships. This is a deep and meaningful write Heather and I loved your understanding of the heart here.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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My favourite stanza is this one:
you know your pain
pushed him away.
your sighs
drew holes
in his affection.
These words alone carry your poem and the meaning is clear here. We are our own worst enemy when it comes to failed relationships. This is a deep and meaningful write Heather and I loved your understanding of the heart here.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Hello Dolly,
I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
And thanks so much for the extra star!
Hugs,
MJ
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You are most welcome Heather x
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
A stunning poem and perfect image choice.
The style seems perfect for the story as it unfolds to capture and hold my attention right to the end.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Wow!
A stunning poem and perfect image choice.
The style seems perfect for the story as it unfolds to capture and hold my attention right to the end.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for this beautiful review, Shirley.
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You're welcome
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love "straw hair and sky eyes" instead of blonde and blue.
Talk of golden rainbows and promised lands cause me to think that there is more to this poem than a broken relationship. But perhaps I misunderstand.
Regardless, it reads beautifully and everything from the image to the centered font to the background color give it a lovely expression.
Glad to see you writing and posting again!
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I love "straw hair and sky eyes" instead of blonde and blue.
Talk of golden rainbows and promised lands cause me to think that there is more to this poem than a broken relationship. But perhaps I misunderstand.
Regardless, it reads beautifully and everything from the image to the centered font to the background color give it a lovely expression.
Glad to see you writing and posting again!
Pam
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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It will be just for one week. I'm on holiday and trying to make the most of it. But I'll be back when my Christmas holidays start.
And you're right. It's a broken relationship, but it broke down because she was mentally ill and he was not selfless enough to stay with her. However, she's resilient and will achieve whatever goals she sets for herself.
Thanks for reading. x
Comment from royowen
Such a sad, sad poem Maria. But beautifully scribed as a really a ballad should be, this is language rich, I would to read it in Spanish, such a dramatic language, although this is superb, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Such a sad, sad poem Maria. But beautifully scribed as a really a ballad should be, this is language rich, I would to read it in Spanish, such a dramatic language, although this is superb, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I wouldn't be able to write it in Spanish, Roy. My Spanish nowadays is very limited even though it's my mother tongue because I've been using English most of my life and most of the time.
Thanks for reading.
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I understand Maria
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A heartfelt analysis of unrequited love. The poem has an elegaic quality but ends on a positive note. The form and 'shape' of the poem with its changing forms adds to the note of loss and uncertainty.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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A heartfelt analysis of unrequited love. The poem has an elegaic quality but ends on a positive note. The form and 'shape' of the poem with its changing forms adds to the note of loss and uncertainty.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your perceptive review, Sarah.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I believe firmly, I have to, that anyone can overcome anything. It's all a question of fear and desperation. To me your poem shows quiet determination. Follow your narratator. (S)he is wise. Kate xx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I believe firmly, I have to, that anyone can overcome anything. It's all a question of fear and desperation. To me your poem shows quiet determination. Follow your narratator. (S)he is wise. Kate xx
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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I do agree. Thanks for reading. Enjoy the rest of your weekend. xx
Comment from lyenochka
A powerful poem of reassurance. I liked the "iris smile" and "the heather
under your feet
and the clouds
above your fuzzy mind."
This has elements all your favorite things. But the "golden rainbow" puzzles me. I hope it's symbolic of a happy future and not of death.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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A powerful poem of reassurance. I liked the "iris smile" and "the heather
under your feet
and the clouds
above your fuzzy mind."
This has elements all your favorite things. But the "golden rainbow" puzzles me. I hope it's symbolic of a happy future and not of death.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Happy future. Achieving her dreams. I'm feeling quite well at the moment anyway. I do hope it lasts. I finally feel like myself after two tough years.
Thanks so much for reading.x
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I'm so happy to know you are feeling yourself again! 💖💖
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Thanks so much, Helen. So do I. Now I have to cross my fingers for it to last and do everything in my power to stay positive.
Sending hugs.
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I hope it lasts, too! But now that you have overcome, you know you will be victorious again because you're stronger now.
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And it's not the first time. My life has always been like this, but I wasn't diagnosed till I was 50. At least now I have an explanation. Besides, I think my new psychologist is helping a lot. I've always been very reticent (I didn't believe in therapy) and although I'd tried in the past I had never established a connection with the therapists. This girl is different though, even though she's the same age as my son! Thanks for caring.
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I'm glad you found a good psychologist. They are hard to find.
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True.:)
