Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 172 "A Time of Sadness"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
16 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A moving piece of writing, detailing the suffering ad eventual death of the narrator's father. The traumas leading to his death are shocking! The conversational style and the inclusion of the author's deceased husband are very emotive.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
  |
A moving piece of writing, detailing the suffering ad eventual death of the narrator's father. The traumas leading to his death are shocking! The conversational style and the inclusion of the author's deceased husband are very emotive.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for the review. My chapters are usually that negative. This was a low spot in my life that really got to me.
Beth
-
UNDERSTANDABLY!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"it's beginning" should be its beginning.
Arrived on a spaceship illustrates how psycho they were.
Typical poor nursing home care. Sometimes, that care can lead to ealier demise of patients than they would otherwise suffer. Many are left laying in a bed, forgotten, and unattended.
This autobiography continues to be interesting, and will be a special remembrance of the two of you.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
|
"it's beginning" should be its beginning.
Arrived on a spaceship illustrates how psycho they were.
Typical poor nursing home care. Sometimes, that care can lead to ealier demise of patients than they would otherwise suffer. Many are left laying in a bed, forgotten, and unattended.
This autobiography continues to be interesting, and will be a special remembrance of the two of you.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
-
Thank you, Brett. I really appreciate the review and comments, although I realize my memoir can't compete with yours for drama and interest.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm sure it's hard to think back to times like these, even after such a long time. Of course, to you and I, I'm guessing it really doesn't seem like that long ago. But it's hard for me to imagine that you can remember such details so far back. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
|
I'm sure it's hard to think back to times like these, even after such a long time. Of course, to you and I, I'm guessing it really doesn't seem like that long ago. But it's hard for me to imagine that you can remember such details so far back. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
-
Some things tend to stick even when you try to erase them. This wasn't one of my favorite chapters to write. I really appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job writing this heart-wrenching chapter,
Beth. I know it was difficult for you. I liked how you included
events happening at the same time in the US as your chapter.
The hospitals and nursing home failed your family big time.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
University in Texas--no capital on university
arrived on a space ship --spaceship
as aliens being---aliens from another planet
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
|
You did a great job writing this heart-wrenching chapter,
Beth. I know it was difficult for you. I liked how you included
events happening at the same time in the US as your chapter.
The hospitals and nursing home failed your family big time.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
University in Texas--no capital on university
arrived on a space ship --spaceship
as aliens being---aliens from another planet
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you, Jan. I really appreciate the nice review. I had something of a writer's block by not really wanting to write this chapter. I'm glad I finally got it out there. Thanks for the help.
Beth
-
😊🐈⬛
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Heartrending. An excruciating death after prolonged misery and callous treatment. Masterful interweaving of the Heaven's Gate storyline. You did thorough research.
After having spent so many years running a grocery store, there were still a lot of acquaintances in Newton who came to pay their respects.
Sugg:
DAD spent many years running a grocery store, so there were still a lot of acquaintances in Newton who came to pay their respects.
struggled to breath=>breathe
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
|
Heartrending. An excruciating death after prolonged misery and callous treatment. Masterful interweaving of the Heaven's Gate storyline. You did thorough research.
After having spent so many years running a grocery store, there were still a lot of acquaintances in Newton who came to pay their respects.
Sugg:
DAD spent many years running a grocery store, so there were still a lot of acquaintances in Newton who came to pay their respects.
struggled to breath=>breathe
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you Elizabeth. As always, I really appreciate you. Yes the sentence does sound better that way. I changed it.
Beth
-
One trick to check a sentence with an introductory clause (followed by a comma) is to reverse the clauses abutting the comma:
There were still a lot of acquaintances in Newton, after having spent so many years running a grocery store, who came to pay their respects.
Then you can see that it sounds as if the acquaintances were the ones running the store.
This sort of error is rife -- I encounter at least one in most professionally published works.
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very moving story, and you have conveyed the distress and confusion surrounding your father's death very well, as well as your great love for him. Well done.
Wendy
Typos: "evelutionary level" (evolutionary)
"struggled to breath" ("breathe")
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
|
This is a very moving story, and you have conveyed the distress and confusion surrounding your father's death very well, as well as your great love for him. Well done.
Wendy
Typos: "evelutionary level" (evolutionary)
"struggled to breath" ("breathe")
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you Wendy, I really appreciate the review and your nice comments. Thank you for calling my attention to the spelling errors so I could correct them.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
Understandable why this would be painful to write. As always I like the inclusion of news events. A well-written detailed event of the your father's battle with Death. Always good to hear the funeral was well attended. A resident here lost her husband of 68 years Saturday nite when he died peacefully in his sleep.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
 |
Understandable why this would be painful to write. As always I like the inclusion of news events. A well-written detailed event of the your father's battle with Death. Always good to hear the funeral was well attended. A resident here lost her husband of 68 years Saturday nite when he died peacefully in his sleep.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you so much. We all have to deal with death. It is easier when they die in their sleep and harder when we watch as they struggle and suffer. I've had some writer's block lately because I dreader recalling this. I'm glad I'm passed it. I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A very sad occurrence told in a straightforward and poignant manner. You bring this tragedy to life with the cultural context at the time, the details of the stay in the hospital and the nursing home's response, and the giflt to you of having the details of the burial pre-arranged. Well-written.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
|
A very sad occurrence told in a straightforward and poignant manner. You bring this tragedy to life with the cultural context at the time, the details of the stay in the hospital and the nursing home's response, and the giflt to you of having the details of the burial pre-arranged. Well-written.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you so much for a fine review and comments. Death is something that is never easy, but their is no way to avoid it. We can only hope the passing will go smoothly. My mom died without awakening from her coma so it easier on me. My husband didn't seem in pain when he died. Sometimes it is the loved ones who suffer most.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for recalling this very hard memory. I'm just about to face the same things with my dad. It was feared that he was aspirating so they didn't give him anything by mouth in the hospital. But now at the nursing home, he's eating again.
I guess Christy panicked about having witnessed death? I'm sorry that you had to go through all that. But that you were there for him and could tenderly tell him you loved him made his passing so much better.
Your recalling that cult's story was really spooky. And now we have even more of those crazies proliferating on the internet today.
Suggestions:
"the evelutionary level above humans" (evolutionary)
Nettles transitioned unexpected through the death (unexpectedly?)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
|
Thank you for recalling this very hard memory. I'm just about to face the same things with my dad. It was feared that he was aspirating so they didn't give him anything by mouth in the hospital. But now at the nursing home, he's eating again.
I guess Christy panicked about having witnessed death? I'm sorry that you had to go through all that. But that you were there for him and could tenderly tell him you loved him made his passing so much better.
Your recalling that cult's story was really spooky. And now we have even more of those crazies proliferating on the internet today.
Suggestions:
"the evelutionary level above humans" (evolutionary)
Nettles transitioned unexpected through the death (unexpectedly?)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
-
Thank you Helen, It is hard to know you loved one is suffering and no one is doing anything to help with the pain. Mom died with reawakening from her comma and that made it easier. I hope Dad passing won't envolve so much pain and trauma. If he is eating, maybe he is so near death. I'm praying for you and for God's will.
Beth
-
Thank you so much for your prayers, Beth!! 💖💖
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Beth, this must have been so hard for your family and for you especially. I am so sorry.
I'm appalled how the two institutions appeared to play yoyo with your dad's life. Sorry, I'm not being flippant, but it just doesn't seem right what they did, having no respect for your dad nor for your feelings. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
|
Oh, Beth, this must have been so hard for your family and for you especially. I am so sorry.
I'm appalled how the two institutions appeared to play yoyo with your dad's life. Sorry, I'm not being flippant, but it just doesn't seem right what they did, having no respect for your dad nor for your feelings. Ulla xx
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
-
Thank you, Ulla. It was a bad time. I felt I got bad deals from both hospital as well as the nursing home. I really hurts to watch someone you care about suffer and noone will do anything. Emergency rooms seem to the worst places you can be.
Beth
