Around The Way.
Typical Day...3 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like your poem. Yes, no doubt there were fireworks around his house! I know this is most likely fiction but I'm seldom surprised by what children say. They come up with some of the funniest things because they are so innocent and they tend to take things literally. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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I like your poem. Yes, no doubt there were fireworks around his house! I know this is most likely fiction but I'm seldom surprised by what children say. They come up with some of the funniest things because they are so innocent and they tend to take things literally. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Hello Mary: I thank you for your review. You are appreciated. This poem is fictional and meant for poking fun only. God bless you, Mary. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This builds up to an entertaining climax! This is all the more entertaining because of the setting, young chiIdren who appear innocent! The response is rather unexpected! The change in structure at the end of the piece strengthens the humour.
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This builds up to an entertaining climax! This is all the more entertaining because of the setting, young chiIdren who appear innocent! The response is rather unexpected! The change in structure at the end of the piece strengthens the humour.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Karyn2
Gold!!!!! That is very funny and cleverly constructed. Just a small query about the wording of the punch line :"my sister didn't come on her's this month."
Should it possibly be "my sister's didn't arrive this month"? Thanks for the laugh!
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Gold!!!!! That is very funny and cleverly constructed. Just a small query about the wording of the punch line :"my sister didn't come on her's this month."
Should it possibly be "my sister's didn't arrive this month"? Thanks for the laugh!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
