Smog frogs
Smog is caused by smoke and fog5 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your poem. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I really did enjoy reading your poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your poem. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I really did enjoy reading your poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting short poem that meets the contest rules. The flow is good. The poem stays on point and the rhymes are unforced.
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I might think of switching the last two words in the poem so it would read: smokey, bog smog.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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An interesting short poem that meets the contest rules. The flow is good. The poem stays on point and the rhymes are unforced.
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I might think of switching the last two words in the poem so it would read: smokey, bog smog.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 1-6-1 poetry contest. The text is a great size. I like that it is written in the color green for the green vegetation and the frog. The message is clearly stated. You even got a rhyme involved. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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This is a good entry into the 1-6-1 poetry contest. The text is a great size. I like that it is written in the color green for the green vegetation and the frog. The message is clearly stated. You even got a rhyme involved. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much
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You are welcome.
Comment from JPGeo
The poem creates a sensory experience for the reader in just a few short lines. Swamps, amphibians and such have a mysterious, primordial vibe. That scene in Star Wars with Yoda in the mist of his home world was like that. Best wishes with the contest,
John
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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The poem creates a sensory experience for the reader in just a few short lines. Swamps, amphibians and such have a mysterious, primordial vibe. That scene in Star Wars with Yoda in the mist of his home world was like that. Best wishes with the contest,
John
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Frank Malley
Having entered the same contest, I should perhaps disqualify myself from rating this poem. 8 syllables is not a lot to work with, it achieves what it wishes to: the image of a frog in the smog. Well, smog is reality, and better a smoggy frog than no frogs, albeit a foggy frog is a happier encounter than a smoggy one. I was reminded that my poem needed to rhyme; I don't think I can make it work, so my contestant poem is doomed to fail by a failure of conformance, not the worst of the criticisms that can be made. I think that often free verse permits the better poem than the concessions in logic that forced rhyme choices can mandate.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Having entered the same contest, I should perhaps disqualify myself from rating this poem. 8 syllables is not a lot to work with, it achieves what it wishes to: the image of a frog in the smog. Well, smog is reality, and better a smoggy frog than no frogs, albeit a foggy frog is a happier encounter than a smoggy one. I was reminded that my poem needed to rhyme; I don't think I can make it work, so my contestant poem is doomed to fail by a failure of conformance, not the worst of the criticisms that can be made. I think that often free verse permits the better poem than the concessions in logic that forced rhyme choices can mandate.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Ok thank you
