Lotta Prep Time
A long prep time2 total reviews
Comment from Karyn2
I really enjoyed the way you used the Title to add another layer of meaning and give impact to your 1-6-1 entry. Clever idea, punchy 3nd line that drops a great moment of revelation. It really is"wow!" To ponder our conception and place in this world! Amazing work!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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I really enjoyed the way you used the Title to add another layer of meaning and give impact to your 1-6-1 entry. Clever idea, punchy 3nd line that drops a great moment of revelation. It really is"wow!" To ponder our conception and place in this world! Amazing work!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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I had to change "Wow" to "Whew" so that it would meet the contest prescription; also the second line's ending.It's not as good a poem, now, but it still limps towards possible sense. Thank you for your affirmation of my instincts. Frank
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Ah yes of course! That still works though. Good pick up. Good luck
Comment from jessizero
I did like your poem, but it doesn't seem to rhyme as it should. I am still impressed by your syllable count. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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I did like your poem, but it doesn't seem to rhyme as it should. I am still impressed by your syllable count. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Yeah, I realized that the rhyme had been forfeited, so I went back and changed it into a lousier but - God be praised - rhyming poem. Thank you, Jessie. I always need to pay attention more to the rules.
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I went back and read the updated poem. I think you did a great job
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Thank you very much. Frank
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His talents had yielded nor wealth nor fame, yet he
Rose in the morning and stepped to the game.
