Stories from Morrison
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Comment from BethShelby
I guess that is one way to bring home the groceries. If moma snake is starving, she probably won't mind some partially digested frog. I guess maybe sin didn't enter the world that day, thanks to Willie.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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I guess that is one way to bring home the groceries. If moma snake is starving, she probably won't mind some partially digested frog. I guess maybe sin didn't enter the world that day, thanks to Willie.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Willy Worm. I guess he deserves a stand-alone story.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Well written Bill,
The sad thing is man is so often that fickle and the master of poor choices,'
I enjoyed your tale and love the illustration.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Well written Bill,
The sad thing is man is so often that fickle and the master of poor choices,'
I enjoyed your tale and love the illustration.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Shirley
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This reads like a fable - a form of writing with a very long history! The ironic twist at the end adds to the humour! The Old Testament offers many opportunities for the modern writer. I really enjoyed this!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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This reads like a fable - a form of writing with a very long history! The ironic twist at the end adds to the humour! The Old Testament offers many opportunities for the modern writer. I really enjoyed this!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Sarah
Comment from Ricky1024
An interesting story and interesting lesson at the end.
Another way to look at the Adam and Eve story from Genesis.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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An interesting story and interesting lesson at the end.
Another way to look at the Adam and Eve story from Genesis.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Doc
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Now you made the Snake innocent, blamed by his mother, and all he was doing was grocery shopping, except for getting revenge on the mouse who ate his pet's brother, Wally. Fun stuff, Bill.
Suggestions:
"Well, hey there mouse. (there, Mouse)
"A talking worm? Is he okay." (okay?) question mark instead of period.
Snake sprang it the mouse (at the mouse?)
picked another and ate it." (no end quotes needed)
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Lol. Now you made the Snake innocent, blamed by his mother, and all he was doing was grocery shopping, except for getting revenge on the mouse who ate his pet's brother, Wally. Fun stuff, Bill.
Suggestions:
"Well, hey there mouse. (there, Mouse)
"A talking worm? Is he okay." (okay?) question mark instead of period.
Snake sprang it the mouse (at the mouse?)
picked another and ate it." (no end quotes needed)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Helen. I guessI posted too quickly.
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We feel the urge when midnight in New Jersey approaches! I totally get it.
