Set me Free
Freedom from struggles, racism and cruelty of this world.19 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am sorry you are suffering racism in this world and I think it exists in America more than in England where we are more liberal toward ethnic groups and accept everyone on equal terms. There was a case in Scotland, a murder of an asian man by white guys and it took nearly 20 years to get justice for the family and convict the murderer. The new generation are growing up with more acceptance thankfully. A poignant write filled with frustration which I can understand, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I am sorry you are suffering racism in this world and I think it exists in America more than in England where we are more liberal toward ethnic groups and accept everyone on equal terms. There was a case in Scotland, a murder of an asian man by white guys and it took nearly 20 years to get justice for the family and convict the murderer. The new generation are growing up with more acceptance thankfully. A poignant write filled with frustration which I can understand, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Happy Holiday Dolly. Always good to hear from you.
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The same to you Charity, I hope you have a wonderful time x x x
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The same to you Charity, I hope you have a wonderful time x x x
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The same to you Charity, I hope you have a wonderful time x x x
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The same to you Charity, I hope you have a wonderful time x x x
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Freedom?
Who has freedom in this country?
I don't!
You don't!
No woman does!
The day the Supreme Court took away my right to chose, I was no longer free.
As women we do not have the constitutional right to our bodies....
When are second class citizens.
When you speak of freedom, my mind goes to the injustice of all woman.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Freedom?
Who has freedom in this country?
I don't!
You don't!
No woman does!
The day the Supreme Court took away my right to chose, I was no longer free.
As women we do not have the constitutional right to our bodies....
When are second class citizens.
When you speak of freedom, my mind goes to the injustice of all woman.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Yes injustice of women is huge. Give me liberty or give me death. Thanks for sharing.
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My sentiment exactly!
Hope you have a joyous holiday!
Comment from Teri7
Charity, This is a very well written, but very sad poem you have penned. But the words at the end are very promising. There is hope on Jesus Christ. He is the chain breaker. I hope things get better for you because from your words it makes me so sad what you have had to go through. love and prayers, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Charity, This is a very well written, but very sad poem you have penned. But the words at the end are very promising. There is hope on Jesus Christ. He is the chain breaker. I hope things get better for you because from your words it makes me so sad what you have had to go through. love and prayers, Teri
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your lovely review. Happy Holidays.
Comment from royowen
The best therapy of all is helping others overcome their disablement, victory over these things is shifting focus from one's own suffering and focusing on someone else's, believe it or not. After being dumped by my first love, then my best friend committing suicide, I was in a downward depressive spiral for 18 months, until I decided life was worth living, so I did. Nicely written Charity, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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The best therapy of all is helping others overcome their disablement, victory over these things is shifting focus from one's own suffering and focusing on someone else's, believe it or not. After being dumped by my first love, then my best friend committing suicide, I was in a downward depressive spiral for 18 months, until I decided life was worth living, so I did. Nicely written Charity, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Merry Christmas and Happy New Year my friend. Thanks for your feedback.
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Same to you Charity
Comment from susand3022
Hi Charity,
You have said some very powerful things here. A lot of your poem has a nice rhythm, but it does get lost in places where a line or 2 is too long.
You probably were just writing it as a Free Verse anyway, and so didn't consider that... but as I was reading it, I found a rhythm from the beginning, and then it fell out, which was distracting, but then it was back again. You may want to consider smoothing out the rough edges just a bit with the longer lines. You don't have to make it perfect, none of its perfect, just find that general rhythm if you can rework some of the words. If not, then don't!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Hi Charity,
You have said some very powerful things here. A lot of your poem has a nice rhythm, but it does get lost in places where a line or 2 is too long.
You probably were just writing it as a Free Verse anyway, and so didn't consider that... but as I was reading it, I found a rhythm from the beginning, and then it fell out, which was distracting, but then it was back again. You may want to consider smoothing out the rough edges just a bit with the longer lines. You don't have to make it perfect, none of its perfect, just find that general rhythm if you can rework some of the words. If not, then don't!
Susan :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I appreciate your review and advice. Happy Holidays.
Comment from jmdg1954
To me I found a number of conflicting verses. Could be the way I'm reading it or interpreting the lines.
That's on me. I'm sure when you penned this verse your feelings went from your mind directly to your pen.
I have to commend that.
Be well my friend. John
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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To me I found a number of conflicting verses. Could be the way I'm reading it or interpreting the lines.
That's on me. I'm sure when you penned this verse your feelings went from your mind directly to your pen.
I have to commend that.
Be well my friend. John
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem paints a picture of sadness and pain as it tells a story. The story is depressing. At the end of the story, you pray that God sets you free. Did you know...death isn't the only freedom? God can set you free while you're alive on earth. Through prayer, shackles that bind can be removed. Your poetry is emotional and heartfelt, and adequately speaks to those with the same struggles. They need you.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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This poem paints a picture of sadness and pain as it tells a story. The story is depressing. At the end of the story, you pray that God sets you free. Did you know...death isn't the only freedom? God can set you free while you're alive on earth. Through prayer, shackles that bind can be removed. Your poetry is emotional and heartfelt, and adequately speaks to those with the same struggles. They need you.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I'm glad you feel that way about my poems and that's my goal.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is celebratory in its words. I would suggest editing out some of the lines which detract from the overall message of chains and your heart. Lines such as the two that rhyme with Marley and Harley detract from the flow and meaning. I hope you don't mind my suggestions. I love your meaning and your message of freedom from sin and openness.
Thank you for sharing and I will watch you and your writing as you progress and improve. You have a lot to say and I support you completely.
Jesse
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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This is celebratory in its words. I would suggest editing out some of the lines which detract from the overall message of chains and your heart. Lines such as the two that rhyme with Marley and Harley detract from the flow and meaning. I hope you don't mind my suggestions. I love your meaning and your message of freedom from sin and openness.
Thank you for sharing and I will watch you and your writing as you progress and improve. You have a lot to say and I support you completely.
Jesse
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This is a powerful cry from the heart for freedom from the many cruelties and prejudices many face at this time! The rhyming scheme suggests bursts of emotion, almost like waves. Even Death is better then constant persecution.
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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This is a powerful cry from the heart for freedom from the many cruelties and prejudices many face at this time! The rhyming scheme suggests bursts of emotion, almost like waves. Even Death is better then constant persecution.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for your outstanding review.
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I SO AGREE!
