Artificial Intelligence
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Manufactured"A critique of technology
11 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great sci-fi poem with a theme we all consider -- the sentient robot. However, in a way, humans always like to breathe more life into the gadgets they use the most like their computers and cars.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Great sci-fi poem with a theme we all consider -- the sentient robot. However, in a way, humans always like to breathe more life into the gadgets they use the most like their computers and cars.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on my strange little piece. The human personification of impersonal machines has always fascinated me. estory
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a very clever piece of writing. It invites us to think about technology and our relationship to it. It seems to warn us not to become the machines we rely on. We need to remember to dream. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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This is a very clever piece of writing. It invites us to think about technology and our relationship to it. It seems to warn us not to become the machines we rely on. We need to remember to dream. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad it got you thinking. I like to make people think. I'm really trying to get at the sense that much of our life is machine like today, our parameters are set, our lives are ordered and dictated by the machine like society around us. estory
Comment from BethShelby
What if we feed those machine a little too much data and their thinking leads to the ablility to act without human input. No one has the power to give them morals. The knowledge they possess could lead to action with thought of conquencies. Just maybe one day we'll go too far. Maybe not you thoughts but what if?
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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What if we feed those machine a little too much data and their thinking leads to the ablility to act without human input. No one has the power to give them morals. The knowledge they possess could lead to action with thought of conquencies. Just maybe one day we'll go too far. Maybe not you thoughts but what if?
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the piece. All these fears about our quality of life in this machine like society in which we live and work are in this piece for sure. estory
Comment from Karyn2
I like your poetic style in this piece. That line "I was ready to perform my function" is quite key to me. As you say, contrasted to our human experience, there is a sense that we are programmed whether by society, our circumstances, upbringing, ethnicity, gender, cultural capital and so forth that presets our functions and capabilities. I like that this computer wants to dream, to be more than it's factory settings and more than it's functions can probably allow. The question is how do we build feet so this machine can step outside the box. For my students, I wonder, what do they need to step outside their boxes and be all they can be. Love your work!!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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I like your poetic style in this piece. That line "I was ready to perform my function" is quite key to me. As you say, contrasted to our human experience, there is a sense that we are programmed whether by society, our circumstances, upbringing, ethnicity, gender, cultural capital and so forth that presets our functions and capabilities. I like that this computer wants to dream, to be more than it's factory settings and more than it's functions can probably allow. The question is how do we build feet so this machine can step outside the box. For my students, I wonder, what do they need to step outside their boxes and be all they can be. Love your work!!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your flattering comments supporting the piece. I am glad that I was able to convey this sense of the machine like existence we have in this machine like society. You seem to have gotten exactly what I was trying to say. I think that line, "I want to step out of the box and really tell the world what I think" speaks to the sense that we all have inner thoughts and feelings we can't really share in our politically programmed society of today. I am really encouraged by your style notes. I work to create new types of ways to make music in language and have been heavily influenced by contemporary poets like Jack Anderson and Denise Levertov. If you want, take a look at Patterns in my portfolio and read some of the later poems in that collection like Garble, Rewind, Scintillation, Curvature, Satallites and Echoes. estory
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think mechanical robots are probably more reliable and efficient than man and will last longer as human beings make too many errors and also keep repeating them. A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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I think mechanical robots are probably more reliable and efficient than man and will last longer as human beings make too many errors and also keep repeating them. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your interesting comments about the subject matter of the piece. I'm not a big fan of technology. It is logical. We are spiritual and supposed to be compassionate. estory
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Are you implying we are living in simulation and we are all Avatars? I like the points made here and we need to go outside the box and go behind the everyday routine.
Point well made.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Are you implying we are living in simulation and we are all Avatars? I like the points made here and we need to go outside the box and go behind the everyday routine.
Point well made.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and your support of the piece. What I am really trying to get at here is the sense of the machine like life we live in this machine like society that dictates so much of your quality of living. We can't say what we feel because of the political parameters of society. We can't do what we want. We are programmed and controlled by our society in many ways I think. estory
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Humans are a lot more than we give ourselves credit for. Yet, now we've locked ourselves up and don't use our communicative skills and are almost becoming robots. It's scary. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Humans are a lot more than we give ourselves credit for. Yet, now we've locked ourselves up and don't use our communicative skills and are almost becoming robots. It's scary. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting comments on the piece. It is hard to be human in today's world I think. So much of our quality of life is dictated by the machine like society in which we live and work. estory
Comment from Susan Newell
estory,
Your poem is fascinating on many levels. I read your notes and understand and agree with what you are saying, but this also has notes of what may come with the advancement of AI and the birth of sentience. Very nice.
Sue
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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estory,
Your poem is fascinating on many levels. I read your notes and understand and agree with what you are saying, but this also has notes of what may come with the advancement of AI and the birth of sentience. Very nice.
Sue
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your excellent review and your interesting perspective on the poem. Glad I got so many people thinking about these things. I like to make people think. estory
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You are welcome. I also like to encourage thoughtfulness.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Yes, the humour is rather grim. It reminds me of EM Forster's short story 'The Machine Stops'. It is true that humans may seem to be increasingly redundant in a robotic world. The use of personification is ironic here, considering the development of AI .
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Yes, the humour is rather grim. It reminds me of EM Forster's short story 'The Machine Stops'. It is true that humans may seem to be increasingly redundant in a robotic world. The use of personification is ironic here, considering the development of AI .
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad my use of this personification of the machine seems to have conveyed this sense of much like machines we are today. estory
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Yes, the humour is rather grim. It reminds me of EM Forster's short story 'The Machine Stops'. It is true that humans may seem to be increasingly redundant in a robotic world. The use of personification is ironic here, considering the development of AI .
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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Yes, the humour is rather grim. It reminds me of EM Forster's short story 'The Machine Stops'. It is true that humans may seem to be increasingly redundant in a robotic world. The use of personification is ironic here, considering the development of AI .
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
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Thanks again for the five star review estory
