NO Reverence
Destroying Their Future30 total reviews
Comment from Faith Williams
Wow, I am blown away by the depth of this poem. There are indeed the 'walking dead' living among us. Your words are apt, and I had never thought of it in that way.
You speak truth and heartbreak, and it tears at one's spirit when I read that you wrote this poem 20 years ago.
My only suggestion is for 'mother's and father's' if you are referring to plural, then mothers' and fathers'.
Absolutely amazing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Wow, I am blown away by the depth of this poem. There are indeed the 'walking dead' living among us. Your words are apt, and I had never thought of it in that way.
You speak truth and heartbreak, and it tears at one's spirit when I read that you wrote this poem 20 years ago.
My only suggestion is for 'mother's and father's' if you are referring to plural, then mothers' and fathers'.
Absolutely amazing.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your comments and exceptional rating. I appreciate your suggestion. The editor and no one corrected it before I put it in my book. 😏 I changed it for here. Thanks for catching it.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Your alliteration hit like a hammer on a nail head. Angry apathy/ prevents perspectives of parched...Then you masterfully add silbilences to complete the effect: Ssssweat, tearSssss, Ssssslaves. It feels like the angry hiss of disdain.
Your work always hits me hard in the heart. Exceptional job.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Your alliteration hit like a hammer on a nail head. Angry apathy/ prevents perspectives of parched...Then you masterfully add silbilences to complete the effect: Ssssweat, tearSssss, Ssssslaves. It feels like the angry hiss of disdain.
Your work always hits me hard in the heart. Exceptional job.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Rach, I appreciate your support, comments and exceptional rating. You always lift me up, and I try to do the same for you.
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You absolutely do!
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Thanks!
Comment from karenina
A soul wrenching free verse, Sandra. Beautifully presented, with the darkness and the fading color of a dour sunset as your font color.
Your alliterative passages take my breath away.
("Their angry apathy erodes the fertile soils
left at the dusk of ancestral sacrifices.
Their alienation...")
Just brilliant.
That this was written twenty years ago and here we stand in a world of white supremacists and a bias that is not even slightly disguised is most disquieting. Oh, no. It is a travesty.
I'm at a loss. We are all at a loss, and sadly ~ many do not see the value in those lives taken or surrendered due to outer hatred or inner.
Pete Seeger was not addressing this racial issue...but oh, how his words reverberate today!
"Where have all the young men gone?
Long time passing---"
(more lyrics but let's think of this as a life lesson--for ALL lives)
"Oh, when will you ever learn?
Oh, when will you ever learn?"
Bravo, my friend.
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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A soul wrenching free verse, Sandra. Beautifully presented, with the darkness and the fading color of a dour sunset as your font color.
Your alliterative passages take my breath away.
("Their angry apathy erodes the fertile soils
left at the dusk of ancestral sacrifices.
Their alienation...")
Just brilliant.
That this was written twenty years ago and here we stand in a world of white supremacists and a bias that is not even slightly disguised is most disquieting. Oh, no. It is a travesty.
I'm at a loss. We are all at a loss, and sadly ~ many do not see the value in those lives taken or surrendered due to outer hatred or inner.
Pete Seeger was not addressing this racial issue...but oh, how his words reverberate today!
"Where have all the young men gone?
Long time passing---"
(more lyrics but let's think of this as a life lesson--for ALL lives)
"Oh, when will you ever learn?
Oh, when will you ever learn?"
Bravo, my friend.
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Lady K,
First let me say I am glad to see you on the site today, and I hope things are improving on your end. Yes, this is a tragic poem, but it has a message that needed to be said. I appreciate your comments and exceptional rating.
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Lady K! Woo-hoo! Don't I feel special!
Well, Lady S, this poem shook me to the core. As it should. As it must.
THIS is the reality that is so far removed from fake news and media baloney we should be screaming it from the rooftops.
In lieu of that, sophisticated free verse framed in your unique talent and perspective is worth six stars every day of the week!
It was an honor to review this as itis an honor to call you friend.
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The honor is mine too. Thank you!
Comment from Dr. Von
This free verse is written well with excellent word choices. The heart of the reader is laid open to hurt. It is a sad truth that permeates our existence and dares us to hope beyond history. Thank you for expressing your work honestly, powerfully, and in free verse. Hats off. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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This free verse is written well with excellent word choices. The heart of the reader is laid open to hurt. It is a sad truth that permeates our existence and dares us to hope beyond history. Thank you for expressing your work honestly, powerfully, and in free verse. Hats off. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for your supportive comments and the exceptional rating.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from John Ciarmello
So, well written, my friend. I'm a huge fan of yours and free verse poetry. It breaks the chain of rules that words are so often bound to with this genre. You are a master at it, Sandra! best, JohnC
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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So, well written, my friend. I'm a huge fan of yours and free verse poetry. It breaks the chain of rules that words are so often bound to with this genre. You are a master at it, Sandra! best, JohnC
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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John thank you so much for your generous rating and generous comments. Both are appreciated.
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your verse- very heart felt - excellent picture presentation. Your verse is well written and brings light to your point.
One of the many tragedies of our time and a sad one indeed. Poverty, crime, drugs, products of broken families, self hatred, hopelessness, mental illness and more; all byproducts of something deeper in our society - and none the least, our corrupt and dishonest system of government that uses poverty and people as tools to control the population, only to serve their own self-interest in pursuit of power and wealth. Never more apparent than in the times we live in today.
Your poems does an excellent job of pointing out the victimization of a society through its individual examples. We can only pray that the future will give us the courage to speak out (as you have done here) against the division that big government produces, and take back our county, and unite as one people, as "Americans", not as an abbreviated society against one-another. Thank you for your service and your verse Sandra. Excellent job. God Bless.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I like your verse- very heart felt - excellent picture presentation. Your verse is well written and brings light to your point.
One of the many tragedies of our time and a sad one indeed. Poverty, crime, drugs, products of broken families, self hatred, hopelessness, mental illness and more; all byproducts of something deeper in our society - and none the least, our corrupt and dishonest system of government that uses poverty and people as tools to control the population, only to serve their own self-interest in pursuit of power and wealth. Never more apparent than in the times we live in today.
Your poems does an excellent job of pointing out the victimization of a society through its individual examples. We can only pray that the future will give us the courage to speak out (as you have done here) against the division that big government produces, and take back our county, and unite as one people, as "Americans", not as an abbreviated society against one-another. Thank you for your service and your verse Sandra. Excellent job. God Bless.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Paul, thank you for your heartfelt comments and support of my poetry. The exceptional rating is appreciated but so are you.
Comment from JLR
Dear Sandra, What a profound read and well delivered Free Verse entry! Your perspective as an African American woman gives a needed voice to the harsh reality of hardship fueled by failed programs, race -baited hate rooted in fear by folks who can not see past their own faces, and I judge all this adds to the fuel sense of hopelessness and loss of faith or at minimum establish groundwork for trust building . All these injustices and more continue to strain far too many young lives and fairies. My prayer is that we people of all color sees that we are Children of God and guides us back to the path of LOVE for one another.
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Dear Sandra, What a profound read and well delivered Free Verse entry! Your perspective as an African American woman gives a needed voice to the harsh reality of hardship fueled by failed programs, race -baited hate rooted in fear by folks who can not see past their own faces, and I judge all this adds to the fuel sense of hopelessness and loss of faith or at minimum establish groundwork for trust building . All these injustices and more continue to strain far too many young lives and fairies. My prayer is that we people of all color sees that we are Children of God and guides us back to the path of LOVE for one another.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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JLR, thank you so much for your comments on this free-verse poem. I wrote it maybe 20 years ago and sadly, it still rings true. The exceptional rating is appreciated.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Hello Sandra,
You have another emotional poem here; I like the "sidewalk leading nowhere" reference to describe life on these streets. "They take no ownership for life," describing their disillusionment and lost hope.
What a sad commentary of life for so many in cities all across the country. As always, you tell their tale in a heartfelt, poignant manner.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings with us through your poetry.
Pam
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Hello Sandra,
You have another emotional poem here; I like the "sidewalk leading nowhere" reference to describe life on these streets. "They take no ownership for life," describing their disillusionment and lost hope.
What a sad commentary of life for so many in cities all across the country. As always, you tell their tale in a heartfelt, poignant manner.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings with us through your poetry.
Pam
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Pam, thank you for your ongoing support. I appreciate you and the exceptional rating.
Comment from Heather Knight
Hello Sandra,
Your poetry is always a gift. Your topic this time is very sad, but unfortunately true to life.
You reminded me of Elvis's song 'In the Ghetto'.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Hello Sandra,
Your poetry is always a gift. Your topic this time is very sad, but unfortunately true to life.
You reminded me of Elvis's song 'In the Ghetto'.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Heather, thank you for your ongoing support and the exceptional rating. You are appreciated.
Comment from Ricky1024
"NO REFERENCE"
Occasionally I'll get one of these which I call going to a different level.
In which I very rarely see. Which means you've gone down as far deep as I usually go.
Yes, and when you do this you're presenting things that have never been presented.
Presented in a way that they've never been seen.
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This was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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"NO REFERENCE"
Occasionally I'll get one of these which I call going to a different level.
In which I very rarely see. Which means you've gone down as far deep as I usually go.
Yes, and when you do this you're presenting things that have never been presented.
Presented in a way that they've never been seen.
...
This was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your exceptional rating. This poem is hard and cuts to the core. I appreciate your comments.
