Things That Go Bump In The Night
3rd Place Finish30 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved the tense atmospherics here and you left nothing to the imagination as your descriptions were so realistic, much enjoyed, their work is done and they can now sleep, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I loved the tense atmospherics here and you left nothing to the imagination as your descriptions were so realistic, much enjoyed, their work is done and they can now sleep, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you my friend. Love your new picture!
Comment from Celyn
This is a great description of the reindeer waiting for the off. It is well written and it is not obvious until near the end what it is about. I do not know how you can do it in so few words - well done.
Celyn
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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This is a great description of the reindeer waiting for the off. It is well written and it is not obvious until near the end what it is about. I do not know how you can do it in so few words - well done.
Celyn
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I really enjoy Flash Fiction. It is challenging.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a delightful take on what Christmas Eve might be like. I appreciate the way that the reader doesn't know exactly what kind of antlered animals are in the description at first. At first I thought maybe these are horses snorting. The next sentence narrowed it down to possibly elk, deer, moose, etc. I was still leaning toward moose with the phrase "magnificent beasts." But of course, who would begrudge such a glowing compliment to describe Santa's reindeer? Nice read.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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This is a delightful take on what Christmas Eve might be like. I appreciate the way that the reader doesn't know exactly what kind of antlered animals are in the description at first. At first I thought maybe these are horses snorting. The next sentence narrowed it down to possibly elk, deer, moose, etc. I was still leaning toward moose with the phrase "magnificent beasts." But of course, who would begrudge such a glowing compliment to describe Santa's reindeer? Nice read.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you Crystie! This is exactly how I remember it occurring at 8-years-old when I was hiding on the roof. 😉
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Eight years old and hiding on the roof on Christmas Eve? How in the world did you get up there without adults noticing?
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An elf helped me ?
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LOL.
Comment from Faith Williams
I really enjoyed the descriptive nature of your flash using the senses. I could see the 'white puffs of breath' and feel 'the cold December air' as well as hear the 'stomp' and 'the light tinkling of a silver harness bell.
Thanks so much for sharing, and congratulations on the third place finish.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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I really enjoyed the descriptive nature of your flash using the senses. I could see the 'white puffs of breath' and feel 'the cold December air' as well as hear the 'stomp' and 'the light tinkling of a silver harness bell.
Thanks so much for sharing, and congratulations on the third place finish.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you Faith. I enjoyed writing this one . Merry Christmas!
Comment from amahra
I really love Fanstory this time of year. And you just added to my joy with this Christmas Flash Fiction. I also liked the artwork you chose for your writing.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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I really love Fanstory this time of year. And you just added to my joy with this Christmas Flash Fiction. I also liked the artwork you chose for your writing.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you. It?s a great time of year.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A succinct picture. The hints lead us to a conclusion that is never stated. The language is simple but powerful. The flow is good. The presentation is classically simple.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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A succinct picture. The hints lead us to a conclusion that is never stated. The language is simple but powerful. The flow is good. The presentation is classically simple.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Christmas is the biggest blessing!
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Indeed.
Comment from Ricky1024
This makes me think of those rams bucking and snorting for position on the mountain.
I can hear the loud CLACK!
I can see the coolness in their breaths as they struggle.
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This is though a contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
Good luck with your contest Entry and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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This makes me think of those rams bucking and snorting for position on the mountain.
I can hear the loud CLACK!
I can see the coolness in their breaths as they struggle.
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This is though a contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
Good luck with your contest Entry and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sir! Contests are fun, but I just love to write.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
Creative, rich detail and an interesting twist on a Christmas story most readers know. Good luck in the contest. I thought you did an awesome job given the 70-word restriction. I loved the way you set the stage and used detail to make the reader feel right there as Santa and his reindeer begin their annual journey.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Creative, rich detail and an interesting twist on a Christmas story most readers know. Good luck in the contest. I thought you did an awesome job given the 70-word restriction. I loved the way you set the stage and used detail to make the reader feel right there as Santa and his reindeer begin their annual journey.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you. I enjoyed writing this one.
Comment from Jay Squires
Oh, I loved this, Doug. What a fine sprinkling of magic you accomplished in those 70 words. Your images were sparkling. I could actually feel the chill with the "white puffs of air" and hear that "random stomp". Congratulations of finishing. My only question left: why didn't it finish higher?! Happy holidays, Doug!
Jay
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Oh, I loved this, Doug. What a fine sprinkling of magic you accomplished in those 70 words. Your images were sparkling. I could actually feel the chill with the "white puffs of air" and hear that "random stomp". Congratulations of finishing. My only question left: why didn't it finish higher?! Happy holidays, Doug!
Jay
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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You just never know how the vote will go, but I'm just happy to be pat f the FS family!
Comment from Ed Zeiser
Hi Douglas - What wonderful writing! It is so appropriate for the Christmas season. I think it must be challenging to write something meaningful in only 70 words. Well done.
Ed
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Hi Douglas - What wonderful writing! It is so appropriate for the Christmas season. I think it must be challenging to write something meaningful in only 70 words. Well done.
Ed
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thanks Ed!
