Things That Go Bump In The Night
3rd Place Finish30 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What a clever way to describe a sighting of Santa's sleigh. I like how you kept the reader guessing as to what we were seeing and it all became clear with Santa's familiar call to his team. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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What a clever way to describe a sighting of Santa's sleigh. I like how you kept the reader guessing as to what we were seeing and it all became clear with Santa's familiar call to his team. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Thank you. It still might place, but the fun was in the writing! Glad you enjoyed.
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I thought it was clever so you have my vote!
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The joy is in the writing, but thank you!
Comment from jessizero
This wasn't what I expected when I read the title "Things That Go Bump in the Night." LOL. Thanks for the fun read, and for the line about a bell caressing the silent night. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This wasn't what I expected when I read the title "Things That Go Bump in the Night." LOL. Thanks for the fun read, and for the line about a bell caressing the silent night. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Thanks. Fun to write!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is an excellent little seventy-word flash fiction for this contest. It should do well, especially considering the time of the year. Good luck in the contest. Very creative entry. Terry.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This is an excellent little seventy-word flash fiction for this contest. It should do well, especially considering the time of the year. Good luck in the contest. Very creative entry. Terry.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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We shall see my friend. FS is wrought with talented minds. Thanks for the review!
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It does seem when I enter a contest, I always think there is at least one better story, and sometimes several. But the fun for me is the challenge of writing. Good luck.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This flash fiction story sure fits in with this time of year. At least that is what brought to my mind when reading...Comet has always been a favorite among the reindeer.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This flash fiction story sure fits in with this time of year. At least that is what brought to my mind when reading...Comet has always been a favorite among the reindeer.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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I hope the end caught you by surprise! We shall see how it does in the comp. Good times!!!
Comment from Begin Again
"On Comet! On Cupid . . ."
You might have meant to end it this way, but just in case.
I was too enthralled by the simple story to notice if there might have been any other little "oops", but it didn't really matter. I loved it!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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"On Comet! On Cupid . . ."
You might have meant to end it this way, but just in case.
I was too enthralled by the simple story to notice if there might have been any other little "oops", but it didn't really matter. I loved it!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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I meant to end it with Santa?s call. Is there a grammatical issue? Don?t freak me out, voting just started. LOL
Comment from Mary Shifman
This little bit of flash fiction surprised me. I couldn't imagine where it was going. When I was a kid, we all gathered at my grandparents house on Christmas Eve which meant that the house was filled with people. My grandfather would dress up as Santa and we would hear "sleigh" bells ringing on the porch and the stomping of feet before "Ho, Ho, Ho!" rang out and Santa appeared in the doorway. No reindeer snorts or hooves, though. This is the memory that your story brought back. Merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This little bit of flash fiction surprised me. I couldn't imagine where it was going. When I was a kid, we all gathered at my grandparents house on Christmas Eve which meant that the house was filled with people. My grandfather would dress up as Santa and we would hear "sleigh" bells ringing on the porch and the stomping of feet before "Ho, Ho, Ho!" rang out and Santa appeared in the doorway. No reindeer snorts or hooves, though. This is the memory that your story brought back. Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Maybe it will do well in the competition then, seems to be bringing up a lot of great memories with people. We shall see?
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Yes, best of luck.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Your descriptive here is excellent and sets the scene for Santa's reindeer. I felt as though I was there waiting with them. Loved it! Sorry about the barrage of reviews, lol.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Your descriptive here is excellent and sets the scene for Santa's reindeer. I felt as though I was there waiting with them. Loved it! Sorry about the barrage of reviews, lol.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Review on my friend! Check out Krasner Christmas and I Haven?t A Clue if you want to laugh out loud. I think those two are my best work on here. Hopefully this piece does as well! We shall see.
Comment from JPGeo
This is elegant, timely and an excellent contest entry. I don't know all the rules of the prompt but I count 67 words. I like the close up and personal glimpse of the creatures as they wait for you know who.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This is elegant, timely and an excellent contest entry. I don't know all the rules of the prompt but I count 67 words. I like the close up and personal glimpse of the creatures as they wait for you know who.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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It?s 70 words. Thanks for the well wishes. I think it is doing well because it is seasonal. Good times!
Comment from lancellot
Yes, seventy words on the nose. At first I wasn't sure what this was about. I thought maybe an animal stampede, but the silver harness bell, clued me in. Great ending and a bit of a surprise.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Yes, seventy words on the nose. At first I wasn't sure what this was about. I thought maybe an animal stampede, but the silver harness bell, clued me in. Great ending and a bit of a surprise.
Well done.
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Perfect. I was hoping people would be caught by surprise at the ending! Thank you my friend. It should do well.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a great job with the writing prompt. It is hard to tell a complete story is so few words, but you have done it. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest. Nice work.
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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You have done a great job with the writing prompt. It is hard to tell a complete story is so few words, but you have done it. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest. Nice work.
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the best wishes. It is doing well so far! Probably cause of the time of year.
