Ominous
a 5-7-5 poem24 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and nice presentation, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature imagery paints a good
picture of the developing storm.
-You also establish the mood as we
wait for a storm to approach, knowing
that it will come, and won't be avoided.
-A good entry; good luck.
-The 'c' in black looks like a backwards capital e in script.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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-Good image and nice presentation, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature imagery paints a good
picture of the developing storm.
-You also establish the mood as we
wait for a storm to approach, knowing
that it will come, and won't be avoided.
-A good entry; good luck.
-The 'c' in black looks like a backwards capital e in script.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Hello Pam. Thank you for your lovely review.... I will go and check that font again... may change it. Hugs and Merry Christmas.
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. It's funny because the other c's are fine. I don't know if you typed a different letter there or it's because of the letter next to it. Hugs and Merry Christmas to you, too!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Ominous, has the proper formatting and makes me want to coin the term "Ominous Nimbus". The poem and this picture capture a time when humankind ponder their fate.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This 5-7-5, Ominous, has the proper formatting and makes me want to coin the term "Ominous Nimbus". The poem and this picture capture a time when humankind ponder their fate.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you Bill. Merry Christmas.
Melissa
Comment from Karyn2
What a terrific image! I love a great summer storm that rolls in with its menacing grey and deep rumble. "Ominous" and "tumble" are so fitting. A well crafted 5-7-5! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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What a terrific image! I love a great summer storm that rolls in with its menacing grey and deep rumble. "Ominous" and "tumble" are so fitting. A well crafted 5-7-5! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
Some of those sudden summer storms could feel so threatening. Your poem captured the moment with well chosen words. Ominous and tumbling painted a dark picture!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Some of those sudden summer storms could feel so threatening. Your poem captured the moment with well chosen words. Ominous and tumbling painted a dark picture!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Hello June. Thank you so much for your lovely review. Merry Christmas, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice Haiku, Melissa. That is also a great picture to go along with your poem. I think you should do well in the contest. Have a merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Very nice Haiku, Melissa. That is also a great picture to go along with your poem. I think you should do well in the contest. Have a merry Christmas.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hello Paul. Thank you so much. I hope you have a lovely Christmas too!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
Those ominous black clouds look like the beginning of a tornado formation. Great photo to accompany your words. I like the personification of the tumbling clouds. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Those ominous black clouds look like the beginning of a tornado formation. Great photo to accompany your words. I like the personification of the tumbling clouds. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much, Carol!! I really appreciate it. Have a lovely Christmas!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. You have a lovely Christmas also, and a blessed 2023.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Melissa wow great image and words to compliment them so well done
I would be under the table by now waiting for the storm lol
Good luck int the contest
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hi Melissa wow great image and words to compliment them so well done
I would be under the table by now waiting for the storm lol
Good luck int the contest
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hi Chris... haha... I would be right next to you under that table. LOL. So appreciate you.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
That bottom cloud looks like an old fish having a bad hair day, Melissa. :) I like the picture but not what it creates. Too many people are without homes because of the weather we are having. Yet, it's a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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That bottom cloud looks like an old fish having a bad hair day, Melissa. :) I like the picture but not what it creates. Too many people are without homes because of the weather we are having. Yet, it's a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hello Jose. Thank you so much for your lovely review. I hope you have a lovely Christmas!!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much Gypsy. I so appreciate you. Merry Christmas.
Melissa
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Merry Christmas, Melissa, and a happy new year. <3
Comment from jessizero
This makes it sound like the clouds are awaiting the rain, but it's not a problem. I do like the word "ominous." It doesn't get used enough! Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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This makes it sound like the clouds are awaiting the rain, but it's not a problem. I do like the word "ominous." It doesn't get used enough! Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hi Jess.... thank you so much!!!
Melissa
