A Walk
Back in time.60 total reviews
Comment from BenThrone
This is a fascinating snapshot of both person and place. Your ability to provide successive striking images that, while seemingly independent of each other, nonetheless cohere narratively is very impressive.
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This is a fascinating snapshot of both person and place. Your ability to provide successive striking images that, while seemingly independent of each other, nonetheless cohere narratively is very impressive.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
A very poignant poem. If captured the gritty truth of the urban world and the way if affects the people who live its daily life. A rough life indeed. You're a very good poet.
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A very poignant poem. If captured the gritty truth of the urban world and the way if affects the people who live its daily life. A rough life indeed. You're a very good poet.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from zanya
A simple title revealing powerful images and memories evoked in unforgettable imagery- concrete and colorful imagery -thanks for painting such an effective image in words
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A simple title revealing powerful images and memories evoked in unforgettable imagery- concrete and colorful imagery -thanks for painting such an effective image in words
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from Jacob1395
There is some really strong imagery in this piece which really does bring your writing to life really well, especially with the cathedrals and the mausoleums. I really enjoyed reading it.
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There is some really strong imagery in this piece which really does bring your writing to life really well, especially with the cathedrals and the mausoleums. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from Treischel
A poignant portrait of life in the Bronx ghetto. Well portrayed the grime and grit hard living projects. Well described and touching as tragedy is lived and generally goes unnoticed.
I don't particularity like this unrhymed block style of poetry because it reads like a prose paragraph, even though you made good use of imagery and alliteration. The story was well told, but lacking rhyme and meter, it could just as well be diary entry than a poem. Still, it touched me.
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A poignant portrait of life in the Bronx ghetto. Well portrayed the grime and grit hard living projects. Well described and touching as tragedy is lived and generally goes unnoticed.
I don't particularity like this unrhymed block style of poetry because it reads like a prose paragraph, even though you made good use of imagery and alliteration. The story was well told, but lacking rhyme and meter, it could just as well be diary entry than a poem. Still, it touched me.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from Lisasview
Wait a minute .... so the 1955 in the poem I just reviewd of yours is not the year it was written... I can see that now as this was written in 1961, which makes you about 81 and makes much more sense.
Did you edit this when you posted it now?
Another great poem...but I keep saying that.
Lisasview
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Wait a minute .... so the 1955 in the poem I just reviewd of yours is not the year it was written... I can see that now as this was written in 1961, which makes you about 81 and makes much more sense.
Did you edit this when you posted it now?
Another great poem...but I keep saying that.
Lisasview
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from RainbewLatte
That is some intense and well portrayed (expressed?) imagery. So vivid and so real, the descriptions are immaculate. I felt and could very every bit of this journey. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. The choice of words, the usage and placement, the intentional use of words, thanks for sharing.
It is the new year for me, so wishing you a "happy" new year!
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That is some intense and well portrayed (expressed?) imagery. So vivid and so real, the descriptions are immaculate. I felt and could very every bit of this journey. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. The choice of words, the usage and placement, the intentional use of words, thanks for sharing.
It is the new year for me, so wishing you a "happy" new year!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Navada
This is a really powerful and evocative description of a place and time. The vibrancy and the desperation are apparent in all the places described and particularly in the final tragic figure in the foxtail wrap. Thanks for the share.
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This is a really powerful and evocative description of a place and time. The vibrancy and the desperation are apparent in all the places described and particularly in the final tragic figure in the foxtail wrap. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Raul1
This is a well written and well executed poem. I have enjoyed reading it. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
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This is a well written and well executed poem. I have enjoyed reading it. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Yusita
The two opening lines drew me in so hard. The imagery and description is splendid, not only in the first two lines, but throughout the entire piece. It paints quite the vivid picture. A great write.
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The two opening lines drew me in so hard. The imagery and description is splendid, not only in the first two lines, but throughout the entire piece. It paints quite the vivid picture. A great write.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
