A Walk
Back in time.60 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, I wanted to wait to review this when my sixes are replenished because if ever there was exceptional writing deserving of that rating on this site, this is it, IMHO.
Powerful, evocative -- simply outstanding, and I just couldn't wait to tell you how much I loved reading your work. Forgive me!
Wishing you and yours a blessed, Merry Christmas.
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Wow, I wanted to wait to review this when my sixes are replenished because if ever there was exceptional writing deserving of that rating on this site, this is it, IMHO.
Powerful, evocative -- simply outstanding, and I just couldn't wait to tell you how much I loved reading your work. Forgive me!
Wishing you and yours a blessed, Merry Christmas.
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Jim Wile
This is very well done in painting a bleak, depressing, ugly portrayal of the Bronx at that time. Your imagery was spot on. Even your choice of background color was good, but I must confess I had to copy and paste your words into Word to read it, as the font color made it a little difficult to read. Perhaps that was your intent. I liked the clash of colors, though, and perhaps bolding the font would have made it easier to read.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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This is very well done in painting a bleak, depressing, ugly portrayal of the Bronx at that time. Your imagery was spot on. Even your choice of background color was good, but I must confess I had to copy and paste your words into Word to read it, as the font color made it a little difficult to read. Perhaps that was your intent. I liked the clash of colors, though, and perhaps bolding the font would have made it easier to read.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Hey Jim. I emboldened the font. Hope it helps friend. thanks for the edit and kind words. ee
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Great. Much more readable now!
Comment from Boogienights
I grew up on Chicago's south side so this resonates with me. I too think that nothing would be the same as when I was there in the 60s. Still, I'd love to walk those streets again. Thank you for sharing.
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I grew up on Chicago's south side so this resonates with me. I too think that nothing would be the same as when I was there in the 60s. Still, I'd love to walk those streets again. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an amazing job, ee. Your words were well thought out
and created stark imagery. I could see everything you wrote in
detail. You were very observant at that age. I liked how you state
how the same place would be much different today.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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You did an amazing job, ee. Your words were well thought out
and created stark imagery. I could see everything you wrote in
detail. You were very observant at that age. I liked how you state
how the same place would be much different today.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A very moving poem. The flow is good. The images are sharp and raw. The narrative uses words with surety, and a varied vocabulary. The poem stays on point.
Thanks for a good read.
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A very moving poem. The flow is good. The images are sharp and raw. The narrative uses words with surety, and a varied vocabulary. The poem stays on point.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. Amazing how and what we have written in our past. You used very good descriptive words that painted a picture. Thank you for sharing! Teri
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. Amazing how and what we have written in our past. You used very good descriptive words that painted a picture. Thank you for sharing! Teri
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Easy,
It's been a while since I hear from you but I don't visit the fanstory home page much.
Your poem is thought provoking and raw. It made me sad and disgusted... you bring up the worse of people in skidrow .. alike.
Happy Holidays
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Hello, Easy,
It's been a while since I hear from you but I don't visit the fanstory home page much.
Your poem is thought provoking and raw. It made me sad and disgusted... you bring up the worse of people in skidrow .. alike.
Happy Holidays
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Kaiku
Got my soft-covered Webster out and searched its firmly starched pages to begin embracing words left back in my days of higher ed. It`s no wonder that I refuse to go down the path of intelligence, it would bare my ignorance.
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Got my soft-covered Webster out and searched its firmly starched pages to begin embracing words left back in my days of higher ed. It`s no wonder that I refuse to go down the path of intelligence, it would bare my ignorance.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very sad poem. Where the protagonist walks the streets once promising and full of hope now just left like rotting bloated corpses. This was a raw poem about reality. Great job. Gretchen
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Very sad poem. Where the protagonist walks the streets once promising and full of hope now just left like rotting bloated corpses. This was a raw poem about reality. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from Dr. Von
The writing is rich with descriptive phrases that help the reader visualize the walk and give a sense of the writer's message. I appreciate the writer's notes that contrast the neighborhood then and now. Thank you for sharing.
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The writing is rich with descriptive phrases that help the reader visualize the walk and give a sense of the writer's message. I appreciate the writer's notes that contrast the neighborhood then and now. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
