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I am not perfect17 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
It's true, we can't please everyone so we have to please ourselves.
Wonderful entry for the I Am Not Perfect writing prompt Contest.
Good rhyme and metre that doesn't sound forced.
Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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It's true, we can't please everyone so we have to please ourselves.
Wonderful entry for the I Am Not Perfect writing prompt Contest.
Good rhyme and metre that doesn't sound forced.
Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Ah, thank you so very much for your very encouraging review. It?s a bit hard to expose so publicly one?s shortcomings - although of course, in my case they?re quite "easy to see"!
Comment from Sugarray77
Haha, I thoroughly enjoyed your self-deprecating poem about your skill as a poet. The rhymes were great and well chosen, but as you said so clearly, your meter is off, but its ok ~ you own it. LOL. A fun and rollicking verse and I wish you luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Haha, I thoroughly enjoyed your self-deprecating poem about your skill as a poet. The rhymes were great and well chosen, but as you said so clearly, your meter is off, but its ok ~ you own it. LOL. A fun and rollicking verse and I wish you luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much. There are times when I think the metre is fine, but it never is. Maybe I should declare my work to have "mixed metre" or "mixed-up metre". Lol. At least it qualifies superbly for a contest about being imperfect!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have your work cut out as poetry can be tricky as there are so many things to remember, metre, rhythm and rhyme, content with a story that flows, you are challenging yourself here and I enjoyed your offering for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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You have your work cut out as poetry can be tricky as there are so many things to remember, metre, rhythm and rhyme, content with a story that flows, you are challenging yourself here and I enjoyed your offering for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thank you Dolly. So true One thing I do know is that I?ll never be in your league!
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I shall vote for you as I thought this was great!
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Thank you, that?s very kind!
Comment from Michele Harber
What a shame that you can't rhyme.
It works against you every time.
And sorry your work has no flow.
That's something poets need to know.
If only I found your poem beguiling
(but right now I'm too busy smiling).
Your writing talent's clear to see
(but you didn't hear that from me!!!!).
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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What a shame that you can't rhyme.
It works against you every time.
And sorry your work has no flow.
That's something poets need to know.
If only I found your poem beguiling
(but right now I'm too busy smiling).
Your writing talent's clear to see
(but you didn't hear that from me!!!!).
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Oh you are so brilliant! Thank you so much for your fun review. As you can see I just like to have fun, and I get fun back from the reviewers as well (well, mostly, there?s usually one who seems to miss my humour, lol.) Thank you again. I can?t stop smiling.
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I'm glad my review made you smile. Since your poem did that to me, let's just say I'm returning the favor. 😀
Comment from RodG
Well, you may have imperfections as a poet, but I admire your candor and willingness to mock yourself. I might add that I will never be a fan of AABB rhyming. Try another scheme and you might earn my vote.
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Well, you may have imperfections as a poet, but I admire your candor and willingness to mock yourself. I might add that I will never be a fan of AABB rhyming. Try another scheme and you might earn my vote.
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Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks Rod for your honest review. Looks like I'll miss your vote - can't please everyone! If I changed the metre, someone for sure would still not approve. So in the end I just write for my own enjoyment, and I certainly have no great expectations.
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So in the end I just write for my own enjoyment.
That?s the right attitude.
Comment from lancellot
Correct no one is perfect, but we try to improve and fix flaws that we know. Your rhyme and flow look great to me. As far as the metre goes. I think many 'poets' on FanStory get that aspect wrong. They try to apply that every form of poetry short of a Haiku, and that is incorrect. The concept of metre was created by one man, in one country, for his one poetic form. To then take that and try to force it on all other forms... is worse than colonialism. So don't sweat it.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Correct no one is perfect, but we try to improve and fix flaws that we know. Your rhyme and flow look great to me. As far as the metre goes. I think many 'poets' on FanStory get that aspect wrong. They try to apply that every form of poetry short of a Haiku, and that is incorrect. The concept of metre was created by one man, in one country, for his one poetic form. To then take that and try to force it on all other forms... is worse than colonialism. So don't sweat it.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a most encouraging review! I don't approve of colonialism, even or especially in poetry, a very personal and individual expression of one's self - and your words confirm what I feel: metre doesn't have to be applied to everything! Thank you so much.
Comment from Karyn2
Absolutely fabulous my wanna be poet friend who after this can no longer be called wanna be!! This is so fun in flow, rhythm and rhyme, humour and everything else and my only whinge is I don't have 6 stars to award it!
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Absolutely fabulous my wanna be poet friend who after this can no longer be called wanna be!! This is so fun in flow, rhythm and rhyme, humour and everything else and my only whinge is I don't have 6 stars to award it!
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Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you Karyn - your words are so encouraging! (Particularly since another reviewer marked me down because he didn't like my AABB rhyme scheme - and suggested I change it! Lol. Gotta laugh. Perhaps he missed my point!) Again, thank you so much - I love the thought that a six star rating even dared to pop into your head!
