Unexpected Visitor
We're never ready22 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
A very interesting dialogue, a different take on our dying moments. It is quite sad, well written. Best of luck in the contest, Heather! Evi
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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A very interesting dialogue, a different take on our dying moments. It is quite sad, well written. Best of luck in the contest, Heather! Evi
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thanks for reading, Evi. xxx
Comment from Thesis
I liked how you wrote this story in a matter of fact tone, and how the woman put up only a minor protest to go, citing various excuses why she wasn't ready. The twist to have the Grim Reaper be a female with attitude was very creative. Nice job.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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I liked how you wrote this story in a matter of fact tone, and how the woman put up only a minor protest to go, citing various excuses why she wasn't ready. The twist to have the Grim Reaper be a female with attitude was very creative. Nice job.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for your review. Here in Spain Death is feminine.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a very good dialogue only conversation with death, Heather. You kept the conversation going with what seems real questioning on her part. Good luck in the contest and a happy new year.
Valda
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This is a very good dialogue only conversation with death, Heather. You kept the conversation going with what seems real questioning on her part. Good luck in the contest and a happy new year.
Valda
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Valda. Happy New Year. xxx
Comment from jessizero
This was a chilling, but entertaining story. It made me worry, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It made me feel, and that's important. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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This was a chilling, but entertaining story. It made me worry, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It made me feel, and that's important. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading. x
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting dialogue between Death and an about to be deceased person. Death is right. We never are really prepared to die. The conversation are very well done, but there is one line I don't understand. "The one before you were twelve."
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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This is an interesting dialogue between Death and an about to be deceased person. Death is right. We never are really prepared to die. The conversation are very well done, but there is one line I don't understand. "The one before you were twelve."
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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I meant the person who died before this woman was a twelve-year-old girl.
Thanks for your review, Carol.
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The one before you was only twelve years old. Might make it clearer.
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Thanks for the suggestion
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Maria,
Terrific entry for the Dialogue Only writing contest. This poor woman is in the process of dying when the Grim Reaper arrives on the scene. Female! I have always thought the Grim Reaper was male... with a sycle... coming when you least expect the visit. We have to be ready, but most of us aren't. This woman doesn't even know where she's being taken. Not a good sign. A Christian should know that she's bound for Heaven. So Saint Peter might turn her away at the gate? Too late at the gate.
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs, and Happy New Year across the miles!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Hi Maria,
Terrific entry for the Dialogue Only writing contest. This poor woman is in the process of dying when the Grim Reaper arrives on the scene. Female! I have always thought the Grim Reaper was male... with a sycle... coming when you least expect the visit. We have to be ready, but most of us aren't. This woman doesn't even know where she's being taken. Not a good sign. A Christian should know that she's bound for Heaven. So Saint Peter might turn her away at the gate? Too late at the gate.
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs, and Happy New Year across the miles!
Kimbob
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Happy New Year to you too. And thanks so much for your review.
Comment from Celyn
This is a good argument with death. I like the idea that the person is more concerned with her coat and gloves than anything else initially and that death is a woman rather than a man - maybe he/she changes as required. It takes a while for the reader to work out what the story is about so that is good too.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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This is a good argument with death. I like the idea that the person is more concerned with her coat and gloves than anything else initially and that death is a woman rather than a man - maybe he/she changes as required. It takes a while for the reader to work out what the story is about so that is good too.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I realised where this girl was going half way through your text here Heather and it is a said reality that we all must die but we hope to live a long life before our number is up. A fascinating but also sad read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I realised where this girl was going half way through your text here Heather and it is a said reality that we all must die but we hope to live a long life before our number is up. A fascinating but also sad read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your review, Dolly. Hugs.
Comment from lyenochka
This is a grim subject about the Grim Reaper's never announced appearance. But I like how she tries to delay as much as possible. It's true that we never know the time and it's good to always be prepared by living well each day. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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This is a grim subject about the Grim Reaper's never announced appearance. But I like how she tries to delay as much as possible. It's true that we never know the time and it's good to always be prepared by living well each day. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thanks for reading, Helen. I had fun writing this despite the topic.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an interesting all dialogue story for the contest. I also like the art you selected to illustrate it. Death looks beautiful, cold and indifferent, just as you've portrayed her here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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This is an interesting all dialogue story for the contest. I also like the art you selected to illustrate it. Death looks beautiful, cold and indifferent, just as you've portrayed her here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much, Mary.
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You are welcome. Happy New Year!
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Happy New Year to you too.
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You are welcome.
