Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from lyenochka
You used the Rhyme Royale form well to tell us this intriguing story about Camille and her affair. It seems more than an affair as she "did leave her guy." It seems she's not going to let societal judgments bring her down.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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You used the Rhyme Royale form well to tell us this intriguing story about Camille and her affair. It seems more than an affair as she "did leave her guy." It seems she's not going to let societal judgments bring her down.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Lyenochka, yes she is spunky, the Camille I muse about is the classical Camille, who was the mistress of Claude Monet.
It is my prayer that you and your family prosper in health, wealth and joy all throughout 2023
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Thank you, Jim!! Happy New Year to you, too!
Comment from royowen
I can remember when you started out, I think you were reluctant to try new forms, but then you broke out, this is beautifully written as always, all one needs is the courage to break the shackles of reluctance, and you have, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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I can remember when you started out, I think you were reluctant to try new forms, but then you broke out, this is beautifully written as always, all one needs is the courage to break the shackles of reluctance, and you have, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Roy, what kindness and encouragement are your words to my eyes!
The Camille I muse about is the classical Camille, who was the mistress of Claude Monet.
It is my prayer that you and your family prosper in health, wealth and joy all throughout 2023, see you next year, friend!
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My prayer fot you and yours is prosperity in all ways in 2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the Rhyme Royal potlatch event.
Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. I never heard of rhyme royal. It has a good sound. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Wonderful entry for the Rhyme Royal potlatch event.
Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. I never heard of rhyme royal. It has a good sound. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
I find nothing wrong with your poem or rhyme scheme. And to an accomplished poet, perhaps this is a trifle. But did you notice that the "e" at the end of the last word is much smaller than the rest of the font?
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I find nothing wrong with your poem or rhyme scheme. And to an accomplished poet, perhaps this is a trifle. But did you notice that the "e" at the end of the last word is much smaller than the rest of the font?
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thomas great set of eyes I did not see that, thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! This is a clever and well metered write with great rhyming and flow. You excelled here and I loved the subject matter and your well chosen words. The last letter is a bit small, you might want to fix that. A joy to read, love Dolly x
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Wow! This is a clever and well metered write with great rhyming and flow. You excelled here and I loved the subject matter and your well chosen words. The last letter is a bit small, you might want to fix that. A joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Oh My! What a wonderful treat t end the year with, thank you!
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You are most welcome, well deserved x x x
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
What a story you told in a brief rhyme. Your picture suited it well. One suggestion for you: Hurrah to "her"--always a pronoun object after a preposition.
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What a story you told in a brief rhyme. Your picture suited it well. One suggestion for you: Hurrah to "her"--always a pronoun object after a preposition.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Verna thank you!
Comment from Ricky1024
I like this rhyme Royal.
And, it speaks highly of nobility.
And, also the style that you had written.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your Potach entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024 .
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I like this rhyme Royal.
And, it speaks highly of nobility.
And, also the style that you had written.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your Potach entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024 .
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks very much, Sir!
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent choice of artwork to compliment your poem. This is a new form to me so thank you for the explanation in your notes. Provocative and well done Royal Rhyme.
Blessings
Janet.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Excellent choice of artwork to compliment your poem. This is a new form to me so thank you for the explanation in your notes. Provocative and well done Royal Rhyme.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Janet, thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You establish the premise well in the opening lines.
-You tell a good story about Camille and her
feelings about her situation and the public reaction to it.
-She has a sense of pride but also has to deal
with the thoughts that "confound her soul."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You establish the premise well in the opening lines.
-You tell a good story about Camille and her
feelings about her situation and the public reaction to it.
-She has a sense of pride but also has to deal
with the thoughts that "confound her soul."
-Well done.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Pam, thanks!
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You are welcome, Jim.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is provocative and interesting. I wonder, did you intend the last line and last word to end with a tiny 'e'? I love that the mistress did not feel ashamed but when you rhyme ashamed with fam with a tiny 'e' at the end I do not get the reason why.
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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This is provocative and interesting. I wonder, did you intend the last line and last word to end with a tiny 'e'? I love that the mistress did not feel ashamed but when you rhyme ashamed with fam with a tiny 'e' at the end I do not get the reason why.
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Jesse, thank you! I have corrected that font issue.
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Glad I could help.
Jesse
