Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Constant change"Musing of an old man
36 total reviews
Comment from Mario PIERRE
The poem uses the words: constant change. Very appropriate indeed, because nature never fails, it's cycles are rhythmic, but sometimes the intervention of man and technology disrupt this!! Great poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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The poem uses the words: constant change. Very appropriate indeed, because nature never fails, it's cycles are rhythmic, but sometimes the intervention of man and technology disrupt this!! Great poem.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Mario, thank you!
Comment from Frank Malley
Oak trees are so striking. The towering top of a red pin oak, or the spreading enclosure of an ancient white oak - these are experiences that stirs us and give us a moment of stillness and appreciation. To live is to change, and the oaks' embodiment of this reality is a glory of the flora we need and cherish for its beauty. Although this poem doesn't include tactile references, I can hardly think of oaks without recalling their dense hardness, and how difficult it is to drive nails into oak. I've bent many the twelve-penny on oak wood.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Oak trees are so striking. The towering top of a red pin oak, or the spreading enclosure of an ancient white oak - these are experiences that stirs us and give us a moment of stillness and appreciation. To live is to change, and the oaks' embodiment of this reality is a glory of the flora we need and cherish for its beauty. Although this poem doesn't include tactile references, I can hardly think of oaks without recalling their dense hardness, and how difficult it is to drive nails into oak. I've bent many the twelve-penny on oak wood.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I agree Frank, we are so fortunate, Tom, to have fifteen native species of oak in North Carolina. We have an untouched hollow with a moderate stream that is home to five species we call our little patch sacred oak forest,
Comment from Gloria ....
Terrific imagery evoking strong emotions. Your love of natures shines through. In this contest you need to address a loved one, but I am sure that can easily be edited.
Very well done and all the best to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Terrific imagery evoking strong emotions. Your love of natures shines through. In this contest you need to address a loved one, but I am sure that can easily be edited.
Very well done and all the best to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Wow, I sure missed that one, thank you for taking my blinders off.🫢
Comment from Eternal Muse
This has some great wintry imagery. Your artwork made me nostalgic for New York winters - here in Florida we only have one season. I liked the imagery, word choices and how it rhymed.
Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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This has some great wintry imagery. Your artwork made me nostalgic for New York winters - here in Florida we only have one season. I liked the imagery, word choices and how it rhymed.
Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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EM, thank you!
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love to see what writers can do with limited syllables. I write and review them all the time. For some reason though I clicked on the contest rules. This one is supposed to address a loved one. It's so pretty as it is, but to conform, I would switch the last line to like us or something like that.
It's also not supposed to rhyme.
Maybe Tom will let you switch contests. He's done that with me before when I entered a tanka in an acrostic contest by mistake.
It's a good poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I love to see what writers can do with limited syllables. I write and review them all the time. For some reason though I clicked on the contest rules. This one is supposed to address a loved one. It's so pretty as it is, but to conform, I would switch the last line to like us or something like that.
It's also not supposed to rhyme.
Maybe Tom will let you switch contests. He's done that with me before when I entered a tanka in an acrostic contest by mistake.
It's a good poem.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Debbie, yikes 😱. I missed that one yo are a jewel for pointing this out, thank you🙏🙏
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a lovely poem and I really like the image you've used to accompany it. As a younger person, I always loved winter and your post has reminded my why. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a lovely poem and I really like the image you've used to accompany it. As a younger person, I always loved winter and your post has reminded my why. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Mary, thank you!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Yes, most oak trees do stand sturdy. I'm worried about man right now. I'm not sure we're, society, is standing up for what's right. There is a lot of change that's for sure, but I'm not sure it's all good. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Yes, most oak trees do stand sturdy. I'm worried about man right now. I'm not sure we're, society, is standing up for what's right. There is a lot of change that's for sure, but I'm not sure it's all good. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, JLR!
Happy New Year!
Much truth is to be found in your well-crafted 5/7/5 poetic offering.
How I love to observe the oak trees that surround our home during any season...
Just a thought: no need to capitalize "oak."
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Good morning, JLR!
Happy New Year!
Much truth is to be found in your well-crafted 5/7/5 poetic offering.
How I love to observe the oak trees that surround our home during any season...
Just a thought: no need to capitalize "oak."
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Diane, thank you. I appreciate the corrective instruction.
Comment from Sherry SG
I liked the imagery, the image and the thought conveyed through your 3 line poem. You have captured and expressed the fact well - constant change is occurring whether we can sense it or not.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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I liked the imagery, the image and the thought conveyed through your 3 line poem. You have captured and expressed the fact well - constant change is occurring whether we can sense it or not.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, the only constant is change! You have expressed the thought well, that even when things seem to be standing still and unmoving the process of change is still happening. The stark image is a good choice.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Yes, the only constant is change! You have expressed the thought well, that even when things seem to be standing still and unmoving the process of change is still happening. The stark image is a good choice.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Wendy, thank you.
