Big Bully
He wasn't that scary after all16 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
Lily was a true heroine. It's great that Bob stopped harassing her. You did a great job, Heather. I didn't see any mistakes. Good luck in the contest. Have a good evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Lily was a true heroine. It's great that Bob stopped harassing her. You did a great job, Heather. I didn't see any mistakes. Good luck in the contest. Have a good evening. Shirley
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading, Shirley.
Comment from Faith Williams
I enjoyed your story, how the sweet-faced girl showed her bully how much stronger she was without being mean or pulling some prank herself. Well done.
On a separate note, your accompanying picture is hilarious!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed your story, how the sweet-faced girl showed her bully how much stronger she was without being mean or pulling some prank herself. Well done.
On a separate note, your accompanying picture is hilarious!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thanks for reading. I'm glad you liked the picture.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and story to go with it, Heather.
-You did a good job with it through your examples.
-I don't blame Lily for being fed up, and her mom had good advice.
-Unfortunately, Lily still endured more pranks, but something
important changed all of that.
-It was a serious situation and seemed like no one was
willing to help, but they weren't able to.
-Lily did the right thing because she was able to and had the strength
and will to jump in and save the same person who had bothered her for a long time.
-I like your description, "wet and contrite," and the ending is good, as well.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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-Good artwork and story to go with it, Heather.
-You did a good job with it through your examples.
-I don't blame Lily for being fed up, and her mom had good advice.
-Unfortunately, Lily still endured more pranks, but something
important changed all of that.
-It was a serious situation and seemed like no one was
willing to help, but they weren't able to.
-Lily did the right thing because she was able to and had the strength
and will to jump in and save the same person who had bothered her for a long time.
-I like your description, "wet and contrite," and the ending is good, as well.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for this thorough review, Pam. x
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You are very welcome, Heather.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Big Bully, has the proper word count and reveals an amazing event which helps a young girl break away from bullies. Neat story.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Big Bully, has the proper word count and reveals an amazing event which helps a young girl break away from bullies. Neat story.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Heather. I loved the picture and the saying that went along with it. Your story was well formed and definitely hit the spot. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Heather. I loved the picture and the saying that went along with it. Your story was well formed and definitely hit the spot. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading. Hugs.
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You are most welcome, Heather. Hugs!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Bullies are a huge problem in our society, even my little grandson in kindergarten has to put up with bullies. We talked to the teacher because other parents complained too.
Iike your ending, it's positive and heartfelt.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Bullies are a huge problem in our society, even my little grandson in kindergarten has to put up with bullies. We talked to the teacher because other parents complained too.
Iike your ending, it's positive and heartfelt.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading.
I agree: bullying is a great problem. I suffered it myself and it had a great impact on my life.
Abrazos.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very moving short Flash that brings the main character into a heroic light as you bring the story to a conclusion. Good set up, dialogue and conclusion. Good luck, Maria.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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This is a very moving short Flash that brings the main character into a heroic light as you bring the story to a conclusion. Good set up, dialogue and conclusion. Good luck, Maria.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading.xxx
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Being a bully, or being bullied, both shouldn't happen. So many children and adults are committing suicide because of these cowardly people. It's so sad when we are all the same in God's eyes, He made us! I wonder at the gaul of people who do it. This was a lovely story, Heather, on that hits home. Being silent and ignoring bullies is not being a wimp, it's being brave. Those boys were taught a valuable lesson. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Being a bully, or being bullied, both shouldn't happen. So many children and adults are committing suicide because of these cowardly people. It's so sad when we are all the same in God's eyes, He made us! I wonder at the gaul of people who do it. This was a lovely story, Heather, on that hits home. Being silent and ignoring bullies is not being a wimp, it's being brave. Those boys were taught a valuable lesson. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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It is indeed a big problem.Thanks so much for reading.xxx
Comment from mermaids
I like this little girl. She is strong and a perfect heroine. You surprised me at the end with her rescuing the bully. Excellent flash fiction tale that makes the reader feel good.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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I like this little girl. She is strong and a perfect heroine. You surprised me at the end with her rescuing the bully. Excellent flash fiction tale that makes the reader feel good.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from lyenochka
Now that's the best way to deal with a bully! I would think Bob would be a new person after that. Now Lily is not only not a victim, she's a hero who values life, even of the one who tormented her. Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Now that's the best way to deal with a bully! I would think Bob would be a new person after that. Now Lily is not only not a victim, she's a hero who values life, even of the one who tormented her. Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for reading. Sending hugs.
