November Adventure
Three of us go to woods to get our Christmas tree.27 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was adorable. I love that the picture was in fact of your husband and daughter. The wilderness can be rough especially for a little kid. But what an awesome adventure for you and your family. Great job with this. Awesome prompt for Memories. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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This was adorable. I love that the picture was in fact of your husband and daughter. The wilderness can be rough especially for a little kid. But what an awesome adventure for you and your family. Great job with this. Awesome prompt for Memories. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much Gretchen. I really appreciate the reveiw and nice comments. We did have some awesome adventure cutting our on trees for Christmas.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Delightful picture, and you have written a lovely poem to describe it. This is a very good entry for the Memories contest. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Delightful picture, and you have written a lovely poem to describe it. This is a very good entry for the Memories contest. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you Anne, I'm glad you like the picture and poem. I appreciate the review.
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You are welcome, Beth
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words to be sweet, meaningful, descriptive and
creative. I like how the author phrased the words of a child! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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I found the author's words to be sweet, meaningful, descriptive and
creative. I like how the author phrased the words of a child! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the an excellent review and comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Kaiku
Very funny and quite enjoyable. I hope your dad provided a little shoulder massage for your momma. As you grew up did you ever go cut down a tree one more time?
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Very funny and quite enjoyable. I hope your dad provided a little shoulder massage for your momma. As you grew up did you ever go cut down a tree one more time?
Comment Written 08-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the review and comments. I glad you got a chuckle from my poem.
Beth
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of course
Comment from Boogienights
A wonderful photo and memory you have shared here. I remember a time when real trees were all families got at Christmas time and how fantastic they smelled. Your poem brought back those memories. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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A wonderful photo and memory you have shared here. I remember a time when real trees were all families got at Christmas time and how fantastic they smelled. Your poem brought back those memories. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and excellent comments. I miss the real trees but they drop needles and make a mess. The smell was worth it though.
Comment from Celyn
This is a quaint story that fits well into a short poem - well done. The rhyming is generally great but you have used 'tree' three times and 'me' twice. I know that the poem is about a tree but I would have tried to stop using it as your end rhyme. The rhythm is good as well but I think that I would have changed the last line of the first stanza to ' I said "Pick me up! These briars do stick' as your current line is just one beat over.
Nevertheless this is a good poem so good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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This is a quaint story that fits well into a short poem - well done. The rhyming is generally great but you have used 'tree' three times and 'me' twice. I know that the poem is about a tree but I would have tried to stop using it as your end rhyme. The rhythm is good as well but I think that I would have changed the last line of the first stanza to ' I said "Pick me up! These briars do stick' as your current line is just one beat over.
Nevertheless this is a good poem so good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you Celyn. I appreciate the review and all of your suggestions.
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a cute little girl perched so high above,
and a handsome dad, with the patience of love.
I bet that your tree was especially fine
chosen by a mamma who sounds just like mine. :)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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What a cute little girl perched so high above,
and a handsome dad, with the patience of love.
I bet that your tree was especially fine
chosen by a mamma who sounds just like mine. :)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you Dawn. I really appreciate the review and the excellent comments.
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it was my pleasure!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A charming photograph which complements the poem so well! The words are very authentic and the reader 'hears' the voice of the child! At that age,
there is no way you can use a rational argument!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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A charming photograph which complements the poem so well! The words are very authentic and the reader 'hears' the voice of the child! At that age,
there is no way you can use a rational argument!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you Sarah. I really appreciate the great review and comments.
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Welcome!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
A sweet memory put to verse with great rhyme and tempo. Memories are made of this - the simple moments shared with those we love. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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A sweet memory put to verse with great rhyme and tempo. Memories are made of this - the simple moments shared with those we love. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for a great review and comments. I'm was glad with digital cameras came out. Now I take many more memories.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I envy you being able to just go and cut down a Christmas tree as this is impossible in England, we have to buy one from the local shop. I loved the reminiscing here and your photograph to give your poem its authenticity, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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I envy you being able to just go and cut down a Christmas tree as this is impossible in England, we have to buy one from the local shop. I loved the reminiscing here and your photograph to give your poem its authenticity, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate the great review. We couldn't just cut down a tree on anyone's land without permission. This place happened to be on my Dad's land.
