Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

I saw the coffin and had to peak inside. Your words are very elegant, I just wish your second picture would have been of a woman ready for that journey and not a young heart with promise. That`s just me. Nice entry into the Tanka contest. It will be a full house with many excellent entries.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

reply by Kaiku on 12-Jan-2023

👍

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words are engaging, descriptive and creative. I found the
poem filled with details and expressed well. The poem flows and connects
well. The artwork is awesome and compliments these words well.
Hi Heather, Happy New Year!....Maria

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023

Hello,
Thanks for your kind review.
Happy New Year to you too.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

*sigh* How magnificent a journey, too. Your poem touches the very soul of anyone reading it -- serene and peaceful -- the way we all hope to go. Very beautiful. Good luck in the contest. Tanka is not my strong suit, but I do love this poem...

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023

It's not my strong suit either.
Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

Lovely poem, well written and heartfelt in its sadness. It captures a feeling of loving sorrow. The picture is beautiful. Best of luck in the contest. Evi

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for reading, Evi.xxx

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I automatically thought of heaven's bride as I read your Tanka, Heather. You make this final journey sound wonderful, but not for one so young as the girl in this picture. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023

Thanks so much for reading, Valda. xxx

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You made me think death is is a good thing here Heather? For one so young as this it would be a tragedy. A fine Tanka for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023

You're right. She's too young.
Thanks so much for reading.xxx

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A very well written Tanka, very beautiful. My only suggestion would be to put the pictures the other way, as you have mentioned the daisies and the gown first, which could be for any special occasion, and then heaven is mentioned last, then we see the coffin. That way you keep the destination a secret until the end. Just a thought. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023

That's a good suggestion, Wendy. Thanks for sharing.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a surprise in the final line. It's interesting that the initial lines can refer to any celebration such as confirmation or a wedding. But alas, it's a funeral and a flight to heaven...

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading this, Helen. I hope you are doing well.x

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

What a sweet and sacred tanka poem. I loved the photos and felt my heart pause. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming tanka. Sal XOs

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading, Sally.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Heather. The dual pictures were wonderful, especially the top one representing a coffin. The tanka was delightful. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading, Aryr.