Respite
An Eye For An Eye34 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The short review for "Respite" is a poignant and emotional story about grief, loss, and the aftermath of a tragic event. The protagonist is struggling to come to terms with the death of his loved one and the guilt he feels over her untimely demise. The writing is evocative and the characters are well-developed, making for a poignant and moving read.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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The short review for "Respite" is a poignant and emotional story about grief, loss, and the aftermath of a tragic event. The protagonist is struggling to come to terms with the death of his loved one and the guilt he feels over her untimely demise. The writing is evocative and the characters are well-developed, making for a poignant and moving read.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars!
You really understood the unwritten emotions.
Cheers, irish
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Irish,
Wow! What a story! Well done. Initially I was under the impression that the narrator was guilty of murder. It took a minute to realize that wasn't the case. You really did a fantastic job of putting this together. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
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Hello Irish,
Wow! What a story! Well done. Initially I was under the impression that the narrator was guilty of murder. It took a minute to realize that wasn't the case. You really did a fantastic job of putting this together. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Hi, Tom, thank you for reading, your great, encouraging comments, and that galaxy of stars! I worked on this story from September until I posted, trying to get the foreshadowing just right. I appreciate your review!
irish
Comment from susand3022
Hello Irish,
What a dreadful, horrid story. I wouldn't wish any of that on anyone. (Except the inmate.) I will say that it's good to have friends in the right places.
I for one, used to live with one of the Foremans of Wakefield, RI. Back in the 70s a member of their family was taken by a teenager who lived a few houses down the street on the other side. He was about 5, it was Mother's Day, and he was on his way back to the house from the woods at the end of the road where he'd been playing with a bunch of his cousins. A quiet street in a little neighborhood, he didn't have far to go, probably did it 50 times already.
The kid invited him inside, he went, that was the end of the little boy. He wasn't found for 10 or 15 years. Not until he was back from college and tried it again with the paper boy. The paper boy escaped, went home and told his father, a cop who had been on the original case. They had gone door to door checking homes for two towns back then. Mine was one.
When he went to prison, they had to send him to another state, they wouldn't say where, for his own safety. He got out about 10 years ago but checked himself into an institution. He had to come back to RI to come out of prison, and if he'd come out, he wouldn't have made it out the front gates before he'd have been peppered by bullets from all angles and he knew it.
Oh... did I leave out the part where they found journals about how he killed and consumed the child?
From what I heard, there were two or three people who HAD to read it, including the prosecution and defense attorneys. Police had to open them to see what they were and look at a few words. They all said that what they saw, they wish they had never read.
If you want to know more, just google Jason Foreman. I'm sure you'll find him. I lived with his uncle Tom when the B. was getting out. There were so many people that were ready to stand on buildings all around the ACI... "I've got an unregistered shotgun... they're never going to find me." "I'll blow the mother f***ers head off and I don't care if I go to jail for the rest of my life, it's worth it!" There were so many people.
Thank God he put himself away.
A really good story,
Susan :)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Hello Irish,
What a dreadful, horrid story. I wouldn't wish any of that on anyone. (Except the inmate.) I will say that it's good to have friends in the right places.
I for one, used to live with one of the Foremans of Wakefield, RI. Back in the 70s a member of their family was taken by a teenager who lived a few houses down the street on the other side. He was about 5, it was Mother's Day, and he was on his way back to the house from the woods at the end of the road where he'd been playing with a bunch of his cousins. A quiet street in a little neighborhood, he didn't have far to go, probably did it 50 times already.
The kid invited him inside, he went, that was the end of the little boy. He wasn't found for 10 or 15 years. Not until he was back from college and tried it again with the paper boy. The paper boy escaped, went home and told his father, a cop who had been on the original case. They had gone door to door checking homes for two towns back then. Mine was one.
When he went to prison, they had to send him to another state, they wouldn't say where, for his own safety. He got out about 10 years ago but checked himself into an institution. He had to come back to RI to come out of prison, and if he'd come out, he wouldn't have made it out the front gates before he'd have been peppered by bullets from all angles and he knew it.
Oh... did I leave out the part where they found journals about how he killed and consumed the child?
From what I heard, there were two or three people who HAD to read it, including the prosecution and defense attorneys. Police had to open them to see what they were and look at a few words. They all said that what they saw, they wish they had never read.
If you want to know more, just google Jason Foreman. I'm sure you'll find him. I lived with his uncle Tom when the B. was getting out. There were so many people that were ready to stand on buildings all around the ACI... "I've got an unregistered shotgun... they're never going to find me." "I'll blow the mother f***ers head off and I don't care if I go to jail for the rest of my life, it's worth it!" There were so many people.
Thank God he put himself away.
A really good story,
Susan :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Hi, Susan. Thank you for reading my little story, and all the stars!
I looked up Jason Foreman and his killer, Micheal Woodmansee. What a brutal murder. I don't blame Jason's father and the community for being outraged at the early release.
Remarkable that you lived with Jason's uncle Tom. You were very close to the reaction there. A monster like that should have been given the death sentence (did they have it then?), or never released from prison. I could not access the site, but I take it that Woodmansee finally offed himself?
Good riddance to bad garbage. Hope his ass is roasting in Hell.
Thank you for taking the time and effort to write all this.
irish
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OOH! I hadn't heard that! We know there's a special place there for him in some torture chamber somewhere. I'm sure some upper-level demon has a suitable imagination... at least I hope so.
If not, we have a writer or 2 I'm sure who would be kind enough to be up to the task! lol
I was a kid when that happened.
Before Jason went missing life was all, "Go out and play, come back for dinner." after that, we all got watches. Dad made sure we had no excuse not to be home on time. We had to say who we were with and where we were going. Life changed the day Jason went missing.
Oh, yes! And I've been hearing all about you, Cal! :)
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. This read had me absorbed from the first paragraph. I had no clue where or which way this was headed.
The inclusion of the newspaper articles was a perfect conclusion.
John
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Wow. This read had me absorbed from the first paragraph. I had no clue where or which way this was headed.
The inclusion of the newspaper articles was a perfect conclusion.
John
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Wow, thank you for reading, your kind comments, and that galaxy of stars! I worked in law enforcement for 30+ years, and this story was taken from an actual case. Glad you liked that little extra touch with the newspaper article.
Cheers,irish
Comment from Ric Myworld
You kept my attention from beginning to end with your story that never let up. I expected the staged suicide to be committed on the wrong person. LOL. Great writing! Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
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You kept my attention from beginning to end with your story that never let up. I expected the staged suicide to be committed on the wrong person. LOL. Great writing! Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Hey Ric, thank you for reading, your great comments, and the stars!
I worked in law enforcement for 30+ years, this story was from an actual case.
Cheers, irish
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I thought it might be. Either that or you have the most detailed imagination ever. LOL. I hope you like the two posts I have up that are paying well. :-)
Comment from Jim Wile
Great story, Irish. So well-written. I loved how you started by casting doubt on the protagonist as to whether he was the girl's murderer. Then it becomes clear what is going on as he reads the instructions from the sheriff to help him gain his retribution. Masterfully done.
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Great story, Irish. So well-written. I loved how you started by casting doubt on the protagonist as to whether he was the girl's murderer. Then it becomes clear what is going on as he reads the instructions from the sheriff to help him gain his retribution. Masterfully done.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Jim, I am humbled! Thank you for reading in-depth, your great comments, and that galaxy of stars! Tried a few twists and turns to make the story more interesting. The story was from an actual case I worked, many years ago.
irish
Comment from Terry Broxson
A very well-written story. Vengeance is mine, so sayth the Lord. Unless of course, a few of those with vested interests beats him to it. Probably happens more often than we know. Good work. Terry.
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A very well-written story. Vengeance is mine, so sayth the Lord. Unless of course, a few of those with vested interests beats him to it. Probably happens more often than we know. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
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Hi Terry! Thank you for reading, your penetrating comments, and all the stars. I worked in law enforcement for 30+ years, thius story was from an actual case I worked.
Cheers, irish
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Thank you, it is not surprising.
Comment from Ben Colder
Well done, you brought life into the midst of death. Very well done. Very descriptive as though we were seated at a funeral. I see nothing wrong with the way you wrote this. Anger sometimes brings unpleasant words in a personal judgment, but it was the way the person felt.
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Well done, you brought life into the midst of death. Very well done. Very descriptive as though we were seated at a funeral. I see nothing wrong with the way you wrote this. Anger sometimes brings unpleasant words in a personal judgment, but it was the way the person felt.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Ben, for reading, your in-depth comments, and all the stars! This story was from an actual case I worked, many years ago.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written. Good work.
I have my own ideas of police and/or judicial error. None of them involve release of suspects.
Unfortunately, nine of my ideas bring back the victims.
best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Very nicely written. Good work.
I have my own ideas of police and/or judicial error. None of them involve release of suspects.
Unfortunately, nine of my ideas bring back the victims.
best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Wayne, for reading, and all the stars! With your background, I knew you would see the 'inside story' there.
Cheers, irish
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I meant 'none'. Sorry.
Comment from Dawn Munro
"... droning on like an insomnia remedy."
"My insides were watery..."
Wow.
This was riveting! What a fabulous read! Everything about this story is great mystery and crime fiction in my honest opinion, and it is my favorite genre.
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"... droning on like an insomnia remedy."
"My insides were watery..."
Wow.
This was riveting! What a fabulous read! Everything about this story is great mystery and crime fiction in my honest opinion, and it is my favorite genre.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Wow, I am humbled! Thank you, Dawn, for reading, your great comments, and the huge galaxy of stars!
I like your title, "Ideas are gems," indeed they are!
Cheers, irish
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:) Thank YOU, and it was very much my pleasure.
