Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Hello Bluebirds,
I would imagine that everyone who has ever suffered a loss like this has wondered why. King David often spoke to God of his many troubles. I see that this is fiction, yet you mention in your notes that you've lost three sons. How terrible. I can't imagine the pain you must feel. That you can not feel that God is somehow responsible is incredible. I'm not sure my faith would be that strong. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023

Thank you. I lost my last son in 1985. It was a very long time ago, and I have learned to accept it for what is. There is no point in blaming God or anyone else. It won't change anything and it won't make me feel any better.

Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

What an immensely sad story you portray here, pbb. I can't imagine how you've been able to carry on after losing all of your sons. I know this poem is fiction, but you certainly could not blame your protagonist for feeling the way she feels about God. You must be a very strong person not to have lost your faith after what has happened in your life. The story was beautifully written.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023

Thank you. I think I did lose faith for a while. Then I decided it did no good to blame God or anyone else. It wouldn't change things and It won't make me feel any better. It just is.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your contest entry read well, Prettybluebirds, though it was
poignant. I understood you were speaking to God when you
questioned where were you? Your words flowed smoothly with
great, but sad, details. Your question is on many will identify
asking in their own lives.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. The story is fiction. I did lose my sons, but not my faith. I thought some might feel this way in the siuation I went through.

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

A well written flash fiction that reads like a prose/poem. It is a sad story and your readers are also left with the question "where were you?" Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. It is a fictional story, yet, I think many must feel that way when they lose loved ones.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Experiencing losses such as two sons could make a person feel like this story implies.

But, why do they always want to blame the Higher Power as if the loss is their fault?

That would be the real question.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. The story is fictions but I guess I based it on my losses. Some might feel this way after losing loved ones.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

This is well written but so sad. I am glad that it is fiction for you and not. It presents how a person must feel, when they go through some rough spots in their life and feel that God has forsaken them. No one need feel this way, as the Lord is always there when we call on Him.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. Yes, I based it on my loss. Some might lose their faith in a situations such as I went through. There was no point in blalming God or anyone else. It just was.

reply by Anne Johnston on 14-Jan-2023

You are welcome

Comment from joann r romei

Exceptional

My condolences on the loss of your children, my heart breaks reading this piece, it moved the reader in a profound way. I hope you find the comfort you deserve.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you, and thanks for the six stars. The story is fictional. I did lose my sons but not my faith.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I am sorry to read that you lost your sons. Your story is powerful and true to life. The feelings of loss are strong and come through clearly. I am sure many can relate to this story. Excellent writing and a vivid use of words.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. The story is fiction. I did lose my sons but not my faith. I based it on my losses and thought someone might think this way if they went through the same situations.

Comment from Tpa

Excellent

At the beginning of your story, I thought your separation was because of death. As I read on, I realized it was abandonment. No one could answer your question, at least from the limited details of your husband in the story. I did like your writing and wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

When I lost my third son, Michael was 32 days old, during heart surgery, I became very angry with God. Out of this my faith became stronger. I am so happy He has given us grace. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. It read well. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you. I called the story fiction because, while I did lose my sons, I never lost my faith. Blaming God, or anyone else, would not bring my sons back. It just was.