Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Promised suicides-who could really be sure? only one I guess. being a chicken can have its advantages, going first may not always pay off, loved it, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023

Thank you, kahpot.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Bill,
Congrats on the number two spot.
It's encouraging to see clear story can be delivered in just fifty words.
Seems like a bit of a catch 22 situation.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023

What happens when they chicken in?

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

It is evident that to get an interesting story across in just 50 words with great dialogue, you have to be clever and creative.
This is just that. I bow to your talent always.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you, Mary

Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

Ah, so clever. I guess they're stuck with each other. She suggests he go first because she has no intention of killing herself, and he wants her to go first for the same reason. Both would rather be without the other. Great short story.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Jim, for giving this a look.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Thank goodness, they came to their senses in time. Once that trigger is pulled, there are no 'overs.' I wonder if that ever happens where one goes through with it, and the other doesn't.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

The odds are once one sees the other dead, the next shot is guaranteed.

reply by damommy on 13-Jan-2023

Not necessarily. 8-)

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

LOL, what a hoot. Bill, the impressive thing here is that you didn't need fifty-one words! As I started reading the story, I thought, "Where in the heck is this going?" You delivered! Terry.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you, Terry.

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

You did meet the requirements for a story in 50 words. Which I know is not an easy task. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day. (This needs to be longer). LOL!

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thank you, Elizabeth.

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Yikes! I'm so happy they chickened out and didn't pull the triggers on the count of three. This is a dark piece; I'm sure it's five o'clock somewhere! But let's hope they chicken out as well. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, John

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I guess this is a happy ending. Kudos for being able to write a complete story in under fifty words. Why didn't you enter it in the 50 word flash fiction contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

I like the practice. : )

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I wish all murder suicides would end like that. It isn't necessarily chickening out. It is finally getting a little sense into your head and realizing that is just stupid. It makes and excellent 50 word story.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023

Thanks, Beth. As in most suicides, the mental state of the people involved is the tipping point. Even in the worst situations, the average person will see the silver lining of living.