Seth and Sheila
a 50-word story20 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Great job with a 50 word story. Not an easy thing to do, but I think you have done a fine job. A suicide-pact gone wrong is always a good thing.
Wishing you much luck with the Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Great job with a 50 word story. Not an easy thing to do, but I think you have done a fine job. A suicide-pact gone wrong is always a good thing.
Wishing you much luck with the Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Gloria
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Thank you, Gloria
Comment from judiverse
Well, I'm glad they chickened out. The police are also glad. Amazing how you get the story across in just 50 words. Great use of dialogue, too. We can only imagine what made them form a suicide pact to begin with. I'm impressed you got into the rankings so soon. I'm still working on mine. judi
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Well, I'm glad they chickened out. The police are also glad. Amazing how you get the story across in just 50 words. Great use of dialogue, too. We can only imagine what made them form a suicide pact to begin with. I'm impressed you got into the rankings so soon. I'm still working on mine. judi
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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I am in a lull of activity and responsibilities so I figured I?d get this train on the rails.
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You're off to a flying start for 2023. I'm still practicing writing the date correctly. judi
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Bill,
Nice 50 word story.
Without telling the reason for the weapon, you've created a great piece of prose.
I like the way you handle dialogue.
I like the way you leave it to the reader?:
Why does he have a gun? Who is he aiming at?
Excellent, Bill.
Blessings,
Cindy
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Bill,
Nice 50 word story.
Without telling the reason for the weapon, you've created a great piece of prose.
I like the way you handle dialogue.
I like the way you leave it to the reader?:
Why does he have a gun? Who is he aiming at?
Excellent, Bill.
Blessings,
Cindy
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Cindy
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You?re welcome, Bill.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a deadly game to play Bill and guns give people too much confidence in the end game. A chilling and terrifying write with deadly consequences and dark humour, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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This is a deadly game to play Bill and guns give people too much confidence in the end game. A chilling and terrifying write with deadly consequences and dark humour, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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I kept it at fifty words to assure that the characters came to a swift and safe decision.
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Wise decision x
Comment from lyenochka
That's a loaded fifty-word story! I'm glad that Seth chickened out. That's the best form of chickening out and probably saved two lives in the process. Interesting and intense story!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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That's a loaded fifty-word story! I'm glad that Seth chickened out. That's the best form of chickening out and probably saved two lives in the process. Interesting and intense story!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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So many big decisions made with little thought.
Comment from nomi338
Honesty as always, is the very best policy. In this case it just may save the lives of a couple of sensible cowards. They really do not want to commit whatever act they are about to commit, and realizing that, they are about to turn tail and run. Thereby preserving their lives for yet another day. Presumably.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Honesty as always, is the very best policy. In this case it just may save the lives of a couple of sensible cowards. They really do not want to commit whatever act they are about to commit, and realizing that, they are about to turn tail and run. Thereby preserving their lives for yet another day. Presumably.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Life equals possibilities.
Comment from jmdg1954
Hahaha.
I liked this 50 word story entry. No mincing of words (how can you, there's only 50).
Best of luck in the contest with this solid entry.
John
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Hahaha.
I liked this 50 word story entry. No mincing of words (how can you, there's only 50).
Best of luck in the contest with this solid entry.
John
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you, John
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The description and detail were both very rich for a fifty-word story, and I liked the way you managed to overcome the length restriction to introduce dialogue. All-in-all you handled it as though the length restriction was an illusion. kay
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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The description and detail were both very rich for a fifty-word story, and I liked the way you managed to overcome the length restriction to introduce dialogue. All-in-all you handled it as though the length restriction was an illusion. kay
Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Kay
Comment from Mark D. R.
Bill,
Pleased that Seth and Sheila worked this situation out. Now they likely should have a sequel (are you doing ? -- LOL) with their family mental health professional or better still give up the gun to the local police force.
Mark
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Bill,
Pleased that Seth and Sheila worked this situation out. Now they likely should have a sequel (are you doing ? -- LOL) with their family mental health professional or better still give up the gun to the local police force.
Mark
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Mark
Comment from Jay Squires
Gahhhhh, wasn't there a contest you could have slotted this into? It's amazing how much you got into 50 words! It makes one wonder how many times that has happened -- and keeps happening. I just can't believe the gold you give your readers without getting a penny back in return.
Jay
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Gahhhhh, wasn't there a contest you could have slotted this into? It's amazing how much you got into 50 words! It makes one wonder how many times that has happened -- and keeps happening. I just can't believe the gold you give your readers without getting a penny back in return.
Jay
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Jay, for the great review. I bought my billion dollar lottery ticket so I?m set.
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Wouldn't that be a kick in the butt!
