Alone and Feeling It
Being alone suddenly became a cause for panic.32 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
To check on an elderly person, who is alone, is very important. So glad that her daughter called and found out if she was okay, but she needed her daughter. Like your story. Sending a virtual six to you.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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To check on an elderly person, who is alone, is very important. So glad that her daughter called and found out if she was okay, but she needed her daughter. Like your story. Sending a virtual six to you.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you Rosemary. It is important to check regularly on older people. They are always able to reach out on their own. My children live within a few miles of me and I think they expect me to let them know if I need them. My cousin was very fortunate that her daughter didn't wait but called and rescued her her.
Beth
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This story is a piece of fiction but it's very believable. Yes. Being alone and sick is one of the worst thing that could happen to older people. I like th happy ending.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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This story is a piece of fiction but it's very believable. Yes. Being alone and sick is one of the worst thing that could happen to older people. I like th happy ending.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you Lisa, I appreciate the nice review. The only thing fiction about this story is the names have been changed. This is still playing out. My cousin within three days made arrangement to buy into a senior living neighborhood near Orangepark, Fla. not far from her daughter. She is selling her home in NC to her neighbor across the street.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Masterful work. You vividly convey the adjustment process and the accommodations she made, which seemed to work--until they didn't. Gripping tale--relieved to see it ended well for her.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Masterful work. You vividly convey the adjustment process and the accommodations she made, which seemed to work--until they didn't. Gripping tale--relieved to see it ended well for her.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Elizabeth. I'm debating letting her read this. I did change her name, so I don't think she would mind. I'm going to miss getting to visit her home in NC. It was my favorite place to go. Florida is further away but I'll likely visit her there. She isn't going to live with her daughter. She is buying in a senior neighborhood, but I think she should probably be in an assisted living.
Beth
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I foresee another move ...
Comment from Spitfire
A well written piece, Beth, that I could connect with except for the ending although I really don't care about living with either of my children much as I love them. Your cousin really tried to make it work with plans for lively years ahead. I like you put all the obstacles in her way, the steep driveway, the battery, the cold snap. I live in Florida and temperatures are again in the thirties at night with highs only fifties.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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A well written piece, Beth, that I could connect with except for the ending although I really don't care about living with either of my children much as I love them. Your cousin really tried to make it work with plans for lively years ahead. I like you put all the obstacles in her way, the steep driveway, the battery, the cold snap. I live in Florida and temperatures are again in the thirties at night with highs only fifties.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the great review and stars. My cousin won't be living with her children. Within two days of getting to Florida, she is buying a house in a Senior living facility in Orangepark. She is selling her house in NC to her neighbor. Personally I think she acts too quifkly and should have considered an assisted living, but she didn't want to give up all her furniture. Her daughter is having to take care of her mother-in-law so that would have never worked.
Beth
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What is it with furniture? Residents here have crammed all their stuff into two bedroom apts. rather than sell it and make money. Wonder if they will specify it be buried with them!
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LOL I don't have any furniture that I'm that attached to. She did agree to give her granddaughter two small tables.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good story you have penned for the Alone writing contest. I am sorry that happened to your cousin. It had to be a very scary feeling. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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This is a very good story you have penned for the Alone writing contest. I am sorry that happened to your cousin. It had to be a very scary feeling. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Teri. She allowed herself to panic by forgetting the Lord is aways there. I don't think in was coincidence that her daughter called at that moment. God understands our needs and works in our behalf.
Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
Your story certainly details a woman set on being independent at whatever cost, until she realizes that she cannot do it alone any more.
You have a good contest entry. Best of luck.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Your story certainly details a woman set on being independent at whatever cost, until she realizes that she cannot do it alone any more.
You have a good contest entry. Best of luck.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you John. I think we all perfer to remain independent but it is no longer possible.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
This is good. I can see this unfolding but you can not blame her for feeling the way she did. Keeping independence as long as you can is sometimes a chore, but pride stands in the way for all of us. In my case
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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This is good. I can see this unfolding but you can not blame her for feeling the way she did. Keeping independence as long as you can is sometimes a chore, but pride stands in the way for all of us. In my case
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Chuck. I feel the way she did about wanting my independence, but I know there will come a time when I can't cope. I'm sure pride is part of it, and we don't want to become a burden for children. When too many thing pile up which disrupts your live it become more than you can handle. I appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This composition deals with the feeling of being alone and in need of help. It sounds realistic, as if an older woman would go through this. I read a couple of the responses to other reviews, too, and was thinking that Florida is usually the place people retire TO and not leave to retire from. Thank goodness the daughter was in tune with her mother's needs.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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This composition deals with the feeling of being alone and in need of help. It sounds realistic, as if an older woman would go through this. I read a couple of the responses to other reviews, too, and was thinking that Florida is usually the place people retire TO and not leave to retire from. Thank goodness the daughter was in tune with her mother's needs.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the review. My cousin has never liked Florda but her children were born there and they love it. Mountain lovers don't appreciate flat country and beaches. There are a lot of Floridians moving to North Carolina. She needs her children and they've promised they'll make sure they bring her back to the mountains a couple of weeks a years. She'll adjust.
Beth
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh, Beth!
What a heart-wrenching offering.
It resonates with me on so many levels. I see my mother, my husband, and most of all me in your well-crafted offering. I hesitate to accept help from anyone - always convinced I can do everything by and for myself.
Your offering is a "wake up call!"
Kudos!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Oh, Beth!
What a heart-wrenching offering.
It resonates with me on so many levels. I see my mother, my husband, and most of all me in your well-crafted offering. I hesitate to accept help from anyone - always convinced I can do everything by and for myself.
Your offering is a "wake up call!"
Kudos!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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It is a wakeup call for me as well. My children live in the area and are willing to help if I asik for it but I don't. I want to do for myself as long as possible. There will be a point at which I no longer can. Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Beth. Your
story had great organization and details and a smooth
flow. I enjoyed reading it, though it was intense. I could
visualize everything as I read. I could feel the tension building
as I neared the end. I'm thrilled Joanna realized she needed
to be with family.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Beth. Your
story had great organization and details and a smooth
flow. I enjoyed reading it, though it was intense. I could
visualize everything as I read. I could feel the tension building
as I neared the end. I'm thrilled Joanna realized she needed
to be with family.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you Jan. I think most women want to be self-sufficient. We eventually have to admit we need help. I really appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
