Little Caribbean Queen
Free verse poem19 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very well done!
I love the flow of this stanza:
This brown reinita sings of all
the sounds that salsa missed:
the echo of a flower world,
a distant, pounding waterfall,
green darkness just below
the lushest ferns.
Very professional, Master Poet!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Very well done!
I love the flow of this stanza:
This brown reinita sings of all
the sounds that salsa missed:
the echo of a flower world,
a distant, pounding waterfall,
green darkness just below
the lushest ferns.
Very professional, Master Poet!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review!
Comment from mermaids
The painting is beautiful and I am delighted to learn about this beautiful little bird. "The echo of a flower world" is a wonderful line that makes nature come alive. This is the perfect poem for this time of year, the reader can travel to a warm climate and feel nature all around.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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The painting is beautiful and I am delighted to learn about this beautiful little bird. "The echo of a flower world" is a wonderful line that makes nature come alive. This is the perfect poem for this time of year, the reader can travel to a warm climate and feel nature all around.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for such a generous review. I do have a tendency to live in a warmer place mentally in spite of the snow season outdoors.
Comment from phill doran
Hello to you,
I am not a fan of free verse and so you must note that my rating is despite my prejudice.
This is an excellent piece of writing. The style fits the imagery and your word choice is so well-considered (tendrils / pliant/ slender). Powerful, evocative stuff ('green darkness' - simply and exact).
Some great phasing too: "until the night has washed out with the tide.." / "the sounds that salsa missed", the second of which I found fresh and inventive - all in all not a wasted word.
I am pleased to have come across this piece; it was a pleasure to read and I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Hello to you,
I am not a fan of free verse and so you must note that my rating is despite my prejudice.
This is an excellent piece of writing. The style fits the imagery and your word choice is so well-considered (tendrils / pliant/ slender). Powerful, evocative stuff ('green darkness' - simply and exact).
Some great phasing too: "until the night has washed out with the tide.." / "the sounds that salsa missed", the second of which I found fresh and inventive - all in all not a wasted word.
I am pleased to have come across this piece; it was a pleasure to read and I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much, Phill, for reading and reviewing with such specific comments. Have a super day.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A delightful evocation of the birds and their song, with the sound of frogs in the background. The poem conjures up a warm image of Caribbean
culture and music.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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A delightful evocation of the birds and their song, with the sound of frogs in the background. The poem conjures up a warm image of Caribbean
culture and music.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your descriptive review.
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Happy New Year from Cambridge, UK
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Little Caribbean Queen, has the proper formatting and flits about focuses on this cheery bird that lives in Central America and brightens up mornings.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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This free verse, Little Caribbean Queen, has the proper formatting and flits about focuses on this cheery bird that lives in Central America and brightens up mornings.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you much for reading and reviewing today.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The Caribbean does bring many tourists and pleasures. They had disaster there recently where the destruction of hurricanes invaded the territory. When I was reading your poem, I wondered if the birds survived the terrible storms. Wonderful poetry. Like the style.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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The Caribbean does bring many tourists and pleasures. They had disaster there recently where the destruction of hurricanes invaded the territory. When I was reading your poem, I wondered if the birds survived the terrible storms. Wonderful poetry. Like the style.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Those hurricanes are destructive nearly every year, but luckily I have never been in one.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem and art choice paired perfectly, CC. I enjoyed
reading your well thought out free verse. Your word choices
worked well. They were filled with great imagery of the
wonderful place you visited. All of this was new to me. I learned
so much in a pleasant way. Your notes added another layer of
info. How awesome it would have been to have the little bird
on your finger.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Your poem and art choice paired perfectly, CC. I enjoyed
reading your well thought out free verse. Your word choices
worked well. They were filled with great imagery of the
wonderful place you visited. All of this was new to me. I learned
so much in a pleasant way. Your notes added another layer of
info. How awesome it would have been to have the little bird
on your finger.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for a friendly review today.
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing about to this exotic bird. I especially liked "world unstroked by human hands" and how you invoke the sights, textures, and sounds of that beautiful place. I think I know about those frogs and in Hawaii they are a nuisance as they are an invasive species.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing about to this exotic bird. I especially liked "world unstroked by human hands" and how you invoke the sights, textures, and sounds of that beautiful place. I think I know about those frogs and in Hawaii they are a nuisance as they are an invasive species.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sounds like a tropical heaven. Where I live, we have seaguls, Carolina Wrens, chickadees and the vast assortment of backyard birds. But even though they are commonplace, I never take their melodies for granted. Great poem. I felt like I was a mini guided tour of the island. Great job and thank you for posting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Sounds like a tropical heaven. Where I live, we have seaguls, Carolina Wrens, chickadees and the vast assortment of backyard birds. But even though they are commonplace, I never take their melodies for granted. Great poem. I felt like I was a mini guided tour of the island. Great job and thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your fine review and personalized comments today.
Comment from royowen
A very fitting poem to fit with the subject, I know that these birds are very attractive birds, like most tropical they seem to fit in with the environment very well indeed, this is beautifully written dear Christie, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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A very fitting poem to fit with the subject, I know that these birds are very attractive birds, like most tropical they seem to fit in with the environment very well indeed, this is beautifully written dear Christie, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for such a nice review.
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Well done
