Playing With Fire
A contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
CONGRATS ON ANOTHER WELL-DESERVED WIN!!!!!
This is quite lovely! What bag do you reach into to pull out such beautiful poems?!! I'm laughing as I remember our discussing those 4 wonderful entries to this contest and how you sincerely agreed that they were all strong contenders. The nerve of me using that situation as a pep talk to you- as if you really needed it! Of course, I read all 4 entries in the voting booth, but intentionally did not write reviews for any of them. Let me continue my lauding of your masterpiece. Beautifully written. Creative, accurate, and powerful rendition of the G of E fiasco. The dark, sinister image and presentation form an excellent backdrop for this poem. The tone and cadence that you created forced me to read this in a quiet, sly, sinister, and seductive tone with a moderate tempo. When I have more time I'll need to look through your portfolio for more of these precious gems. This isn't in your "ridiculous crap" file, is it? Congrats again!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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CONGRATS ON ANOTHER WELL-DESERVED WIN!!!!!
This is quite lovely! What bag do you reach into to pull out such beautiful poems?!! I'm laughing as I remember our discussing those 4 wonderful entries to this contest and how you sincerely agreed that they were all strong contenders. The nerve of me using that situation as a pep talk to you- as if you really needed it! Of course, I read all 4 entries in the voting booth, but intentionally did not write reviews for any of them. Let me continue my lauding of your masterpiece. Beautifully written. Creative, accurate, and powerful rendition of the G of E fiasco. The dark, sinister image and presentation form an excellent backdrop for this poem. The tone and cadence that you created forced me to read this in a quiet, sly, sinister, and seductive tone with a moderate tempo. When I have more time I'll need to look through your portfolio for more of these precious gems. This isn't in your "ridiculous crap" file, is it? Congrats again!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Lol. Nope, this one wouldn't be filed there. Haha. I wish I had a magic bag to reach into. All I do is come up with an idea and think about what I want to say and try to figure out the most poetic way of saying it. It's really all just playing with words to me. As you can tell, I'm a stickler for rhythm though. If it doesn't work and flow smoothly, I have to come up with a different way of saying the same thing. I haven't written one in a while but sonnets are the form I love the most. If you dive into my portfolio you'll find a few scattered here and there.
Thank you so much for the awesome review, congrats and massive sixer, Ida. Made my day. I manipulated the picture myself a little. It was just a pic of the snake. I added the apple and shading to make it work with what I wrote. I do that a lot on here. I'm glad you liked my little offering, Ida. Thank you again.
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Ron
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So, the Poetic Extraordinaire is also a Closet Techie?! Man of Many Talents, enjoy the rest of your week!
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You as well, Ida.
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Comment from Dr. Nad
This is a somber poem that commemorates the exchange in the garden between the parents of the human race and the leading protagonist for the advancement of evil. This eloquently portrays the lies of the satan as the hope for human self-indulgence and self-determination. Thanks for sharing, Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This is a somber poem that commemorates the exchange in the garden between the parents of the human race and the leading protagonist for the advancement of evil. This eloquently portrays the lies of the satan as the hope for human self-indulgence and self-determination. Thanks for sharing, Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Dr N. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for The Horror of it All contest. You used great and true descriptive words and it has a really big impact on mankind. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for The Horror of it All contest. You used great and true descriptive words and it has a really big impact on mankind. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Teri. Yes, this was a seriously big impact on mankind. I just tried to think of what he might have said to her to convince her to eat the fruit. I dearly appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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you are so welcome! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment from nor84
The topic for this poetry contest is: An incident in history that is remembered because of its horrific impact on mankind. this poem does not appear to be about an incident in history, such as a war, plague, etc. that would have an impact on mankind. Perhaps you still have time to edit the poem. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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The topic for this poetry contest is: An incident in history that is remembered because of its horrific impact on mankind. this poem does not appear to be about an incident in history, such as a war, plague, etc. that would have an impact on mankind. Perhaps you still have time to edit the poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Sorry you don't think the beginning of sin as a horrific impact on mankind. Thanks for the review.
Comment from LyndaS
And from that day forward, God commanded that women shall bring forth their children in pain. I'm sure Satan grins every time he hears a woman screaming giving birth. Trust me, the punishment fits the crime.
This is well written horror. You have beautifully represented the fall of womankind.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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And from that day forward, God commanded that women shall bring forth their children in pain. I'm sure Satan grins every time he hears a woman screaming giving birth. Trust me, the punishment fits the crime.
This is well written horror. You have beautifully represented the fall of womankind.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and huge sixer, Lynda. Child bearing and so much more. I really appreciate the generous rating and comments. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from Karyn2
Oh this is a fabulous entry for the Horror of it All contest!! It truly was the beginning of all horrors that first bite!! What a clever poem. The rhyme is strong and the message powerful. The presentation is also strong, bold and haunting. I like the line "what reasoning's behind the veil." Terrific writing!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Oh this is a fabulous entry for the Horror of it All contest!! It truly was the beginning of all horrors that first bite!! What a clever poem. The rhyme is strong and the message powerful. The presentation is also strong, bold and haunting. I like the line "what reasoning's behind the veil." Terrific writing!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Karyn. Sometimes I wonder what it was that he said to her to get her to take that first bite. This is just my take on that. I really appreciate the gracious rating, Karyn. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from JT traveller
"So fragile in your youth", a beautiful line. I loved the energy and flow of this poem. It reads easily and is very descriptive; evocative of Biblical times in the Garden of Adam and Eve.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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"So fragile in your youth", a beautiful line. I loved the energy and flow of this poem. It reads easily and is very descriptive; evocative of Biblical times in the Garden of Adam and Eve.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Jacqueline. I really appreciate the gracious stars.
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🙏 my pleasure
