Odin
A short fictional story about a boy and his dog.32 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
I hope this is just part of a greater story. I was left wanting more. How do Jim and Odin's lives progress as they age together? How does their bond continue to develop? An expertly written piece of prose.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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I hope this is just part of a greater story. I was left wanting more. How do Jim and Odin's lives progress as they age together? How does their bond continue to develop? An expertly written piece of prose.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you. It seems that I am now forced to continue the adventures of Jim and his dog, Odin.
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Yes please 😊
Comment from Terry Broxson
Nomi, this is a good story about Odin. I do like the name you gave him. It creates a vision of strength which no doubt this dog has. We had cats because my wife was a cat person. They never seemed too worried about storms, but I have heard from friends with dogs that this was common. Good work. Terry.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Nomi, this is a good story about Odin. I do like the name you gave him. It creates a vision of strength which no doubt this dog has. We had cats because my wife was a cat person. They never seemed too worried about storms, but I have heard from friends with dogs that this was common. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you, I appreciate your generous review comments.
Comment from Dawn Munro
I enjoyed this -- and yes, dogs are often frightened in thunderstorms.
"...All thoughts of raindrops, thunder and fright inducing lightning, was totally forgotten for the moment." -- some suggestions -- first, add a hyphen to "fright-inducing".
Next, add a comma after "thunder"... And finally, the subject of your sentence is "thoughts" = plural, so it must be "...(were) totally forgotten.
I had to laugh at your description of Odin when he had to abandon the soup bone -- I could picture it easily.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed this -- and yes, dogs are often frightened in thunderstorms.
"...All thoughts of raindrops, thunder and fright inducing lightning, was totally forgotten for the moment." -- some suggestions -- first, add a hyphen to "fright-inducing".
Next, add a comma after "thunder"... And finally, the subject of your sentence is "thoughts" = plural, so it must be "...(were) totally forgotten.
I had to laugh at your description of Odin when he had to abandon the soup bone -- I could picture it easily.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I never stop learning from the helpful suggestions from the deep pool of talent FanStory provides with love.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hey, nomi! I adored this pooch story. It seemed Odin was well cared for with his big beautiful soup bone and well-insulated dog house. I enjoyed the read. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Hey, nomi! I adored this pooch story. It seemed Odin was well cared for with his big beautiful soup bone and well-insulated dog house. I enjoyed the read. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you, it was a fun write. It is actually a rewrite from an earlier attempt that was not as well developed.
Comment from Sarah Robin
I enjoyed reading this post. Dogs have a sixth sense dealing with people and they make good companions. My grand dogs lay at my feet when I am sick and that is good medicine! Well done! Sarah
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed reading this post. Dogs have a sixth sense dealing with people and they make good companions. My grand dogs lay at my feet when I am sick and that is good medicine! Well done! Sarah
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you Sarah. I appreciate your great comments.
Comment from Ricky1024
Odin is a great name for a large German Shepherd based on the Norse God.
We all know the recent marvel work with Thor and the avengers.
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Odin is a great name for a large German Shepherd based on the Norse God.
We all know the recent marvel work with Thor and the avengers.
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you Doctor Ricky. The Doctor is clearly in the house.
Comment from Hitcher
A very nice bit of fabricated imagination friend. Odin is a cool name for a big dog. I'm a firm believer that big dogs should have/ deserve to have big names which they hopefully will grow into. Very cool!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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A very nice bit of fabricated imagination friend. Odin is a cool name for a big dog. I'm a firm believer that big dogs should have/ deserve to have big names which they hopefully will grow into. Very cool!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your kind words.
Comment from prettybluebirds
It's a cute and creative story, fiction or nonfiction. The story has a nice flow of words, making it a delightful read. I love all animal stories, and this one is especially nice.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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It's a cute and creative story, fiction or nonfiction. The story has a nice flow of words, making it a delightful read. I love all animal stories, and this one is especially nice.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much. Your words to me, are golden.
Comment from Jim Wile
Nice story! I wonder if Odin is always going to expect to get a soup bone whenever he hears thunder from now on. This was simple and sweet and very well-written. I loved the picture of that beautiful puppy too.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Nice story! I wonder if Odin is always going to expect to get a soup bone whenever he hears thunder from now on. This was simple and sweet and very well-written. I loved the picture of that beautiful puppy too.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I am sorry now that it is only a fictional account. I may have to go out now and find myself an Odin to adopt.
Comment from mermaids
I love dog tales and I am glad this one has a happy ending. Odin finishes his bone. Excellent use of words to create vivid imagery and I am glad the dog was not struck by lightening. The photo you chose fits the story perfectly.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I love dog tales and I am glad this one has a happy ending. Odin finishes his bone. Excellent use of words to create vivid imagery and I am glad the dog was not struck by lightening. The photo you chose fits the story perfectly.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind words.
