Doors of Albufeira
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "The Door of Closure"A journal of 12 weeks in the coastal town
14 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
"The door of closure" is a fine and appropriate title for this sad piece. What a pity she didn't communicate her needs with you earlier. You are a thoughtful and reflective person, and better communication may have been sufficient for you both to make a new start. You have discribed your life journey very well, and I hope that the next door will open to real and lasting happiness and fulfilment. I would say you have a lot of love to offer if and when the time is right. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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"The door of closure" is a fine and appropriate title for this sad piece. What a pity she didn't communicate her needs with you earlier. You are a thoughtful and reflective person, and better communication may have been sufficient for you both to make a new start. You have discribed your life journey very well, and I hope that the next door will open to real and lasting happiness and fulfilment. I would say you have a lot of love to offer if and when the time is right. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Very kind thoughts. Thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have read a few of your previous posts and this one is equally as good. You are a very good writer. Thank you for sharing this journey through life with us. I feel the title is excellent. Please keep us updated on your travels not only through life but the world.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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I have read a few of your previous posts and this one is equally as good. You are a very good writer. Thank you for sharing this journey through life with us. I feel the title is excellent. Please keep us updated on your travels not only through life but the world.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you Barbara. You are a good writer, I am just an attempt. Thank you again.
Comment from juliaSjames
I like your style. Technically I suppose it could be called an expansive haibun. Anyway it appeals to me.
You open your heart with courage and eloquently share its vulnerabilities and strengths. This makes the reader your confidante which again is appealing.
We all know that wherever we go we take our selves with us like our shadows. Yet perhaps the virtue of travel is that the essence of our inmost selves is mutable or perhaps faceted is a better word, so it presents differently away from familiar settings.
Yesterday I created a soul mandala - something like spontaneous artwork. Children do it all the time but we lose the knack with time. To my horrified amusement my soul turned out to be a slug in a blue hat!!!!
So on your travels you found a version of your soul. Closure? Maybe for the moment.
Thank you for sharing. Happy exploring!
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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I like your style. Technically I suppose it could be called an expansive haibun. Anyway it appeals to me.
You open your heart with courage and eloquently share its vulnerabilities and strengths. This makes the reader your confidante which again is appealing.
We all know that wherever we go we take our selves with us like our shadows. Yet perhaps the virtue of travel is that the essence of our inmost selves is mutable or perhaps faceted is a better word, so it presents differently away from familiar settings.
Yesterday I created a soul mandala - something like spontaneous artwork. Children do it all the time but we lose the knack with time. To my horrified amusement my soul turned out to be a slug in a blue hat!!!!
So on your travels you found a version of your soul. Closure? Maybe for the moment.
Thank you for sharing. Happy exploring!
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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That is quite the take. Blue Hat and a slug no less. Hmmm. Closure can be harsh or one big relief. This door certainly has a bit of both. Sincerely appreciate your thoughtfulness. Ciao.
Comment from jmdg1954
This was a delightful journey your brought us on through Albufeira.
This last post you shared with us is very personal and it takes fortitude I believe to do so.
To me it seems like you're in a place of comfort with your life.
A post very well put together!
John
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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This was a delightful journey your brought us on through Albufeira.
This last post you shared with us is very personal and it takes fortitude I believe to do so.
To me it seems like you're in a place of comfort with your life.
A post very well put together!
John
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Getting there, yes. Thank you for taking the time to read my journey.
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your story. Sometimes making a change can be therapeutic. Divorce is a difficult thing to get through but I can tell that your writing helps you. I also like your combination of haiku and prose.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading your story. Sometimes making a change can be therapeutic. Divorce is a difficult thing to get through but I can tell that your writing helps you. I also like your combination of haiku and prose.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your review. I like interjecting something a little different to pause and thought into the moment. Thanks for recognizing that.
Comment from lyenochka
I do like the title of the "Door of Closure" because you open and close doors. And while you sought closure, you also opened yourself to new experiences and reflections and got to know yourself better. I am sorry about your divorce but that didn't happen in one year so she could have shared more instead of holding in "misery."
Suggestion:
successful sale`s career. (sales)
my mom enjoyed the world for 93 [years].
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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I do like the title of the "Door of Closure" because you open and close doors. And while you sought closure, you also opened yourself to new experiences and reflections and got to know yourself better. I am sorry about your divorce but that didn't happen in one year so she could have shared more instead of holding in "misery."
Suggestion:
successful sale`s career. (sales)
my mom enjoyed the world for 93 [years].
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the nice words. Thank you
Comment from Jay Squires
This final chapter of your journey is so soulful and sad. It brings tears to the eyes, a heaviness to the chest. You are the only one I've read here whose poetry (your choice always being the haiku, of course) becomes integral to the story line. It would be jolting to remove one. A couple of short notes I made as I read along:
An unknown world, 8,000 miles away, what could be more remote and perfect. [To be grammatically correct--or punctuationally correct -- you should not separate two complete sentences with a comma (though the first is admittedly more of a sentence fragment). You need, instead at least a semicolon or an ellipsis (...) or Em-dash (--); just not a comma.]
My greatest fear is death claiming me without someone being embraced by a love I am capable of providing. [What a profound thought, and ironic, no?]
A gritty and cogent piece, my friend.
Jay
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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This final chapter of your journey is so soulful and sad. It brings tears to the eyes, a heaviness to the chest. You are the only one I've read here whose poetry (your choice always being the haiku, of course) becomes integral to the story line. It would be jolting to remove one. A couple of short notes I made as I read along:
An unknown world, 8,000 miles away, what could be more remote and perfect. [To be grammatically correct--or punctuationally correct -- you should not separate two complete sentences with a comma (though the first is admittedly more of a sentence fragment). You need, instead at least a semicolon or an ellipsis (...) or Em-dash (--); just not a comma.]
My greatest fear is death claiming me without someone being embraced by a love I am capable of providing. [What a profound thought, and ironic, no?]
A gritty and cogent piece, my friend.
Jay
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thanks Jay. Always appreciate your willingness to read and provide direction.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I enjoyed reading this account of your life, the steps you have taken and the realizations you have reached. Loss, of any kind, takes time to get over and time will be with you until the end - so take it. When the dust settles you will see more clearly and breathe sweet life in again.
I particularly enjoyed the haiku additions within the body of this piece. And as for the title - Closure - beats Irony. Great photo - all that needs to be done is to now walk through the door to the other side to see what surprises are behind it.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading this account of your life, the steps you have taken and the realizations you have reached. Loss, of any kind, takes time to get over and time will be with you until the end - so take it. When the dust settles you will see more clearly and breathe sweet life in again.
I particularly enjoyed the haiku additions within the body of this piece. And as for the title - Closure - beats Irony. Great photo - all that needs to be done is to now walk through the door to the other side to see what surprises are behind it.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Walking through with head up and open arms. Thanks for your very nice words.
Comment from Father Flaps
Wow! You have had a rough time of it, buddy. I enjoyed your honesty as you opened up about your personal life. It sounds like your wife has moved on, and you must let her proceed. She may find out the grass isn't so green on the other side of the fence. But give her the privacy she needs right now. You never know, you may meet a nice woman any day. There's a whole planet filled with beautiful, interesting women... some who are as lonely as you.
I especially liked this part ...
"Although I did my very best to move on from my divorce, I was failing. The isolation of freedom in Albufeira was choking me. Some days I would wake up in a state of despair."
What a phrase! "The isolation of freedom" ... it's almost a contradiction until you study it. How can freedom be isolating? You can do anything you want. You can go anywhere you want. But no real contact with someone... that's missing. No friendship. No chats. You're like a prisoner.
This alone is worth the 6th star.
I notice that you slip into Senryu poetry, somewhat like a Haibun except a Haibun doesn't have as much prose. But still, the similarity is there.
If Judy ever decides she wants you back, please remember what she told you,
"I am in a good place. If you really love me, then you will close the door on this chapter of our lives. Please!"
I hope you meet someone worthy of your affection. Isn't it something that we need that special someone to be complete?
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in your travels!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Wow! You have had a rough time of it, buddy. I enjoyed your honesty as you opened up about your personal life. It sounds like your wife has moved on, and you must let her proceed. She may find out the grass isn't so green on the other side of the fence. But give her the privacy she needs right now. You never know, you may meet a nice woman any day. There's a whole planet filled with beautiful, interesting women... some who are as lonely as you.
I especially liked this part ...
"Although I did my very best to move on from my divorce, I was failing. The isolation of freedom in Albufeira was choking me. Some days I would wake up in a state of despair."
What a phrase! "The isolation of freedom" ... it's almost a contradiction until you study it. How can freedom be isolating? You can do anything you want. You can go anywhere you want. But no real contact with someone... that's missing. No friendship. No chats. You're like a prisoner.
This alone is worth the 6th star.
I notice that you slip into Senryu poetry, somewhat like a Haibun except a Haibun doesn't have as much prose. But still, the similarity is there.
If Judy ever decides she wants you back, please remember what she told you,
"I am in a good place. If you really love me, then you will close the door on this chapter of our lives. Please!"
I hope you meet someone worthy of your affection. Isn't it something that we need that special someone to be complete?
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in your travels!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Most complete review ever. If I have a nomination left it is yours. If not, it will come next month. Thank you very much.
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One of the best posts I've read so far this year, Kaiku. You'll find that I like to give a thorough review. I think a lot of Fanstorians miss out when they only offer a couple of lines. You can learn from giving a good review.
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Much appreciated.
Comment from w.j.debi
I've seen your book advertised on the site. After reading this, I will be checking it out.
Your writing is insightful and heartfelt. You've drop the barrier and let the reader into you thoughts and soul.
Such wisdom in the closing:
"love is quite simple, all you have to do it allow it."
It doesn't so much speak closure or irony to me, but choosing another path full of possibility and, perhaps, adventures and fulfillment.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I've seen your book advertised on the site. After reading this, I will be checking it out.
Your writing is insightful and heartfelt. You've drop the barrier and let the reader into you thoughts and soul.
Such wisdom in the closing:
"love is quite simple, all you have to do it allow it."
It doesn't so much speak closure or irony to me, but choosing another path full of possibility and, perhaps, adventures and fulfillment.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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That`s very nice of you. My book is all about 5-7-5 if that is something you like. It covers a number of topics with most of the writings asking the reader to dig a little deeper and find something in their past that could be reflected upon. Your review is very thoughtful and appreciated. Thank you.
