Doors of Albufeira
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Door of 67"A journal of 12 weeks in the coastal town
9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This grouping of scenes, The Door of 67, in which you lay out isolated scenes within your day, is a terrific exercise in exploding a moment. Where someone else might string a bunch of incidents into a single sentence, you could make each piece of the journey an experience within itself.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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This grouping of scenes, The Door of 67, in which you lay out isolated scenes within your day, is a terrific exercise in exploding a moment. Where someone else might string a bunch of incidents into a single sentence, you could make each piece of the journey an experience within itself.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hey Bill, thank you very much. I was chastised in a review for doing something that you and I agree and feel is a unique approach to sharing moments in time. Your review means a lot. Thanks again.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Your posting is not a flash story, it's 632 words. You wrote that it's 67 words.
I grew up in Spain, next to Portugal and I am familiar with Albufeira. It sounds like you enjoyed yourself. It sounds like you had a good time and have good memories of your time there.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Your posting is not a flash story, it's 632 words. You wrote that it's 67 words.
I grew up in Spain, next to Portugal and I am familiar with Albufeira. It sounds like you enjoyed yourself. It sounds like you had a good time and have good memories of your time there.
Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Each story is a flash. Even the intros and that was indicated.
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In my opinion, if you post a chain of flash stories together it's not flash fiction
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As a top writer you ought to be more creative in your thinking in your review process. It was a series of non- fiction flas stories that stood on their own. I as the writer have the ability for creative licensing. You as the reviewer need to follow the lead. It was a disservice to give me 4 stars.
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I gave you a four because I have never seen a suite of flash nonfiction post. To me flash stands alone. As a reviewer I have the right to give you honest feedback. I think if you were going to do something that has not been done before in fanstory you should be more clear. Explain in your notes why you chose to write a serious of flash nonfiction and why. I would add a subtitle of "flash suite"
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If you had read the intro you would have understood. Doesn?t matter if you?re a fan of Flash. There was a stack Haiku contest recently, did you give everyone a 4 because the writings didn?t go along the standards of 3 line Haiku. Your reasoning is flawed. All my short flash stories stood alone. There was a reason for doing it this way. I?d rather you not read my stuff with your reasoning.
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Got it! No more reviews.
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you need to remove your 4 star review for lack of professionalism.
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Ask, Tom, the fanstory site manager. You'll be surprised what he says.
Comment from jmdg1954
Thank you for these 67 word flash posts. Each was enjoyable to read, giving us insight to your day.
May particular favorite (maybe because of the title) was :
Stupid is as Stupid Does
I enjoy walking as well. A two hour walk each way is an adventure in by itself.
Cheers, my friend.
John
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you for these 67 word flash posts. Each was enjoyable to read, giving us insight to your day.
May particular favorite (maybe because of the title) was :
Stupid is as Stupid Does
I enjoy walking as well. A two hour walk each way is an adventure in by itself.
Cheers, my friend.
John
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Glad you enjoyed them. Thanks for the nice review.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Oh lord , you love Rod Stewart! My mother was a big fan and she passed it onto me .. I have 3 LPs
Tonight's the night
Sailing
This old heart of mine
Down town train
First cut is the deepest
I don't want to talk about it
I was only joking ( like solo guitar at full volume)
22 is my lucky number !
So you have to carry not only your laundry but also your shopping all the way up . No wonder you are so fit despite all the Nutella.
At your age you should only walk the green , you're doing your back in . Just saying.
I'm surprised the tiles in Albufeira are not tethered being on the coast .. maybe the Atlantic Ocean is less windy . In Tossa the titles were cemented due to the strong winds , once out parabolic flew off and the pole was bent completely.
Beaches are beautiful.. inTossa there are many secret coves along the coast too.I used to feed Georg ( pronounced with Russian accent) a seagull on one of our balconies.
In Italy we have a lot of coast but not as much sand in Sardegna you can sink your feet in the sand.
Thanks for sharing, you brought back happy memories .
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Ciao!
Oh lord , you love Rod Stewart! My mother was a big fan and she passed it onto me .. I have 3 LPs
Tonight's the night
Sailing
This old heart of mine
Down town train
First cut is the deepest
I don't want to talk about it
I was only joking ( like solo guitar at full volume)
22 is my lucky number !
So you have to carry not only your laundry but also your shopping all the way up . No wonder you are so fit despite all the Nutella.
At your age you should only walk the green , you're doing your back in . Just saying.
I'm surprised the tiles in Albufeira are not tethered being on the coast .. maybe the Atlantic Ocean is less windy . In Tossa the titles were cemented due to the strong winds , once out parabolic flew off and the pole was bent completely.
Beaches are beautiful.. inTossa there are many secret coves along the coast too.I used to feed Georg ( pronounced with Russian accent) a seagull on one of our balconies.
In Italy we have a lot of coast but not as much sand in Sardegna you can sink your feet in the sand.
Thanks for sharing, you brought back happy memories .
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I wore 21 on my basketball jersey in high school and I was born on the 22nd of May. We have much in common. Thanks for reading.
Ciao
Comment from lyenochka
I like your experiment! And to encapsulate a feeling or condense story into 67 words is a great exercise. I understand about the difficulty of reviewing and posting and finding that balance. The key is to keep learning and enjoying writing. It if becomes stressful and you lose the joy of writing, then it defeats the purpose of why you joined.
My favorite one was The Beach.
Suggestions:
2 hours later I return, (Two) numbers less ten are typically spelled out
laudry completed. (laundry)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I like your experiment! And to encapsulate a feeling or condense story into 67 words is a great exercise. I understand about the difficulty of reviewing and posting and finding that balance. The key is to keep learning and enjoying writing. It if becomes stressful and you lose the joy of writing, then it defeats the purpose of why you joined.
My favorite one was The Beach.
Suggestions:
2 hours later I return, (Two) numbers less ten are typically spelled out
laudry completed. (laundry)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I will correct Thanks.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you had a wonderful time in Portugal and I have visited, but not been to this particular resort and your fond memories here are magical and the warmth of the experience is written into your words, walking is so easy in the sunshine, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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It sounds like you had a wonderful time in Portugal and I have visited, but not been to this particular resort and your fond memories here are magical and the warmth of the experience is written into your words, walking is so easy in the sunshine, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Nice. Thank you
Comment from PENofFIRE
What an adventure you have given me. You have taken me through your day, and I loved it, even the mundane things. The way you place your words in what you write gives your readers a painted picture of your surroundings. You take us with you wherever you go. Thank you. I feel as though I have been on vacation.
Best wishes my friend,
Pen
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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What an adventure you have given me. You have taken me through your day, and I loved it, even the mundane things. The way you place your words in what you write gives your readers a painted picture of your surroundings. You take us with you wherever you go. Thank you. I feel as though I have been on vacation.
Best wishes my friend,
Pen
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I appreciate you. Thanks.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great story. Very well written. It was an enjoyable read. Your flow of words nicely done. There were no grammer mistakes. I especiall liked when you referened different song artists, and lyrics. The writing, where you break up different parts of your story, really puts an enphasis on the whole story itself. The laundromat, I liked reading that part. I can relate having to go to the laundromat a few times to wash clothes before we got the washer and dryer. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Great story. Very well written. It was an enjoyable read. Your flow of words nicely done. There were no grammer mistakes. I especiall liked when you referened different song artists, and lyrics. The writing, where you break up different parts of your story, really puts an enphasis on the whole story itself. The laundromat, I liked reading that part. I can relate having to go to the laundromat a few times to wash clothes before we got the washer and dryer. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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It was fun. Thanks.
Comment from Douglas Goff
What do I feel like you just flashed us and we enjoyed it?
I find myself wondering if you do everything fast as you seem to have a propensity for it.
Nice. Very nice.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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What do I feel like you just flashed us and we enjoyed it?
I find myself wondering if you do everything fast as you seem to have a propensity for it.
Nice. Very nice.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I only flashed in college when it was fashionably streaky. Ha. Thanks.
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Ha!
