Doors of Albufeira
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Door of Iron"A journal of 12 weeks in the coastal town
4 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
Oh, Man! Did I ever enjoy this! It has such a classic texture to the prose/poetry. At first, I wanted to have you change the structure from passive voice to active. Until I realized that the three women were themselves passive -- to unrequited love, to incompleteness, to fate. And the brief Haiku intermissions summed up each woman so completely while sewing one scene into the next. Man! I wish I had a six for you.
Jay
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Oh, Man! Did I ever enjoy this! It has such a classic texture to the prose/poetry. At first, I wanted to have you change the structure from passive voice to active. Until I realized that the three women were themselves passive -- to unrequited love, to incompleteness, to fate. And the brief Haiku intermissions summed up each woman so completely while sewing one scene into the next. Man! I wish I had a six for you.
Jay
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Thanks Jay. Your review means a lot.
Comment from lyenochka
I like your poetic description of these three maidens, first with prose and then summarized with a 5-7-5 poem. I wondered if these maidens were sculptures? And yet, they could easily represent the people in our lives.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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I like your poetic description of these three maidens, first with prose and then summarized with a 5-7-5 poem. I wondered if these maidens were sculptures? And yet, they could easily represent the people in our lives.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Iron sculptures and those with hearts. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, an interesting look into three female statues and the meaning behind their individual stories, real or imagined. I like the depth that the writers puts into them. It reads like a brochure from a tourist agency. Makes you want to see them (they were real) on vacation.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Hmm, an interesting look into three female statues and the meaning behind their individual stories, real or imagined. I like the depth that the writers puts into them. It reads like a brochure from a tourist agency. Makes you want to see them (they were real) on vacation.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Good stuff Thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an interesting write and I enjoyed learning about the Iron Maidens. In England, the iron maiden was an instrument of torture during the reign of Richard III. It was a metal full body mask with metal prongs that pierced the body to ensure a slow and painful death as the victim was stood up inside. I was pleased to hear it had a different meaning in Portugal, a very interesting and well researched post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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This is an interesting write and I enjoyed learning about the Iron Maidens. In England, the iron maiden was an instrument of torture during the reign of Richard III. It was a metal full body mask with metal prongs that pierced the body to ensure a slow and painful death as the victim was stood up inside. I was pleased to hear it had a different meaning in Portugal, a very interesting and well researched post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Certainly a play on words as I was familiar with the torture chamber. Thank you for reading this work.
