The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Dirty Diner (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, so Miranda finally realized that she's desirable for who she is - not for what she can give or for her body, but for the interesting, intriguing person she is! Hooray for Mitch! Glad the love triangle thing got sorted out! I was wondering where Aaron might be in the line up.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Oh, so Miranda finally realized that she's desirable for who she is - not for what she can give or for her body, but for the interesting, intriguing person she is! Hooray for Mitch! Glad the love triangle thing got sorted out! I was wondering where Aaron might be in the line up.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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She was never interested in Aaron romantically. Always more friend zone and slightly maternal. He had and has a crush on her. I like the chemistry between Miranda and Mitch. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ah-HAAAA!! Toblerone is in the WASHER! And Miranda's going to be the one to get the $250K, and then she WILL be rich and can give Waylon a college education...and herself a better trailer (like Aaron's on the inside.) (Or will she be married to Mitch by then?)
Making good progress. As you can see, it's making my mind do cartwheels trying to figure it all out. And what could be a better compliment for a mystery/adventure novel?!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Ah-HAAAA!! Toblerone is in the WASHER! And Miranda's going to be the one to get the $250K, and then she WILL be rich and can give Waylon a college education...and herself a better trailer (like Aaron's on the inside.) (Or will she be married to Mitch by then?)
Making good progress. As you can see, it's making my mind do cartwheels trying to figure it all out. And what could be a better compliment for a mystery/adventure novel?!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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I like the way you think, girl. And I love that genre Mystery/adventure. Jason might just be in the washer. Who knows? But did Missy kill him or does she know who did. She reaps the inheritance? It'll all come out in the wash. Lol. Thank you for trying to figure out this mystery. Gretchen
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All comes out in the wash...You have no shame, Woman...
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Shame? What is this shame you speak of?
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Mmmm-hmmm. Gotcha. "Does not compute."
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a fun chapter, with a few fun clues or red herrings.
If it was my boobs or any part of my body [If your chapter weren't in the first person, I might have pointed out to you that the correct grammar is, "if it WERE my boobs," but I can't picture Miranda searching her mind for the most grammatical verb.]
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside." I volunteer. "That's my guess." [mmmm, is this a planted clue?]
but I'm willing to bet our little corner of Haynes Pond was about to go up in flames. [Shouldn't this be "... IS about to go up in flames?]
I love the reference, though to "Gone With the Wind".
Jay
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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This is a fun chapter, with a few fun clues or red herrings.
If it was my boobs or any part of my body [If your chapter weren't in the first person, I might have pointed out to you that the correct grammar is, "if it WERE my boobs," but I can't picture Miranda searching her mind for the most grammatical verb.]
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside." I volunteer. "That's my guess." [mmmm, is this a planted clue?]
but I'm willing to bet our little corner of Haynes Pond was about to go up in flames. [Shouldn't this be "... IS about to go up in flames?]
I love the reference, though to "Gone With the Wind".
Jay
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate the tense grammatical help. Sounds one way in my head and differently when read. I'm happy you liked the Gone With the Wind reference. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
Scaling Mt. Booby. I'm still chuckling over those few words.
If there were other posts before this one, I wasn't aware. I was able to pick up this chapter as is. I did enjoy those comic tones here and there.
Well done.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Scaling Mt. Booby. I'm still chuckling over those few words.
If there were other posts before this one, I wasn't aware. I was able to pick up this chapter as is. I did enjoy those comic tones here and there.
Well done.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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There are many chapters before this. I appreciate the nice comments and the excellent review. Gretchen
Comment from prettybluebirds
I have read some of the previous chapters of your story. It keeps getting more interesting as you go along. You take the reader into the mind and situations of your main character. Nice work.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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I have read some of the previous chapters of your story. It keeps getting more interesting as you go along. You take the reader into the mind and situations of your main character. Nice work.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for this nice review and the helpful comments. Gretchen
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very good. I am enjoying this story quite q bit.
Possible catch:
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside." I volunteer.
(Someone just critiqued me for this on another site, saying volunteered in this situation is considered a speech tag so it would be:
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside," I volunteer.)
I thought they were right so I changed mine.
Anyhoo, this is a good storyline.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Very good. I am enjoying this story quite q bit.
Possible catch:
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside." I volunteer.
(Someone just critiqued me for this on another site, saying volunteered in this situation is considered a speech tag so it would be:
"So, stupid people don't get trapped inside," I volunteer.)
I thought they were right so I changed mine.
Anyhoo, this is a good storyline.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I will change that punctuation. I appreciate the help. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
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Always glad to assit one of my favorites! One team, one fight!
