A Baby Soldier Memoir/ Entry 6
The Tunnels21 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Had to look up "Keds", love the humorous content, Oh! really, (sorry I am entering comments as I go) now I am at the end, Lev and Zora? I do hope you write the next chapter soon, as I have now caught up?? very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Had to look up "Keds", love the humorous content, Oh! really, (sorry I am entering comments as I go) now I am at the end, Lev and Zora? I do hope you write the next chapter soon, as I have now caught up?? very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, kahpot! I'm so happy you've caught up and I appreciate you taking the time to read it. I always look forward to your reviews and comments, my friend.
Comment from Ulla
Hi John, I'm intrigued by this story and it was well worth the wait. I like how you set it up and how the characters interact. Zora and Luka have a complicated relationship, but then again, they know each other well enough to have just that. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Hi John, I'm intrigued by this story and it was well worth the wait. I like how you set it up and how the characters interact. Zora and Luka have a complicated relationship, but then again, they know each other well enough to have just that. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Ulla, for the great review and generous stars. I'm so happy you are following!
Comment from leather
I am jumping in at this point, so I lack some background information, but I was also able to pick up a fair amount. The fact that deafness is part of this story is interesting--I haven't seen that tackled before. Even with deafness, there is dialogue and communication.
Well done. I'm sorry, but I'm out of sixes.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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I am jumping in at this point, so I lack some background information, but I was also able to pick up a fair amount. The fact that deafness is part of this story is interesting--I haven't seen that tackled before. Even with deafness, there is dialogue and communication.
Well done. I'm sorry, but I'm out of sixes.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Thank you, leather, for the great review and honorable mention of the six stars. It's always a plus to have you read and follow.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'd like to know why it is that I never seem to have a six when I need one most, but I'm sure disappointed that I don't have one for this chapter. Thanks for sharing and it's certainly worth the wait!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I'd like to know why it is that I never seem to have a six when I need one most, but I'm sure disappointed that I don't have one for this chapter. Thanks for sharing and it's certainly worth the wait!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Your honorable mention is better than the SIX, my friend! I appreciate your following this, and I'm glad you enjoy it.
Comment from dmt1967
Here is my problem. You changed Zora's sex a few times. This will be confusing to readers who don't know about non identity people and I'm not sure but I think they prefer them and they. Readers will mark you down unless you explain or readers will give you fives because they don't care. This is a great story if not a bit confusing. Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Here is my problem. You changed Zora's sex a few times. This will be confusing to readers who don't know about non identity people and I'm not sure but I think they prefer them and they. Readers will mark you down unless you explain or readers will give you fives because they don't care. This is a great story if not a bit confusing. Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I will not defend my work to you because it is not only beneath me but also against the rules of FS. Instead, I will only try to explain that if you had followed this saga from the beginning and not tried to review it midway, you would have known it had nothing to do with non-identity people????? and everything to do with a deaf woman and her brother trying to fight against the system of a communist Russia. I would suggest you get a good night's sleep and perhaps read from the beginning or, in a more POSITIVE world--do not read it at all. I thank you immensely for your review and words of concern for my writing. Blessings, my friend.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Your dialogue was well-written and it moved the storyline well.
I think I would have liked to read about her walk in the tunnel. I like descriptive detail, but that's just me.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Your dialogue was well-written and it moved the storyline well.
I think I would have liked to read about her walk in the tunnel. I like descriptive detail, but that's just me.
Nice job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thank you, for your review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was a great chapter, John. I enjoyed reading it. There
was a lot to be covered. The action towards the end was
well thought out. It seemed Zora and Luka know each other
well enough to engage it what seemed to be much disagreement.
But, they probably do that because they care for each other a lot.
They each know just where to draw the line. Interesting that
Zora forgot about not letting Lev know she knew about him. I saw
several ways future writing of this book could proceed.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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This was a great chapter, John. I enjoyed reading it. There
was a lot to be covered. The action towards the end was
well thought out. It seemed Zora and Luka know each other
well enough to engage it what seemed to be much disagreement.
But, they probably do that because they care for each other a lot.
They each know just where to draw the line. Interesting that
Zora forgot about not letting Lev know she knew about him. I saw
several ways future writing of this book could proceed.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Jan, for the great review and the kind words! I appreciate your following.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh-oh. Zora got sloppy and let Lev know she knew him! Hopefully, he'd believe her if she said that Dmitri mentioned his name, which he didn't.
Such a complicated relationship between Luka and Zora. I was thinking she was pretty mean to someone she depended on so much. But I guess they have an understanding deeper than what they say to each other. I liked the hint at pyrophobia which makes sense. What doesn't make sense is the smoking but perhaps it's the nicotine she was craving.
Comments/Questions/Suggestions:
"You do know your starting to get under my skin, right?" (you're starting)
This is you're way of protecting me? (your way)
reached up for the bulb string. (is this to turn on the light?)
such a momentous occasion?" (period or exclamation but not question)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Oh-oh. Zora got sloppy and let Lev know she knew him! Hopefully, he'd believe her if she said that Dmitri mentioned his name, which he didn't.
Such a complicated relationship between Luka and Zora. I was thinking she was pretty mean to someone she depended on so much. But I guess they have an understanding deeper than what they say to each other. I liked the hint at pyrophobia which makes sense. What doesn't make sense is the smoking but perhaps it's the nicotine she was craving.
Comments/Questions/Suggestions:
"You do know your starting to get under my skin, right?" (you're starting)
This is you're way of protecting me? (your way)
reached up for the bulb string. (is this to turn on the light?)
such a momentous occasion?" (period or exclamation but not question)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Helen, for the great review. I've been losing track of my "yours" lately, which strikes me as a bizarre glitch in my writing because I know how to use them. Oh well, another draft to add to my list of editing--the "yours". I stink at editing and I'm so grateful for all of you. Anyway, thanks again.
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The truth is we all "stink" at editing our own work because we read our works through the filter of knowing what we intended to say. That's why we have each other here. 💖
Comment from Wendy G
A lot going on here. She slipped up when she used his name - hope that won't come back to bite her. Glad she's safe, for the moment at least. And a potential love story emerging. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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A lot going on here. She slipped up when she used his name - hope that won't come back to bite her. Glad she's safe, for the moment at least. And a potential love story emerging. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Wendy, for the great review. I appreciate your following and your encouragement. I'm happy you're enjoying it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This chapter was well worth the wait. I like the romance brewing. I really like that Luka and Zora have a history of knowing each other and yet she managed to take him by surprise with the kiss and the promise of more. I liked that you left it with Lev realizing she used his name and yet he's meeting her for the first time. Having said that, I'm pissed you left it at that. Lol. Great chapter and definitely worth the wait. Gretchen
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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This chapter was well worth the wait. I like the romance brewing. I really like that Luka and Zora have a history of knowing each other and yet she managed to take him by surprise with the kiss and the promise of more. I liked that you left it with Lev realizing she used his name and yet he's meeting her for the first time. Having said that, I'm pissed you left it at that. Lol. Great chapter and definitely worth the wait. Gretchen
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen, for the great review and the six stars! I appreciate your encouragement and enthusiasm for this saga. It's great to have you on board.
