Seeking to be
Sometimes we struggle for acknowledgement11 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 10 Word Poem writing prompt contest. Good word count but the connection between words can be improved. Nice presentation and imagery.
what I mean...
lost impressions of an existence washed away that I was
Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Excellent entry for the 10 Word Poem writing prompt contest. Good word count but the connection between words can be improved. Nice presentation and imagery.
what I mean...
lost impressions of an existence washed away that I was
Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Appreciate the review and sound advice.
Comment from Cathy M
The picture you chose belongs nicely with this poem. At times we all feel the loss of who we are and wondering if anyone will remember us when we are gone. You portray this very well in this poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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The picture you chose belongs nicely with this poem. At times we all feel the loss of who we are and wondering if anyone will remember us when we are gone. You portray this very well in this poem.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Acknowledgement can mean so much, even if it`s minor in scope it can be mountainous in life. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Are we looking for footprints in this image and poem? The picture displays a very beautiful image. So serene and peaceful. Good luck with your entry.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Are we looking for footprints in this image and poem? The picture displays a very beautiful image. So serene and peaceful. Good luck with your entry.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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preferably I would have liked to engage a clip that shows the ocean lapping up and making the prints disappear. You make a very good point. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from jaded831
Extremely poetic, here today gone tomorrow. All we can do is leave a bit of us behind like children, or poems, or other creations that are a part of who we are today. That way we stay alive.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Extremely poetic, here today gone tomorrow. All we can do is leave a bit of us behind like children, or poems, or other creations that are a part of who we are today. That way we stay alive.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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For sure. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Nicki Nance
A bit of a reality check. No matter how long we are gone, though, we will always have been. Thanks for putting the serious inevitably into a point to ponder.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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A bit of a reality check. No matter how long we are gone, though, we will always have been. Thanks for putting the serious inevitably into a point to ponder.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Tends to be my MO. Thank you for the fine review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We don't last forever and we should make the most of life, the sunsets are those precious gifts we are privileged to seen I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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We don't last forever and we should make the most of life, the sunsets are those precious gifts we are privileged to seen I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Appreciate the fine review.
Comment from tempeste
You had a :
pull the rug from under your feet
experience.
You invested good part of your life in "building" something .. in your case a family with your wife and you thought what you both accomplished was solid, secure and wondrous until one morning your wife tells you she wants her freedom because she has been unhappy for some years.
Her words washed your world away in a matter of minutes , just like waves wash away footprints on the sand..
After the initially shock that left you numb
I imagine you started asking yourself if you had been living in a dreamworld .. one needs to understand why one 's world stopped to exist.
I can only imagine how empty you must have felt. One minute you were on top of the world the next you were free falling.
I hope that is what you meant with your poem . It's a metaphor in regards to what happen between you and your wife.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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You had a :
pull the rug from under your feet
experience.
You invested good part of your life in "building" something .. in your case a family with your wife and you thought what you both accomplished was solid, secure and wondrous until one morning your wife tells you she wants her freedom because she has been unhappy for some years.
Her words washed your world away in a matter of minutes , just like waves wash away footprints on the sand..
After the initially shock that left you numb
I imagine you started asking yourself if you had been living in a dreamworld .. one needs to understand why one 's world stopped to exist.
I can only imagine how empty you must have felt. One minute you were on top of the world the next you were free falling.
I hope that is what you meant with your poem . It's a metaphor in regards to what happen between you and your wife.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Pretty awesome. Thanks.
Comment from Shirley Rebstock
Interesting observation and turning a picture into something to ponder. All things change, nothing ever stays the same. Well done, thank you for thought provoking writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Interesting observation and turning a picture into something to ponder. All things change, nothing ever stays the same. Well done, thank you for thought provoking writing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the fine review
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author,
I hear you in more ways than one. Your image together with those words just hit me in a place that I didn't expect.
A poignant write... good luck!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Hello Author,
I hear you in more ways than one. Your image together with those words just hit me in a place that I didn't expect.
A poignant write... good luck!
Susan :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Very much appreciated. Thank you
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is almost existential. When your footsteps are washed away by the sea, you no longer exist. Perfect picture and a great 10-word poem. Best wishes for the contest.
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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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This is almost existential. When your footsteps are washed away by the sea, you no longer exist. Perfect picture and a great 10-word poem. Best wishes for the contest.
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Right on. Thank you for reviewing.
