The Hotel Piano Player
Short story of about 800 words19 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like you well written story. Chickadees are beautiful, tiny birds. The man thought the sound of the flute sounded like a songbird. If he would only have known, it was a flute played by a young girl.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Like you well written story. Chickadees are beautiful, tiny birds. The man thought the sound of the flute sounded like a songbird. If he would only have known, it was a flute played by a young girl.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your five star review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This short story, The Hotel Piano Player, captures this nineteenth century slice of life in Wyoming and the sounds of the times. The slow blending, or possible appropriation of Shoshone music is acknowledged as Tom plays on.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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This short story, The Hotel Piano Player, captures this nineteenth century slice of life in Wyoming and the sounds of the times. The slow blending, or possible appropriation of Shoshone music is acknowledged as Tom plays on.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Music connects people in different ways. Your story portrayed a warm solitude between these two characters and I loved that aspect of the story.
"The eyes of the young man startled her a second time, but as a Shoshone, she did her best to betray no emotion."> Did you mean to say, betray? I loved it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Music connects people in different ways. Your story portrayed a warm solitude between these two characters and I loved that aspect of the story.
"The eyes of the young man startled her a second time, but as a Shoshone, she did her best to betray no emotion."> Did you mean to say, betray? I loved it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reviewing. I will take a second look.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
An interesting entry for the - Alone writing contest.
I like how two seemingly lonely people are connected by the sound of music. Not only does the melody haunt but the meeting of their eyes. An imaginative story. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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An interesting entry for the - Alone writing contest.
I like how two seemingly lonely people are connected by the sound of music. Not only does the melody haunt but the meeting of their eyes. An imaginative story. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a mystical story with a warm sentiment and eerie connotations. Music connects people to each other without the need for speech. Your sensitive words are delivered to the reader with an atmospheric ambiance of native America and I enjoyed the peek into another world here Crystie, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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This is a mystical story with a warm sentiment and eerie connotations. Music connects people to each other without the need for speech. Your sensitive words are delivered to the reader with an atmospheric ambiance of native America and I enjoyed the peek into another world here Crystie, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for a thoughtful review. Guess I have a tendency to live in at least two worlds at a time, ha ha.
Comment from lyenochka
Very artfully told! It makes me wonder about the relationship between Tom and Lomasi and how they almost connected through the universal language of music. But because of their different backgrounds, they remain alone. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Very artfully told! It makes me wonder about the relationship between Tom and Lomasi and how they almost connected through the universal language of music. But because of their different backgrounds, they remain alone. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for a superb, perceptive review. I like to think music overcomes a lot, but that century would have been difficult to do so, as you say.
Comment from pome lover
that was a lovely story, but, of course, I'd hoped the girl would stay and he would play her song again. However, I liked Tom's optimism.
But, to birds, I have chickadees that have a black head , but they also have 2 white places on their neck in front. Darling little birds.
Interesting story, well told.
Katharine
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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that was a lovely story, but, of course, I'd hoped the girl would stay and he would play her song again. However, I liked Tom's optimism.
But, to birds, I have chickadees that have a black head , but they also have 2 white places on their neck in front. Darling little birds.
Interesting story, well told.
Katharine
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your super nice review. So much we take for granted with multicultural sharing now would have run into social barriers in the nineteenth century.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
I wanted the piano player and the young Shoshone girl to meet at the end, but the image leaves the reader to wonder and even continue the story on their own.
I love the way you compare the flute to the chickadee.
Nice job.
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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I wanted the piano player and the young Shoshone girl to meet at the end, but the image leaves the reader to wonder and even continue the story on their own.
I love the way you compare the flute to the chickadee.
Nice job.
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This was great! I love all of the detail and the various elements that were working together.
One fine tune that you may consider:
Another tin cup was on top of his upright Fischer piano to hold tips
( the word 'another' threw me for a loop. Maybe a different word? Just my two cents.
Seems like there are gonna be a lot of great pieces in the Alone Contest.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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This was great! I love all of the detail and the various elements that were working together.
One fine tune that you may consider:
Another tin cup was on top of his upright Fischer piano to hold tips
( the word 'another' threw me for a loop. Maybe a different word? Just my two cents.
Seems like there are gonna be a lot of great pieces in the Alone Contest.
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I guess I meant to say there was another cup, not for drinking, that was made of tin. I'll go back and correct that.
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Okay makes sense!
