Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Joan,
Nice entry for the Roger's Refrain event in the Potlatch Poetry club.
Thanks for teaching this poetic form. And I wish you Good Luck in the contest.
Just wondering, would that ending couplet sound better like this?
"If we'd worked together we'd see
A safer world for you and me"

Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023

Thanks for the review, all the star and the editing, Kimbob. I will check that couplet out.
Jona

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I very much like the monorhyme form of Roger's Refrain. Of your poem, my favourite part is the second stanza. A tangled mind is such an interesting thing to consider, with all the manifold possible reasons. Cool poem. kay

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023

Hi Kay,
I am glad you liked it. Thanks for the nice review and generous rating.
Joan

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I applaud the effort, though does it meet therequirements of Roger's refrain. I will not check. It seems to match some of the criteria but red and blue in l1 then pink and blue in 4? ...???? Good luck.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023

Hey Tom,
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I though I had changed that. I will now.
Joan

reply by Tom Horonzy on 23-Jan-2023

Hoping it helps. Be well