Impending Threat
Violent mood15 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, this is intense -- what a 5-7-5! I can see why it won! Congratulations. Your chosen artwork, too, matches perfectly with your words. Well done indeed!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Wow, this is intense -- what a 5-7-5! I can see why it won! Congratulations. Your chosen artwork, too, matches perfectly with your words. Well done indeed!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you Dawn. Love your review, and thanks too for the congratulations. All appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
The great thing about this poem is that it applies to both human moods and the storms of nature's moods. The "bruises" do hint at the damage that some violent tempers inflict.
Congratulations on the win!!!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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The great thing about this poem is that it applies to both human moods and the storms of nature's moods. The "bruises" do hint at the damage that some violent tempers inflict.
Congratulations on the win!!!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you for this lovely review, thoughtful and insightful. Also for the congratulations, much appreciated as well.
Wendy
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Well Wendy, I can see why you won. Your text is a great size. Your message is enhanced by your use of great personification to describe the weather. You are a thoughtful writer. Your poems make sense literally and poetically. I enjoy reading your work. Congratulations!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Well Wendy, I can see why you won. Your text is a great size. Your message is enhanced by your use of great personification to describe the weather. You are a thoughtful writer. Your poems make sense literally and poetically. I enjoy reading your work. Congratulations!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Sandra! What an amazing review. I appreciate your lovely words, and also the six beautiful stars and the congratulations.
Wendy
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Nothing but the truth, my friend. I know good poetry when I see it. You are welcome.
Comment from jaded831
I feel the anger in the storm you creatively painted a picture of the moment, I felt one with the poem. A feeling that makes poetry real. A picture that adds to your words. Together they create a wonderful presentation.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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I feel the anger in the storm you creatively painted a picture of the moment, I felt one with the poem. A feeling that makes poetry real. A picture that adds to your words. Together they create a wonderful presentation.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for a lovely review. It was a close contest, and congratulations for your second placing.
Wendy
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, I gave you your 7 th vote.
There are several poems about the clime but yours definitely stood out :
Purple bruises darken
Another beating
That s what I call CREATIVE writing.
Ciao!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Ciao mystery poet, I gave you your 7 th vote.
There are several poems about the clime but yours definitely stood out :
Purple bruises darken
Another beating
That s what I call CREATIVE writing.
Ciao!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you for a wonderfully encouraging review, and a big thanks for your vote as well. Appreciated greatly.
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Your edit version is okay but personally: another beating
packed a stronger punch 😕
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I was a bit disappointed you edited but I m still glad your poem is doing well.
All the best😐
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Thank you. I was a bit unsure whether the first two lines flowed well enough, and whether it was sufficiently about nature in the third. Now you?ve made me unsure again. My insecurities are coming out now!
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I?m sorry .. it was not my intention to cause you stress ..
I loved the first version , the purple bruise and another beating connected so well and it is creative and unique
your second version is still a worthy edit, thought . 😝
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Thank you.😊
Comment from Sherry SG
This is a wonderfully expressed metaphor on nature and human nature. I found it very poignant and very creative indeed. Great work. And good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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This is a wonderfully expressed metaphor on nature and human nature. I found it very poignant and very creative indeed. Great work. And good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you Sherry! Thank you so much for your lovely review. Greatly appreciated!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 Nature writing prompt contest. Good syllables count but connection between lines can be improved.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Nice entry for the 5-7-5 Nature writing prompt contest. Good syllables count but connection between lines can be improved.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thank you Gypsy. You are right, and I have changed it slightly, to smooth it.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Storms can look like a bruised cloud. Nature in summer can be unpredictable. Either it is raining, sunshine, windy, stormy, or just plain hot (you could fry an egg). If the air is steamy the storms are brewing. Like your comparison to the weather.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Storms can look like a bruised cloud. Nature in summer can be unpredictable. Either it is raining, sunshine, windy, stormy, or just plain hot (you could fry an egg). If the air is steamy the storms are brewing. Like your comparison to the weather.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much Rosemary. I greatly appreciate your review!
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
EXCELLENT metaphors that provoke such dark imagery of both types of "beatings"****** (did you count them?). Wonderful & magnificent- literarily speaking, of course! You have my vote!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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EXCELLENT metaphors that provoke such dark imagery of both types of "beatings"****** (did you count them?). Wonderful & magnificent- literarily speaking, of course! You have my vote!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much Ida! I greatly value the six star rating, as well as your insightful comments.
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my pleasure
Comment from L. Kalere
Well done mystery writer. The metaphor is excellent... angry, bruises, beating. Even the title was well thought out. The photo was also a wise choice. Loved every bit of it. Congrats
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Well done mystery writer. The metaphor is excellent... angry, bruises, beating. Even the title was well thought out. The photo was also a wise choice. Loved every bit of it. Congrats
Linda
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much Linda, for your wonderful six stars, and very encouraging words of support. Greatly appreciated!
