Unsheltered
a sonnet24 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Melissa, when a poet writes from the heart there is something stirring the memories and those memories are shared in words. This is not autobiographical but a memory. :) We all have them. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Melissa, when a poet writes from the heart there is something stirring the memories and those memories are shared in words. This is not autobiographical but a memory. :) We all have them. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you so very much Jose!! I appreciate it, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
I can feel the heaviness of the grief and pain in this poem. I'm glad to see it's not autobiographical. I like that the final couplet summarizes the entire poem. Good rhythm and rhymes throughout. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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I can feel the heaviness of the grief and pain in this poem. I'm glad to see it's not autobiographical. I like that the final couplet summarizes the entire poem. Good rhythm and rhymes throughout. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Hello Carol. Thank you for your insightful comments on this heavy verse. So appreciate it.
Melissa
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I was surprised that Jim didn't include nature as a common topic, of poetry but maybe it's mostly used within the other topics metaphorically. Anyway, I enjoyed your writing. Carol
Comment from Pantygynt
Did I say that? What an inspired comment Lol. Anyway this one examines grief closely and uses pathetic fallacy to heighten the experience. It is much easier to be grief-stricken in the rain than it is when the sun is shining,
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Did I say that? What an inspired comment Lol. Anyway this one examines grief closely and uses pathetic fallacy to heighten the experience. It is much easier to be grief-stricken in the rain than it is when the sun is shining,
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Yes, you said that about two years ago and I haven't forgotten it. Some of my reviews said you should have added humor as another category. :). Thank you, dear Jim!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I think I'd have to agree with Jim, in fact religion covers a broad area, now one would have to include, environment, binary sexuality, indigenous proclamation, feminism etc. this is, as always a beautifully written sonnet piece. dear Melissa, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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I think I'd have to agree with Jim, in fact religion covers a broad area, now one would have to include, environment, binary sexuality, indigenous proclamation, feminism etc. this is, as always a beautifully written sonnet piece. dear Melissa, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy. It was a heavy write, but it was where my pen took me ;). I appreciate your comments!
Melissa
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I know the feeling Melissa.
Comment from Ulla
I agree with Jim, and you have encompassed it so very well in this beautiful Sonnet, Melissa. The Sonnet is by far my favourite poetry form. I wished, I had a six to give you which it so clearly deserves. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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I agree with Jim, and you have encompassed it so very well in this beautiful Sonnet, Melissa. The Sonnet is by far my favourite poetry form. I wished, I had a six to give you which it so clearly deserves. Ulla xx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much Ulla. Like I told Gloria... it is a heavy write, but it was where my pen led me. :). Hopefully, I'll write a brighter sonnet soon. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, Unsheltered, has the proper formatting and finds the poet in the midst of grief, feeling the universe's tears flooding the present, which seems then to be all there is left.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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This sonnet, Unsheltered, has the proper formatting and finds the poet in the midst of grief, feeling the universe's tears flooding the present, which seems then to be all there is left.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you Bill. I appreciate your review! :)
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is excellent and further, it falls within the confines of what your teacher taught you in your class. It deals with grief and loss, two essential feelings to write poetry about.
Thanks for sharing what you have learned in class. I hope you gain perspectives you can live by in your life as well as a writer of poetry.
Jesse
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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This is excellent and further, it falls within the confines of what your teacher taught you in your class. It deals with grief and loss, two essential feelings to write poetry about.
Thanks for sharing what you have learned in class. I hope you gain perspectives you can live by in your life as well as a writer of poetry.
Jesse
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you Jesse. I appreciate your review! :)
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
You've written about grief and pain in sonnet form, comparing them to a storm, and how the rain is falling down on your unprotected head.
I have experienced loss, but time heals. The sun has returned and gray skies have skipped out into the Atlantic. I let them go.
As soon as I read your last line, and those last four words, "rhythm of the rain", I remembered the song by The Cascades from my teenage years, and the girl who broke my young heart in 1965.
https://youtu.be/BvDp9B4YqfQ
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Hi Melissa,
You've written about grief and pain in sonnet form, comparing them to a storm, and how the rain is falling down on your unprotected head.
I have experienced loss, but time heals. The sun has returned and gray skies have skipped out into the Atlantic. I let them go.
As soon as I read your last line, and those last four words, "rhythm of the rain", I remembered the song by The Cascades from my teenage years, and the girl who broke my young heart in 1965.
https://youtu.be/BvDp9B4YqfQ
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Hello KB. Thank you so much. I plan to listen to The Cascades... I'm sorry that your heart was broken!!! I DO appreciate your take on this verse.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A wonderful Sonnet about grief and I can identify with these words Melissa. We often as poets align tears with the falling rain and there is a magical sparkle in your words with a glimmer of hope for those suffering deep grief that it will be washed away with the rain. Fine metre and rhymes, a perfectly formed Sonnet from a talented pen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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A wonderful Sonnet about grief and I can identify with these words Melissa. We often as poets align tears with the falling rain and there is a magical sparkle in your words with a glimmer of hope for those suffering deep grief that it will be washed away with the rain. Fine metre and rhymes, a perfectly formed Sonnet from a talented pen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, Dolly. I am sorry that you are acquainted with grief. So appreciate your thoughts on this one!
Melissa
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I think that none of us escape it in the end, thank you for your kind words Melissa, love Dolly x x x
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice sonnet, Melissa. I would add humor to Jim's list. It appears that the grief that you portray is the result of a lost love or the passing of someone close.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Very nice sonnet, Melissa. I would add humor to Jim's list. It appears that the grief that you portray is the result of a lost love or the passing of someone close.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, Paul. I hope you are unacquainted with grief. So appreciate your thoughts on this one!
Melissa
