They were murdered!
I have known 3 who were murdered.41 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting article. I wonder how many of us know someone who was murdered? My great uncle and cousin were almost certainly murdered. They are hard to forget, especially the abused wives as you noted. Your writing is good and I saw only 2 mistakes. In paragraph 6 you have an incomplete sentence and in many of your paragraphs you fail to have one sentence follow the next. Paragraphs are like trains. Each sentence tags along behind the next with just one space between them.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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This is a really interesting article. I wonder how many of us know someone who was murdered? My great uncle and cousin were almost certainly murdered. They are hard to forget, especially the abused wives as you noted. Your writing is good and I saw only 2 mistakes. In paragraph 6 you have an incomplete sentence and in many of your paragraphs you fail to have one sentence follow the next. Paragraphs are like trains. Each sentence tags along behind the next with just one space between them.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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Thank you Carol for your comments. The incomplete sentence should have had a semi-colon. I corrected.
I disagree with how I separated my sentences. Most are separated for impact. but I appreciate your thoughts
Mary
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting article. I wonder how many of us know someone who was murdered? My great uncle and cousin were almost certainly murdered. They are hard to forget, especially the abused wives as you noted. Your writing is good and I saw only 2 mistakes. In paragraph 6 you have an incomplete sentence and in many of your paragraphs you fail to have one sentence follow the next. Paragraphs are like trains. Each sentence tags along behind the next with just one space between them.
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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This is a really interesting article. I wonder how many of us know someone who was murdered? My great uncle and cousin were almost certainly murdered. They are hard to forget, especially the abused wives as you noted. Your writing is good and I saw only 2 mistakes. In paragraph 6 you have an incomplete sentence and in many of your paragraphs you fail to have one sentence follow the next. Paragraphs are like trains. Each sentence tags along behind the next with just one space between them.
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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thank you
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Did you live in a large city when these incidents happened? Sounds like you had several who died close together. I hope they were solved so people could move on and there was closure. Sad when you know the person(s), too, and you have to write their story.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Did you live in a large city when these incidents happened? Sounds like you had several who died close together. I hope they were solved so people could move on and there was closure. Sad when you know the person(s), too, and you have to write their story.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you Rosemary for your review. Yes, Deacon and Cathy both lived in the city, while the office manager lived in the suburb.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a sad review of the murders of people with whom you are familiar. What makes them worse is that there was never any justice for them. I can see how their deaths would haunt you.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This is a sad review of the murders of people with whom you are familiar. What makes them worse is that there was never any justice for them. I can see how their deaths would haunt you.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Mary, I appreciate your review and comments.
Best regards,
Mary
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story. I like crime and drama stories.
These victims still live in your mind, thank you for sharing their story. It's very sad, and unfortunately, it happens a lot in our country.
I worked with victims of abuse, it's very hard to break the cycle. Like Cathy didn't have anybody else.
It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed reading your story. I like crime and drama stories.
These victims still live in your mind, thank you for sharing their story. It's very sad, and unfortunately, it happens a lot in our country.
I worked with victims of abuse, it's very hard to break the cycle. Like Cathy didn't have anybody else.
It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you Gypsy for your review and very kind comments.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from royowen
How fascinating that these folk died in such interesting circumstances, I can remember quite a few people that would have been similar to these folk. In many ways. What an interesting and incredible situations for these guys Mary. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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How fascinating that these folk died in such interesting circumstances, I can remember quite a few people that would have been similar to these folk. In many ways. What an interesting and incredible situations for these guys Mary. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you Roy, I appreciate your response to my story.
Blessings
Mary
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Most welcome
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a horrifying story. I can't imagine knowing of someone personally and they end up murdered. I'm so sorry Cathy was never found.
That's a very nice prom picture of Rose and Deacon. I had to look twice because my prom gown was white and looked exactly like the dress Rose is wearing. I also wore similar shoes.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This is a horrifying story. I can't imagine knowing of someone personally and they end up murdered. I'm so sorry Cathy was never found.
That's a very nice prom picture of Rose and Deacon. I had to look twice because my prom gown was white and looked exactly like the dress Rose is wearing. I also wore similar shoes.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Annmuma
This essay left me with a feeling of 'unease'. Maybe it is the unsolved murders; maybe it is the ability for some people to close the door on those who are gone regardless of how they went; maybe it is the haunting remembering of these three horrible events. I do know it is the presentation that got my attention. Well done. ann
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This essay left me with a feeling of 'unease'. Maybe it is the unsolved murders; maybe it is the ability for some people to close the door on those who are gone regardless of how they went; maybe it is the haunting remembering of these three horrible events. I do know it is the presentation that got my attention. Well done. ann
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Ann, I appreciate your reviewing and comments.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Terry Broxson
Mary, this site is, of course about writing. You have written a most compelling story. As I read it, I thought it was almost like coming upon a bad car wreck and not waiting to look. But I couldn't take my eyes off the page. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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Mary, this site is, of course about writing. You have written a most compelling story. As I read it, I thought it was almost like coming upon a bad car wreck and not waiting to look. But I couldn't take my eyes off the page. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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Thank you Terry, I appreciate your review and kind comments.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Bill Schott
This essay, They Were Murdered, is a chilling remembrance of people you knew, who were victims of murder. What a burden to bear, that people you knew were never avenged for what they suffered.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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This essay, They Were Murdered, is a chilling remembrance of people you knew, who were victims of murder. What a burden to bear, that people you knew were never avenged for what they suffered.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Bill. I appreciate your thoughtfulness.
Best wishes,
Mary
