Bubby
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 " Bubby: Chapter 1-Part 1"A new friend teaches Cody many lessons.
27 total reviews
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
I'm like many others, it took me a second look to see that a dog was narrating the story.
I loved the way you had him describe his day hunting for food and running free.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I'm like many others, it took me a second look to see that a dog was narrating the story.
I loved the way you had him describe his day hunting for food and running free.
Nice job.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from eliz100
I enjoyed reading your story. It took me a minute to figure out the narrator was a dog. I have not read other works of yours but I am glad I'm starting at the beginning of this one. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading your story. It took me a minute to figure out the narrator was a dog. I have not read other works of yours but I am glad I'm starting at the beginning of this one. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from jmdg1954
I am a dog lover. We currently have three and recall only a few years in my lifetime of not having a pooch under our roof.
I look forward to reading the ensuing chapters.
John
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I am a dog lover. We currently have three and recall only a few years in my lifetime of not having a pooch under our roof.
I look forward to reading the ensuing chapters.
John
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Brett,
Well, a new character to write about, and a four footed one at that. Nice. I love dogs. I would imagine that as long as he was able to hunt for himself, he could do OK. If Bubby is a Lab though, it seems their hind quarters give them fits after a few years and running might be a problem. I look forward to seeing where this goes. Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Brett,
Well, a new character to write about, and a four footed one at that. Nice. I love dogs. I would imagine that as long as he was able to hunt for himself, he could do OK. If Bubby is a Lab though, it seems their hind quarters give them fits after a few years and running might be a problem. I look forward to seeing where this goes. Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the comments and the review.
Comment from Jim Wile
Nice first chapter. I didn't realize it was about a dog until the fifth paragraph. It was a pleasant surprise to learn this first person account is by a dog. This was very well-written with good description.
I didn't understand the first paragraph, though. What does CEC stand for (Chuck E Cheese, perhaps?), and if this story is not to be about this other story you mention, is there a good reason to mention it at all in your opening paragraph?
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Nice first chapter. I didn't realize it was about a dog until the fifth paragraph. It was a pleasant surprise to learn this first person account is by a dog. This was very well-written with good description.
I didn't understand the first paragraph, though. What does CEC stand for (Chuck E Cheese, perhaps?), and if this story is not to be about this other story you mention, is there a good reason to mention it at all in your opening paragraph?
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Is this to be a story of a wild dog or a dog that simply likes to roam? I enjoyed reading your story; I enjoy all animal stories. There should be more contests concerning animals on this site.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Is this to be a story of a wild dog or a dog that simply likes to roam? I enjoyed reading your story; I enjoy all animal stories. There should be more contests concerning animals on this site.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is my first exposure to your storytelling. Because of my older eyes, I usually select posts with a larger font. However, expanding the computer screen allowed me to enjoy what appears to be the beginning of an interesting novel. I enjoy dog stories and look forward to the adventures of this adventurous pooch.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is my first exposure to your storytelling. Because of my older eyes, I usually select posts with a larger font. However, expanding the computer screen allowed me to enjoy what appears to be the beginning of an interesting novel. I enjoy dog stories and look forward to the adventures of this adventurous pooch.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
How long of a siesta is a forty wink one? LOL. And as always, even in a short piece of prose you have enough descriptive sentences to write a how-to book. And a "happy dance" could be talking about many things, like Bubby, about to pee his pants as he dances a little jig. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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How long of a siesta is a forty wink one? LOL. And as always, even in a short piece of prose you have enough descriptive sentences to write a how-to book. And a "happy dance" could be talking about many things, like Bubby, about to pee his pants as he dances a little jig. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Always appreciate your comments and the rev8ew.
Comment from karenina
Hey, I'm new on your "fan-train" but that's Cody, isn't it? Can I assume (wish, hope, beg, plead, cajole, etc) that at some point along the way this clever and quite intelligent canine (who knows the likes of the CEC for goodness sake!)--will meet up with Cody and I'll get to know a bit more about this oh so popular character I've now heard of but came late to the party to get to know???
Also--can I write a run-on sentence or WHAT????
Does this (witty) sentence need a tweak in punctuation?
" I suppose you would have to live under a rock not to be or be a charter member of the FanStory CEC. "
I was absent from school on all punctuation lessons so I'd just throw in a dash (a lazy crazy trick)---but you'll likely know just what to insert between "not to be" and "or be a charter member..."
One rain day here soon I'm going to go back and read more about Cody.
(I have a small matter of healing from falling buttocks over tea-kettle down my cellar stairs and breaking bones which are occupying my time right now--UGH!)
Totally enjoyable! (Your story, not my fall)
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hey, I'm new on your "fan-train" but that's Cody, isn't it? Can I assume (wish, hope, beg, plead, cajole, etc) that at some point along the way this clever and quite intelligent canine (who knows the likes of the CEC for goodness sake!)--will meet up with Cody and I'll get to know a bit more about this oh so popular character I've now heard of but came late to the party to get to know???
Also--can I write a run-on sentence or WHAT????
Does this (witty) sentence need a tweak in punctuation?
" I suppose you would have to live under a rock not to be or be a charter member of the FanStory CEC. "
I was absent from school on all punctuation lessons so I'd just throw in a dash (a lazy crazy trick)---but you'll likely know just what to insert between "not to be" and "or be a charter member..."
One rain day here soon I'm going to go back and read more about Cody.
(I have a small matter of healing from falling buttocks over tea-kettle down my cellar stairs and breaking bones which are occupying my time right now--UGH!)
Totally enjoyable! (Your story, not my fall)
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Much appreciate your comments and the review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
I like the sound of this coming story, and particularly that it is from the perspective of the wild dog, describing his surroundings vividly and his intuitive fear of humans. Will Cody appear in the story? I guess so as otherwise you would put an image of a dog. The writing is interesting, and well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I like the sound of this coming story, and particularly that it is from the perspective of the wild dog, describing his surroundings vividly and his intuitive fear of humans. Will Cody appear in the story? I guess so as otherwise you would put an image of a dog. The writing is interesting, and well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
