Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This sometimes happens in families and many relationships manage to survive despite the family interventions, look at Romeo and Juliet. Well chosen, powerful words here and your clever acrostic could have been for Romeo and Juliet, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023

Thank you, I enjoy trying this form, and the help I receive, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm so glad your compassionate heart paid tribute to these young people in love. I hope they can be together and mature in love together and convince their parents that their love will overcome all obstacles.
Punctuation suggestions:
Reigns, yet bonded in mem'ries truth (memory's)
Impaled with words of truths neglect (truth's)
Pure, these heart's then coming of age (hearts)
Needs, now confuse two heart's in pain (hearts)

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023

Thank you so very much as always, I like trying this form and I am glad you are here to help me, very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

This is tried attempt February 1/2023.
When two people are in love it sad when the folks try to keep them apart
Hearts get broken in the end for one reason or another,
It is a shame you didn't know more.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you very much, yes, it is sad when this happens, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

reply by country ranch writer on 01-Feb-2023

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Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

This is tried attempt February 1/2023.
When two people are in love it sad when the folks try to keep them apart
Hearts get broken in the end for one reason or another,
It is a shame you didn't know more.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your poem, Kahpot. The image and
color scheme were perfect. I liked how you formatted the first
letter of each line. Your lines read well with great imagery. It
seemed to me those parents caused more harm than good
with their demands to keep the two apart. This was a sad story
of how love hurts many times.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you very much, these two combined forms take some time, but to me are a learning tool, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I understand the poem in full, however I would not have ended line one with embrace, and again to start line two, but perhaps it demanded such form as I see you did it again and again. Then, in your notes you explained,.. "I believe in the loop form that the fist and last word of the POEM should be the same, whereas your poetic license used repetitive words in many lines.
Lastly, the correct spelling is reigns, not riegns. No ill intent intended.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thanks tom, the requirement for the loop form as a single form is that each line starts with the same word that finishes the previous line, the acrostic form requires that each line starts with the letters that spell the title, in my notes I explained that I believe that to complete the loop form that the first and last words of the poem (as a whole) are normally the same, thanks for the spelling heads up, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

I love that you combined two types of poetry! I can't even manage one. I am glad I read it. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you so very much, and yes you can, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A very clever post indeed Kimbob, the pain of the heart can be quite distressing, you have created a most cunning acrostic, combined with looping makes it so much more complex, and a most worthy post dear friend, excellent job, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you Roy, I try to be clever though never sure if I succeed, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

reply by royowen on 02-Feb-2023

Well done

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a sad, pull them in many ways. First, that parents would keep these young people apart when they were so in love. Secondly, it would be wrong and it is wrong for parents to act this way. Sometimes when they do things, just try to separate the young people. It only makes the young people more determined to do what they're wanting to do. Patricia.

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 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023

Thank you very much, parents do need to ask more questions before doubting their children, as always very much appreciated****kahpot