Night Light
five/seven/five poem about swans12 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Ah, I can sense the romance in your tone. An eloquent piece of writing cleverly contained in so few words.
A great contender for the competition. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Ah, I can sense the romance in your tone. An eloquent piece of writing cleverly contained in so few words.
A great contender for the competition. Best of luck.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from zanya
What an interesting reflection on these beautiful creatures -two elegant swans - yes, their feathery coats seem to glow 'under moonlit '-an appropriate title
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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What an interesting reflection on these beautiful creatures -two elegant swans - yes, their feathery coats seem to glow 'under moonlit '-an appropriate title
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Karyn2
Gorgeous use of alliteration here and soft assonance in word choices makes for a gently soothing poem. Beautiful presentation too! There are so many great ones in this contest but I think this is a strong entry!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Gorgeous use of alliteration here and soft assonance in word choices makes for a gently soothing poem. Beautiful presentation too! There are so many great ones in this contest but I think this is a strong entry!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this lovely review. Yes, there are some really good ones in this contest.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-stated Nature 5-7-5 entry. The text is a good size. I like that it is centered on the visual. It makes the text more prominent. The message is clearly presented and easily understood. I wish the entire poem was larger. I feel the presentation is better when a larger poem box and visual are used.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This is a well-stated Nature 5-7-5 entry. The text is a good size. I like that it is centered on the visual. It makes the text more prominent. The message is clearly presented and easily understood. I wish the entire poem was larger. I feel the presentation is better when a larger poem box and visual are used.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your constructive advice, and for this review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is beautiful Val from the excellent artwork and title to the lovely satori line and imagery. Great presentation with the white on black. Swans mate for life and you have given them a lovely summer night story.
Well done you.
Janet.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is beautiful Val from the excellent artwork and title to the lovely satori line and imagery. Great presentation with the white on black. Swans mate for life and you have given them a lovely summer night story.
Well done you.
Janet.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Janet. I believe we've met before years ago on a book. This review is special.
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I think we have met before Val and I was so happy to find your poem today. I haven?t written any JSF poems for awhile but yours was an inspiration to look into them again.
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Oh, Janet, that makes me very happy. CoContact me at any time.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Beautiful picture of the swans and well-chosen words to describe them. They are such beautiful birds and in the moonlight would present a graceful picture. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Beautiful picture of the swans and well-chosen words to describe them. They are such beautiful birds and in the moonlight would present a graceful picture. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this lovely review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Wendy G
They are beautiful and graceful, and yes they would glow in moonlight - an excellent choice of words. The accompanying photo is a great pairing with your words. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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They are beautiful and graceful, and yes they would glow in moonlight - an excellent choice of words. The accompanying photo is a great pairing with your words. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, I hope the "gracefulness" of this little piece works. Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent 5/7/5 nature poetry contest entry. Yes it would be true in the reflected light of the moon I can well believe that those beautiful white swans would glow, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is an excellent 5/7/5 nature poetry contest entry. Yes it would be true in the reflected light of the moon I can well believe that those beautiful white swans would glow, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Roy. Your reviews are always a "blessing"
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Thank you
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a lovely and flowing verse that is enhanced by your perfectly chosen artwork. The setting was well presented as was the use of the word 'gracefully' which added a soft texture. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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You have written a lovely and flowing verse that is enhanced by your perfectly chosen artwork. The setting was well presented as was the use of the word 'gracefully' which added a soft texture. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Funny, I really like that word too. Thank you for the very lovely review
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is very nice work. Swans are such elegant, regal creatures. I always picture them with English accents. But, that is because I am a strange duck.
This is a great entry for the 5/ 7/ 5 contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is very nice work. Swans are such elegant, regal creatures. I always picture them with English accents. But, that is because I am a strange duck.
This is a great entry for the 5/ 7/ 5 contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the funny review, and your kind words
