Positional Prayer
A small problem in old age30 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 25 syllables well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-It reads like a mini tanka.
-You establish the premise in the opening lines,
and the third line acts as a pivot showing
how arthritis has become a problem.
-The last line shows the result as
you now sit to pray.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 25 syllables well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-It reads like a mini tanka.
-You establish the premise in the opening lines,
and the third line acts as a pivot showing
how arthritis has become a problem.
-The last line shows the result as
you now sit to pray.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Pam. You have given a nice description of a tanka (I think).
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You are welcome. It is a description of a tanka, but I thought your poem resembled one. I thought that made it a really good poem instead of random lines.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A very natural rhyme and rhythm that does not sound forced or limited by the restricted word length. I am sure the value of praying is not diminished when you can't kneel.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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A very natural rhyme and rhythm that does not sound forced or limited by the restricted word length. I am sure the value of praying is not diminished when you can't kneel.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Sarah. I can kneel, but it is a tremendous struggle to get up.
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All best wishes!
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Yes, thanks very much!
Comment from JT traveller
Great, witty, short poem. There is nothing better than being able to laugh at oneself.
A great little dirty that speaks volumes as we all age and, the older we become, the faster the years pass.
I love this entry. Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great, witty, short poem. There is nothing better than being able to laugh at oneself.
A great little dirty that speaks volumes as we all age and, the older we become, the faster the years pass.
I love this entry. Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Jacqueline. Many of the things that I used to get upset about, I now laugh about.
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That's good 😊
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very interesting poem, showing ingenuity. Necessity being the mother of invention.
A lovely stance in this poem showing just how any challenge can be overcome through prayer. Sitting allows us to really lean into our prayer, it seems a wonderful solution. All the best.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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A very interesting poem, showing ingenuity. Necessity being the mother of invention.
A lovely stance in this poem showing just how any challenge can be overcome through prayer. Sitting allows us to really lean into our prayer, it seems a wonderful solution. All the best.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Marien. Sitting down, I can spend a little more time with The Big Guy.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem. This was a beautifully written poem, and touching . I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job with your rhyming pattern. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great poem. This was a beautifully written poem, and touching . I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job with your rhyming pattern. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Jacquelyn. Rhyming is my thing. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
Well, you did it... 25 words. And you managed to describe my poor old father who passed away on New Years Eve of 2019. He was 95 years old, and always knelt to pray before climbing into bed. Most times, I say my prayers as well. But I'm in bed while I do. And most times, I fall asleep praying. I hope the good Lord won't fall asleep listening to me mumbling.
Good Luck in the contest!
Blessings,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Hi Mystery Author,
Well, you did it... 25 words. And you managed to describe my poor old father who passed away on New Years Eve of 2019. He was 95 years old, and always knelt to pray before climbing into bed. Most times, I say my prayers as well. But I'm in bed while I do. And most times, I fall asleep praying. I hope the good Lord won't fall asleep listening to me mumbling.
Good Luck in the contest!
Blessings,
Kimbob
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Kimbob. I'll bet there's a poem about God falling asleep while listening to prayers. Are you going to write it, or do I have to?
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Go for it! I'd like to read it.
Comment from Aussie
God knows your frailties, he doesn't want you to suffer pain. I put hands together on pillow top. He knows I am not lazy, chronic pain and amputation stop me kneeling. Faith is the evidence of things not yet seen. Blessings, Kay...x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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God knows your frailties, he doesn't want you to suffer pain. I put hands together on pillow top. He knows I am not lazy, chronic pain and amputation stop me kneeling. Faith is the evidence of things not yet seen. Blessings, Kay...x
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Very nice review, Kay. I have an embarrassing question. Do you still have your amputation when you dream?
Comment from royowen
I can remember a lady saying to me after a church prayer meeting that with all the eloquent prayers offered up by articulate saints, she said she was inadequate verbally, I said to her, God listens to the eloquence of the heart, not the mouth. beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I can remember a lady saying to me after a church prayer meeting that with all the eloquent prayers offered up by articulate saints, she said she was inadequate verbally, I said to her, God listens to the eloquence of the heart, not the mouth. beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Roy. "...the eloquence of the heart" is a great phrase. I'll bet there is a poem there.
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Yep
Comment from Anne Johnston
I like your 25 Word poem, and that is just the way I feel. It doesn't matter what position we are in, the important thing is to pray. The Lord hears the words and prayers that come form our heart, whether kneeling, sitting, or walking around.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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I like your 25 Word poem, and that is just the way I feel. It doesn't matter what position we are in, the important thing is to pray. The Lord hears the words and prayers that come form our heart, whether kneeling, sitting, or walking around.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Anne. ",,,that come from the heart" is the key.
Comment from patcelaw
In 25 words, you have described exactly the position that I must take when I pray. My knees are bad when I get down on them. May you be blessed by the Lord for your prayers. Even if you can only sit and pray. Patricia
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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In 25 words, you have described exactly the position that I must take when I pray. My knees are bad when I get down on them. May you be blessed by the Lord for your prayers. Even if you can only sit and pray. Patricia
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Patricia, for the blessing. I need it.
