Some Seem So Real
An Octelle for Potlatch Poetry Club26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Yvonne,
Thanks for teaching the Octelle. I'll have to try it. One of my favorite poetic forms is the Octogram.
When it comes to dreams, I rarely can remember any. They flee as soon as I open my eyes. Where do they go? Is my memory that bad? What is the reason we can't remember a dream?
"Some dreams hang 'round when I awake" ... very few for me, I'm afraid. I often thought I'd like to turn one of my dreams into a story. Have there been any contests in Fanstory about dreams? Do you know?
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Hi Yvonne,
Thanks for teaching the Octelle. I'll have to try it. One of my favorite poetic forms is the Octogram.
When it comes to dreams, I rarely can remember any. They flee as soon as I open my eyes. Where do they go? Is my memory that bad? What is the reason we can't remember a dream?
"Some dreams hang 'round when I awake" ... very few for me, I'm afraid. I often thought I'd like to turn one of my dreams into a story. Have there been any contests in Fanstory about dreams? Do you know?
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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I'm sure there have been contests about dreams. I don't normally remember my dreams, but a few I have over the years. I wake up a lot laughing but don't know why. hahahaha
Comment from aryr
What an inspirational and educational octelle, damommy. It was both inspirational and educational because it taught us a lesson, a well learned lesson. I enjoyed the picture as well. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n hugs!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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What an inspirational and educational octelle, damommy. It was both inspirational and educational because it taught us a lesson, a well learned lesson. I enjoyed the picture as well. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n hugs!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thank you. Hope you are doing well. Keep in touch, please.
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You are so welcome, Yvonne. I will definitely keep in touch.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
So true Yvonne. Some dreams keep us wondering and asking why'? Your Octelle is smooth and flowing in what, to me, sounds like a difficult form. Could really associate with your topic, hope all is well for you. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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So true Yvonne. Some dreams keep us wondering and asking why'? Your Octelle is smooth and flowing in what, to me, sounds like a difficult form. Could really associate with your topic, hope all is well for you. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm doing good for an old lady. hahhah. Hope all is well with you. Keep in touch, please.
Comment from Nottoway
The poems you write just make sense!
It made me think of the many times I have awakened from a dream and the heart was happy at at memory of the past or aching for the possible.
I have relived police cases from my Air Force years (1982-1992). Some still bring a laugh and some never leave because there is a sadness because of what happened.
I recall waking up one time recently and laughing a hearty laugh. That was probably eight months ago and do not know who it was that gave me such a light-hearted moment.
Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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The poems you write just make sense!
It made me think of the many times I have awakened from a dream and the heart was happy at at memory of the past or aching for the possible.
I have relived police cases from my Air Force years (1982-1992). Some still bring a laugh and some never leave because there is a sadness because of what happened.
I recall waking up one time recently and laughing a hearty laugh. That was probably eight months ago and do not know who it was that gave me such a light-hearted moment.
Well done!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I wake up laughing a lot and never know what was so funny.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Yvonne,
I like having dreams. Lord knows what causes some of them, I have some pretty bizarre ones at times. I used to dream that the fishing season was going to open the next day and I wasn't ready for it and I was going to miss out on the Kings. I used to dream of the farm quite a bit. It was always built up a lot more than when I was there. I have a lot of dreams of being in the woods and confronting bears. Never just one, usually they seem to be everywhere. I know we all dream, I just wish I could recall them all. I wish I woke up laughing. It would start the day great I would think. Have a blessed evening. Sweet dreams gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hello Yvonne,
I like having dreams. Lord knows what causes some of them, I have some pretty bizarre ones at times. I used to dream that the fishing season was going to open the next day and I wasn't ready for it and I was going to miss out on the Kings. I used to dream of the farm quite a bit. It was always built up a lot more than when I was there. I have a lot of dreams of being in the woods and confronting bears. Never just one, usually they seem to be everywhere. I know we all dream, I just wish I could recall them all. I wish I woke up laughing. It would start the day great I would think. Have a blessed evening. Sweet dreams gal.
Tom
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reviewing. It's nice to wake up laughing, but I wish I knew what was funny. I wake myself up talking, too. hahahaha.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Those darned old dreams always have a tendency to do whatever they want. I can't ever seem to remember those I think I might have wanted to, but nightmarish ones I'd rather forget won't go away. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Those darned old dreams always have a tendency to do whatever they want. I can't ever seem to remember those I think I might have wanted to, but nightmarish ones I'd rather forget won't go away. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I wake up laughing and don't know what was funny! Darn.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello and good morning, Yvonne. You have done a really good job in crafting this Octelle with style and grace. It is a thoughtful write that pulls on my heartstrings. So well done!
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hello and good morning, Yvonne. You have done a really good job in crafting this Octelle with style and grace. It is a thoughtful write that pulls on my heartstrings. So well done!
Melissa
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from royowen
Some similarities with the triolet, however the personification is different, which makes it a little more pointed than other forms, it's funny what we call something that guides, almost like a smorgasbord of choice. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Some similarities with the triolet, however the personification is different, which makes it a little more pointed than other forms, it's funny what we call something that guides, almost like a smorgasbord of choice. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thank you. 😀
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Welcome
Comment from MissMerri
What a relatable poem you have written. It is probably an experience almost any of us could say we have known, but you have put it into a delightful form few of us could have accomplished. I am quite impressed. Your picture and color choices are excellent too, but the words seem too crowded. Perhaps a font that allows more space between the lines and a larger background would help. Just for appearance sake... nothing else. The words are what matter, I know.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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What a relatable poem you have written. It is probably an experience almost any of us could say we have known, but you have put it into a delightful form few of us could have accomplished. I am quite impressed. Your picture and color choices are excellent too, but the words seem too crowded. Perhaps a font that allows more space between the lines and a larger background would help. Just for appearance sake... nothing else. The words are what matter, I know.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I'll watch out for that font next time.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I rarely remember my dreams, but when I do, they are extremely interesting, and I wonder if there's a reason, I remember them. I enjoyed reading your entry and it caused me to pause and think.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I rarely remember my dreams, but when I do, they are extremely interesting, and I wonder if there's a reason, I remember them. I enjoyed reading your entry and it caused me to pause and think.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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I very seldom remember mine, but a few have stuck with me for years.
