A Baby Soldier Memoir/ 7
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Comment from irishauthorme
This is great narrative! As I read, I was right there with Dimitri and Lev.
You wrote a neat twist with Zora, she instinctively knew how to get to Lev.
Anyone who is offended by your craftsmanship should go piss up a rope.
Neanderthal grunts, primal ecstasy, wow!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
irish
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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This is great narrative! As I read, I was right there with Dimitri and Lev.
You wrote a neat twist with Zora, she instinctively knew how to get to Lev.
Anyone who is offended by your craftsmanship should go piss up a rope.
Neanderthal grunts, primal ecstasy, wow!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
irish
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Irish, for the great review! Lol, I never heard: go piss up a rope! Permission to use it! LOL. Thanks again, my friend.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes, things don't need to move forward, as we've been told, they need to dwell on the moment. How we get more of the whys and what-fors and how the feelings create them. And you do it so well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Sometimes, things don't need to move forward, as we've been told, they need to dwell on the moment. How we get more of the whys and what-fors and how the feelings create them. And you do it so well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Ric!! Your six is noted, and I love, love, love getting them from you and a few others here, as it will always tell me if I'm on the right or (write) track! Cheers, my friend. Thank you again, Ric!
Comment from lyenochka
Well for all the big talk that Dmitri dishes out, apparently, he's really a traumatized kid. (How old are Dmitri and Lev?) I liked the humorous talk about the Raggedy Ann/Andy dolls but I'm sure these are not in Ukraine or must have different names. And why did you choose a name like Francis? That's really not Slavic like Dmitri and Lev.
I wonder if Lev and Zora's father is behind the kidnappings.
By the way, did Zora ever explain how she knew Lev's name?
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Well for all the big talk that Dmitri dishes out, apparently, he's really a traumatized kid. (How old are Dmitri and Lev?) I liked the humorous talk about the Raggedy Ann/Andy dolls but I'm sure these are not in Ukraine or must have different names. And why did you choose a name like Francis? That's really not Slavic like Dmitri and Lev.
I wonder if Lev and Zora's father is behind the kidnappings.
By the way, did Zora ever explain how she knew Lev's name?
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Yes, much more will come out in the following few chapters. Hahaha! The story behind using the name Francis is a short one and one of the reasons why I had to kill him off quickly. That aside, my Nephew wanted me to use his name in one of my stories, so I had the idea to put him in this scene; whether he's going to appreciate the fact that he is already dead is another matter, lol.
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Lol. Your poor nephew deserves another character in another book!
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He took the death of his character well, Helen! Hahaha! He's a trooper!
Comment from Wendy G
My goodness. What a story! Dimitri is now next in line. for whatever corrupt practices are happening here, and that woman Lubora is in the middle of it all. Lev and Zora will be in equal danger. Well written. It really took a turn from teenage boy talk to life and death stuff.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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My goodness. What a story! Dimitri is now next in line. for whatever corrupt practices are happening here, and that woman Lubora is in the middle of it all. Lev and Zora will be in equal danger. Well written. It really took a turn from teenage boy talk to life and death stuff.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Wendy, thank you so much for the great review and comments. Yes, they are all in a bit of trouble now. Thank you for following.
Comment from kahpot
I am so very glad that this story is back, quite a humorous start, though a most intriguing finish, I like how the characters throughout your chapters are coming together, very well written an excellent read****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I am so very glad that this story is back, quite a humorous start, though a most intriguing finish, I like how the characters throughout your chapters are coming together, very well written an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hi' Kahpot! I'm so happy you are following and have caught up with this saga. It's nice to have you on board! Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Jay Squires
There's a Tom Sawyer feel about these two kids. You have a good handle on the psychology of upper-level teens. They have the ring of authenticity, and that's very important to me. That said, I think I'd like you to have developed the narrative about Francis a little more. Maybe it was Lev's response to Francis being killed. As soon as Dimitri changed the subject to his adolescent love affair, Francis took a back seat and we didn't hear more about it.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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There's a Tom Sawyer feel about these two kids. You have a good handle on the psychology of upper-level teens. They have the ring of authenticity, and that's very important to me. That said, I think I'd like you to have developed the narrative about Francis a little more. Maybe it was Lev's response to Francis being killed. As soon as Dimitri changed the subject to his adolescent love affair, Francis took a back seat and we didn't hear more about it.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Jay! I want to use this review to thank you for all the promotional hits you sent my way!. There is no bigger honor. I'm happy you're enjoying this, but I believe you have the sequence of events turned around. The scene with Francis came much after Dimitri's adolescent love affair. Francis's character was a flash in the pan so to speak to push forward the danger that they are all in at present. Thank you for all, Jay!
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Comment from karenina
Offended? I can't imagine why! This is teenage banter and no-holds-barred, for sure! (Besides, I love Zora's spunk!)
This entire story, much less this chapter, has more twists and turns than the roller coaster at Six Flags New England just down the road from me.
Thoroughly engaging! You leave me "EVERY TIME" anticipating the next chapter! Oh, man... We've got lots of action coming up now!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Offended? I can't imagine why! This is teenage banter and no-holds-barred, for sure! (Besides, I love Zora's spunk!)
This entire story, much less this chapter, has more twists and turns than the roller coaster at Six Flags New England just down the road from me.
Thoroughly engaging! You leave me "EVERY TIME" anticipating the next chapter! Oh, man... We've got lots of action coming up now!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you, my friend! Your stars and encouraging words are nothing short of inspiring and keep me focused on the task at hand.
That being said, I love Six Flags! It must be great with the grandkids to live so close to a theme park like that one.
Btw, I did visit Marks portfolio. He has quite a lot of talent and I'm going to fan him so I can follow his work. I like the way he thinks. Thank you again, Karenina!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love the banter between these two boys - lots of teenage fun:-) The word "friggin'" - did kids use it in the 1930s?
Well, things just keep getting more and more dangerous in this orphanage! Sounds like Dimitri is in trouble . . .
What happened to Zora? She was there waiting for Dimitri - did he go to her? Did he ignore her? Did she go away? She was there and then she wasn't. Or did I miss something?
I'm just curious because I've never written a series this long - do you start with an ending in your mind, or do you let it develop as you go?
Thanks for sharing, John.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I love the banter between these two boys - lots of teenage fun:-) The word "friggin'" - did kids use it in the 1930s?
Well, things just keep getting more and more dangerous in this orphanage! Sounds like Dimitri is in trouble . . .
What happened to Zora? She was there waiting for Dimitri - did he go to her? Did he ignore her? Did she go away? She was there and then she wasn't. Or did I miss something?
I'm just curious because I've never written a series this long - do you start with an ending in your mind, or do you let it develop as you go?
Thanks for sharing, John.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hi, Pam! Yes, Zora is still there and perhaps my lack of setting is to blame. They're all in the same sleeping quarters and Lev and Dimitri are across the room from her. Thank you for the great review and I love that you're following.
Comment from royowen
I like the comment of how the whore likes her men to be, the more "Man" smelly they are, the less she charges, and Dimitri is a little non plussed by that, heh heh, there is a lot of drama to this, it seems this is a tough world. Beautifully written John well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I like the comment of how the whore likes her men to be, the more "Man" smelly they are, the less she charges, and Dimitri is a little non plussed by that, heh heh, there is a lot of drama to this, it seems this is a tough world. Beautifully written John well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Roy for the great review. Yes, that was a fun scene to write. It did nothing for the storyline but I thought it essential to the chapter.
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Well done
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The setting is interesting and the suggestion of corruption and violence invites the reader to go on to the next episode. The conversation is authentic and credible between teenage boys.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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The setting is interesting and the suggestion of corruption and violence invites the reader to go on to the next episode. The conversation is authentic and credible between teenage boys.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for the kind review. I'm happy you're following this saga.
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Looking forward to newt episode!
