Love Played the Waiting Game
Rhymed love poem19 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That is so sad when "potential love can't bloom" because of the distance between a couple who are both very responsible to their duties in each one's sphere in life. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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That is so sad when "potential love can't bloom" because of the distance between a couple who are both very responsible to their duties in each one's sphere in life. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your super review.
Comment from royowen
Well done Crystie, an excellent post, written in pentameter and couplet rhyming you've written a most eloquent piece befitting of an entry in this love poem contest, beautifully consistent in flow, articulation and rhyme, good luck, blessing Roy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Well done Crystie, an excellent post, written in pentameter and couplet rhyming you've written a most eloquent piece befitting of an entry in this love poem contest, beautifully consistent in flow, articulation and rhyme, good luck, blessing Roy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your super review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
An interesting analysis of barriers which seem to stand in the way of love.It seems that in this case the person is too concerned about his( I'm guessing it's a man) status and how he appears to others. If he could forget this in the cover of darkness, love could grow.
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An interesting analysis of barriers which seem to stand in the way of love.It seems that in this case the person is too concerned about his( I'm guessing it's a man) status and how he appears to others. If he could forget this in the cover of darkness, love could grow.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and writing. Actually, there is more to this story than could be included here. Luckily the wait is almost over, and things should start moving this year.
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All best wishes from UK!
Comment from Frank Malley
In "Love Played the Waiting Game," author Cookie describes being enamored by how a man presents himself; he shares a majesty of grace and being with a hunting heron, and the man's business acumen makes him successful but keeps him, so far, too distant for a spark of attraction to be struck. I think abstractions like "responsibilities we hold..." are not as effective as examples of those responsibilities as in 'forms to fill, contracts to annotate.'
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In "Love Played the Waiting Game," author Cookie describes being enamored by how a man presents himself; he shares a majesty of grace and being with a hunting heron, and the man's business acumen makes him successful but keeps him, so far, too distant for a spark of attraction to be struck. I think abstractions like "responsibilities we hold..." are not as effective as examples of those responsibilities as in 'forms to fill, contracts to annotate.'
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your kind review. Hmm, I don't know if he works with contracts, ha ha.
Comment from w.j.debi
Long distance relationships can be tricky and you do an excellent job showing us all that gets in the way. Excellent symbolism with the use of the heron and how carefully it plans.
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Long distance relationships can be tricky and you do an excellent job showing us all that gets in the way. Excellent symbolism with the use of the heron and how carefully it plans.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your stellar review.
Comment from BermyBye50
Crystie,
This is a beautiful entry in the Love Poem Poetry Contest. The two stanzas are beautifully rhymed and the imagery infused in your poetic lines are a perfect fit for the theme.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Crystie,
This is a beautiful entry in the Love Poem Poetry Contest. The two stanzas are beautifully rhymed and the imagery infused in your poetic lines are a perfect fit for the theme.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your super six-star review. That just made my night.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is beautifully written with the hope of a new tryst!
Your grasp of the English language is magnificent, and if may be so bold as to say, poetic.
Very nicely done! This is a six all day long for me!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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This is beautifully written with the hope of a new tryst!
Your grasp of the English language is magnificent, and if may be so bold as to say, poetic.
Very nicely done! This is a six all day long for me!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for an excellent review and six stars. I am honored.
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Well earned. You are very good!
Comment from Karyn2
This speaks of a lover that is distant and focused on other important aspirations. The poet hoped for more and noticed with desire his voice, his movements his way of dealing with people. His authority, drive and expertise much like the Herron that knows what it wants and goes after it's prey. Strong and mesmerising. But the heron like the lover is in flight, away and distant unable to be tamed or attained and love can not blossom where it has no chance to bloom. Your words express longing and sense of loss but perhaps acceptance too that that the lover's priorities are different. I liked the Herron analogy and imagery depicted throughout and reference to the waters at the end. Really cleverly and creatively written.
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This speaks of a lover that is distant and focused on other important aspirations. The poet hoped for more and noticed with desire his voice, his movements his way of dealing with people. His authority, drive and expertise much like the Herron that knows what it wants and goes after it's prey. Strong and mesmerising. But the heron like the lover is in flight, away and distant unable to be tamed or attained and love can not blossom where it has no chance to bloom. Your words express longing and sense of loss but perhaps acceptance too that that the lover's priorities are different. I liked the Herron analogy and imagery depicted throughout and reference to the waters at the end. Really cleverly and creatively written.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for your six star review. I think you did a good job reading into this. There is always more to the story, ha ha.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a magical, well written and talented write Crystie, I adored your word choices about these birds and in particular the heron. One suggestion for this word (flow'ring) I would replace the (e) with an apostrophe to reduce the syllable count. A fine metre and sentiment, a well earned six from me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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This is a magical, well written and talented write Crystie, I adored your word choices about these birds and in particular the heron. One suggestion for this word (flow'ring) I would replace the (e) with an apostrophe to reduce the syllable count. A fine metre and sentiment, a well earned six from me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for the six stars and the suggestion. I thought about doing just that and then decided, oh well, maybe someone will suggest that after all is said and done.
